| "Too Close for Comfort" Reviews/Comments [ 46 ] |
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Reviewed By: GermanGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2007 02:58 EDT
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Wow! I like it! Something different yet not. Can't wait till you update!
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Reviewed By: anon. On: September 03, 2007 18:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update soon please, its really good and I really enjoy reading this fiction. The next chapter is going to be the best, they finally get to meet cant wait!
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Reviewed By: keleosnoonna [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2007 11:01 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait for them to meet! Awesome ff!
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Reviewed By: Moonfirethunderstorm On: August 15, 2007 00:35 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I have never read a story like this. I've read stories with Bulma and Vegeta being business partners but none with Vegeta being Bulma's boss. Any ways update soon please. Love & Peace ^.^
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Title: nice!!!
Reviewed By: lafemmevegita On: August 11, 2007 13:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great background info on ChiChi. Why is Vegeta living among neighbors? That is interesting in it self. Can't wait to find out what Vegeta's situation is. Next chapter is going to be great. CAN'T WAIT! CAN'T WAIT! CAN'T WAIT!
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Reviewed By: Venus Legacy On: August 08, 2007 16:03 EDT
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I like that we got to see more of Chi Chi and what makes her tick, it also makes me wonder what games she is playing with Vegeta and why she is intent on "revenge" is it just for the way Vegeta treated her during her employment, or is it much more? Also, an even darker glare seems to be cast over Seiya corp, what happened to Raditz, and who is the "she" whom Vegeta is speaking of, and how did he injure himself? Is he still a saiyan with strength in his chapter? If so it must have really been a hard night to rough him up to such an extent. I can't wait to see what Bulma has in store for her in the next chapter, I have a feeling this interview is going to be...different lol. Not at all what she is used to. I think Chi chi is right in thinking that Bulma will be in for a shock when she realises that she isn't the top dog anymore, that she has to answer to a superior, and one like Vegeta for that matter. I don't know if Bulma's situation has fully sunk in, for even when she returned home to colect her things, she still bossed about the interns, she is still use to the power I think, so it will be even more interesting to see how she fits into Seiya Corp. By the way I am really enjoying your Executive Vegeta, he's so cruel, but it's fun to read lol, I can't believe he just hung up on Chi chi.
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Reviewed By: Not a Member On: August 06, 2007 20:06 EDT
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I've reviewed this once before, and like I said before, it is an interesting twist and could go very far. I'm intrigued by Vegeta's behaviour early in the chapter, and am eager to find out about his shady past. I'm also thrilled for the next chapter, because in B/V AU the best part is generally when they meet, so I'm really excited. Hope you update soon, thanks for writing this, it's awesome.
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Reviewed By: keleos On: August 05, 2007 17:23 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
muahhahha, can't wait for B and V to finally meet! great job!
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Title: all three chapters
Reviewed By: lafemmevegita On: August 05, 2007 11:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great fic. I'm loving the suspense that's leading up to Bulma and Vegeta finally meeting. Keep the updates coming.
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Title: ch2
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy not logged On: August 05, 2007 09:35 EDT
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Well I never would have thought it was Yamucha, I was thinking Bulma had an altercation with her parents and that she wanted to prove herself to them. Was Yamucha lying to Bulma about Capsule Corp not doing well, I'm surprised he would have read about it, or did he just say it to challenge Bulma into tsking a more direct role in Capsule Corp?
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Title: ch1
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy not logged On: August 05, 2007 09:09 EDT
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Seiya corp sounds very suspicious indeed, what exactly does the business deal with, and why is Vegeta working as the boss of that department, why do they need such a department? Can't wait till Bulma starts work there.
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Title: Ch1
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 01:59 EDT
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Interesting start, I like the way Vegeta interacts with his employees, very funny, especially the stalker assistant. I was slightly dissappointed with the entrance of Chi chi, only because I thought she would act more stronger to Vegeta, when she arrived I couldn't really distinguish her from the assistant, she seemed a bit timid, I guess I imagined Chi chi as someone who would just waltz right in to his office, or give a bold knock on his door. Bulma's new place seems very suspicious, its not haunted is it? lol I wonder why she fell out with her parents? And what will her first day at work be like? Also what type of company does Vegeta run, is it the same industry as Capsule corp, are they rivals?
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Reviewed By: anon. On: August 03, 2007 18:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HEY IT IS REALLY GOOD I DO HOPE THAT THERE WILL BE MORE SOON. ITS ALWAYS GOOD TO SEE THE TWO PUT IN A DIFFERENT SCENARIO, THEN THE WHOLE 3 YR FICS. PLEASE CONTINUE ;0p
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Reviewed By: Not a Member On: July 23, 2007 23:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there, this is a cool twist on the B/V area of fanfic. I like it!! Do continue, I think this could go pretty far, it's unlike most B/V I have read before.
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Reviewed By: chibij On: July 22, 2007 11:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice start. Hopefully there will be more to come.
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