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Reviewed By: cactuspd [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2007 04:38 CDT
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finally read chapter 5! possesive arent we? but, gosh! inside the workplace? in an office? and under the desk too! i didnt know one could even do that! renji must be pretty stupid or pre occupied not to have noticed! keep it up man. so, when will you post chapter 6?
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Title: (^_^)
Reviewed By: Taiyou-san [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2007 02:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hot damn, love the story, keep at it.
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Reviewed By: eternalsailorsolarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2007 19:45 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found this chapter to be very romantic. And not just because of the locale. You can see them falling in love with each other, even though they are trying hard to hide it, afraid that the other won't feel the same (if they only knew!). I was completely amused by the ending as well. I like Renji as a character enough to feel bad for him about Riiko, though I was also glad that he did get his just desserts. But I am really waiting for the first time that Renji and Ichigo finally meet. That should be extremely interesting. Please keep up the great work, and enjoy your vacation!
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Reviewed By: orionshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2007 04:31 CDT
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Usual great writing and interesting situations. And so very hot.
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Reviewed By: cactuspd [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 06:42 CDT
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what office sex scenes? where's renji? thye last chapter that is available here is the one with byakuya. have you updated? is there a chapter 5? where the hell is it then?????
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Reviewed By: ancha_289 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2007 18:24 CDT
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I normally don't care for AU storylines that stray so far from the original storyline, but this is so. good. and you seem to have incorporated some canon into the plot, like Renji working under Byakuya and Ichigo's family still being the same. All the people are still in character, another oddity in most AU fics. I also LOVE your lemon scenes. *fans self vigorously with Urahara's fan* So hot!! You are able to make them into more than just "he fucked her" into "emotions conveyed into extremely fanfuckingtastic actions." I can't wait to see more! Update soon!! *fangirls and adds to favorites*
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Reviewed By: awuyzaki [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2007 01:08 CDT
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sorry for flooding but, uh...I didn't know it was suppose to be rhetorical. lol. my fault...anyway your work(s) is a masterpeice!!!
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Reviewed By: DemonandGoddess4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2007 11:32 CDT
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omg it's already hot enough in here! Omg the last 2 chapthers are..hott!! great job!!
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Reviewed By: eternalsailorsolarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 17:43 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Absolutely perfect! Renji's return - and attempt to return to his place in Rukia's life and bed - was perfectly orchestrated. You can tell that Renji never expected Rukia to not take him back immediately. If only he knew what was going on at his feet! I would love to see Renji's face when he finds out that she has moved on. And when Ichigo shows himself to be possessive where Rukia is concerned. I really enjoyed this chapter! Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: Sephora Orchid [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 15:23 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Naughty, naughty. grins I've decided to read your stuff, and I have to say that you write very well, and that there is a noticeable diffence bewteen your earlier stories and your stories now, a lot of people don't show that sort of improvement.
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Title: OMMG
Reviewed By: copycatter [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow I been reading it sometimes but this takes the cake!!!
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Reviewed By: happygirl24 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 09:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very nice hot office sex
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Title: avidreader
Reviewed By: sesshyrin [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 03:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT!!!!!!!!! don't know why only few made some review....but for me, this is a damn good story...it is true...so keep up the good work. love how who develop the characters of those two. can't wait for the next installment (keep cross fingers, lol)!!!!
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Title: Since You Asked...
Reviewed By: PlatinumSabr [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 00:52 CDT
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Since you asked for a review I thought I'd give you another. Once again, another well done chapter and you deserve lots of praise for it! Don't worry too much if you don't get more reviews, it just means the people reading this wonderful piece of work are too lazy or struck dumb by the craftiness you've put into this story. Great job and I love that you put Renji in it and he's not as happy as he thought he'd be, LOL. I feel sorry for the guy but hey, Ichigo's better for Rukia, even if this isn't the pairing I usually write. Once again, great job and I look forward to the next installment. It's almost disappointing that it's not in the real Bleach universe, the battle between Ichigo and Byakuya would be truly funny if it were over things like the ones described in this story, LOL. No worries. Thanks for the chapter.
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Luste [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 00:16 CDT
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OH.....MY.....GOD that office chapter...woow amazing..really f***ing loved it, you have such talent man, speechless, dont know what to say haha...great stuff..can't wait for new chapter /gasp
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