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| "A Sad Live Deserves More" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 19:12 EDT
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I really like this story and I cann`t wait to read more oh yeahand I am sorryto rush you but you said the next chapter would be up in a day or two and it has been 5 days now heck you could have 2 chapters up by now oh well I guess update whenever and sorry again for rushing you
| Reviewed By: Kai3anime [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2007 20:59 EDT
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This is awesome please UPDATE soon.
| Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 14:39 EDT
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I really like this story I am just wondering who will be there teammate and also your saying Naruto is related to Sasuke so will that get out or will it e kept quiet meaning Sasuke won`t know I guess it would be cool if he finds out just to see what he does and what Sakura thinks about it oh well I just hope that you will update real soon because I cann`t wait to read more so update soon and keep up the good work
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 14:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, I guess you put this story up somewhere else first (Fanfic.net I guess first). Whatever. I definitely thought this story was pretty cool when I read through it (and Haku as a true Hermaphrodite is pretty awesome to me; point though, it's pretty rare to be a hermaphrodite to some degree and still be fertile. In fact, it's under one in a billion odds I think) Still, it's too COOL! Plus Naruto not being such an idiot, goes automatically. In canon, Naruto doesn't like guy on guy action (note manga issue 347, Naruto looks Horrified when he sees Konohamaru doing his Double Knockout guys jutsu), though I do think it's more akin to how he acted earlier in the series, what you have. Point is, to me, Naruto seems quite intelligent, but he always holds back so people don't get hurt because of him. And you show this quite well. If he shows his true skills at any time, the council would think it's because of Kyuubi taking over, and order his execution. So, I love your characterization of Naruto. Still, there's more to Haku than what you've shown. Please, think about Haku's personality, and how you think he/she would act, think, that sort of thing. Show some natural fears and more of his/her sweet personality. It's there, and it is honest. Alright, I'm out of ideas for suggestions, so All I got to say is this story rocks. Later man.
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