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Reviewed By: D red On: June 25, 2010 14:31 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Yay! Another update!I am totally in love with this story! More chapters, please!
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Reviewed By: Griddedknight [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2009 14:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I Still really liked this chapter and I just cant believe how good you are at writing!!!! I love it and you rock :3
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Reviewed By: Griddedknight [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2009 15:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love you and your stories, i cant believe how good this is. I was like "Whaaaatttt"when i read the last installment because i wasn't expecting it to not be finished but it's ok because you put all your heart into this and I love it all the more. i cant wait for the next installment. you give me so many ideas I'm about to burst. Love you lots, Griddedknight PS: I will read this until the end of time if i have to :3 Wuve you :3
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Reviewed By: mylittleunderground [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2009 01:48 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this story. It's entertaining and angsty and funny. I don't really mind waiting so long in between updates. Just as long as it gets continued, that's enough for me.
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Reviewed By: Angithebeautiful On: November 04, 2009 14:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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I love this story! kinda sad, but lovey at the same time. Please keep updating I just gotta know how it ends!
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Reviewed By: Kai1991 On: June 13, 2009 00:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your fic, my only constructive critisims are: -please don't make Jou say that Kaiba is sexy/beautiful/adorable/etcetc EVERY time he mentions him. We get it, he thinks he's cute -please decide whether Jou is gay or not, he goes from 'my sexy blue-eyed angel' to 'oh just kidding -why does Jou keep making aggressive moves on Kaiba when he knows he's been sexually abused?
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Title: Behind Blue Eyes
Reviewed By: Twice II [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2009 21:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I had to create a new account to review this ickle fickle [that's how long it's been since I've read a fic worth logging in to comment on]. This is definitely one of the better fanfictions I've read. It does have its flaws, but overall it's a good story, a good concept, and the execution's been pretty good thus far. I am going to offer some constructive criticism, though. If that's not your thing, then feel free to disregard the rest of this comment and have a nice day. CC: I would recommend that you pay closer attention to character voice: when Jou and Seto start getting a bit long-winded with their dialogue they get too OoC, and that's something I've noticed throughout. Out of personal opinion, I have to say I can't imagine Seto saying "you're weird/perverted/gay" as much as he has been, nor do I see him cursing so freely [smart people always seem to find a way to insult others without having to say "ass"]. Jou is a street punk, so him saying those sorts of things is perfectly in character, but it doesn't seem natural coming from Seto. Now, I understand that it's part of the story, but I think you might be relying on PTSD flashbacks too much. For it to happen every time Seto is just a little bit too stressed really makes it seem more like he's insane or droppin' acid rather than still dealing with a past trauma and new meds. The last bit is related to character voice, but it's less to do with the overall dialogue. The narration is from Jou's point of view, so it really ought to follow his perception of reality and be confined to his vocabulary. When he gets long-winded in his descriptions or when things get more emotional his language starts getting a bit too flowery. Other than that, I do think you've done a good job of making Seto into a believable uke- not a task easily accomplished without turning the boy into a complete pansy. Oh, and I don't know who convinced you to go from "brunette" to "brunet" [you switched at some point], but they lied to you. It's brunette. But it's a good fic, and I do hope you continue with it! I've really liked it, and I've managed to get time to read the whole thing in the last two days, and I'd really like to seem more! Don't make me wait six months, plz?
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Reviewed By: darkokita [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2008 19:20 CST
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A few spelling errors, a bit ooc, but a great read. Please keep at it.
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Reviewed By: meefmonster and Kix On: December 24, 2008 02:49 CST
Comment/Review:
we'll stick with ya, we enjoy reading your stories!
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Reviewed By: kitsunesan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2008 18:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
youve finally updated!!! OMG!! PLEASE UPDATE SOONER FASTER WHATEVERS!! PLEASE UPDATE!!! i love this story!! please send more more more!!!
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Reviewed By: PopcornImp On: July 04, 2008 00:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOLY CRAP! It's been FAR too long, since I've read a story of this caliber. I haven't been this engrossed, in a story, since the 5th Harry Potter book. Never could I have pitured uke Seto, but you made it compleatly beliveable. Wow... 100 out of 5 stars, for you! Ps...Please update, soon!
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2008 19:37 CDT
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ohh please please tell me your not finished with this..
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Reviewed By: margyy On: January 21, 2008 06:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really great fic so far! Poor Seto, he has had to put up with so much.. Though I didn't really understand when you wrote that the real Saki died 2 years ago and this one was a look alike? PLEASE update soon!!
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Title: love it
Reviewed By: Shorty_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2007 20:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story..and thats a lot comming from me cuz i only review to the great stuff. i read most puppy/seto shippings and seto is alwasy the strong one..this is a totally new take..and i love how u can read from seto's point of view..keep up the good work...please let kat kick the crap out of that bastard and let him get some seto ass in the end(tell seto to be a man and do jou or let him do him for crying out loud!!)...update soon!!!!!!!!
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Title: Fave
Reviewed By: Shad-ai [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 05:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've just finished reading what you've done so far, and I must say, this impresses me to no end. In fact, I sincerely hope that Jou completely ANNIHILATES Saki. Your story is an inspiration to the entire Seto/Jou pairing. May you have lots of luck for now and the future.
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