| "Too Close for Comfort" Reviews/Comments [ 46 ] |
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Reviewed By: A On: June 28, 2013 12:44 EDT
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I just recently stumbled upon this website, and I must say I am so glad that I did after reading this story. I am completely engrossed. Love the way you write the characters. I do hope an update comes soon, you've drawn me in! :) |
Title: rychefan
Reviewed By: rychefan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2012 03:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love it could not stop reading.....hope you finish this one day |
Title: Awesome!!!!
Reviewed By: LavonyaVegeta lover [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2012 16:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS!!! Alright so he's going to tell her about the experiment and she can't tell Bulma...thats hard...very hard. Bulma's smart she'll find it out in a few chapters after he tells Chi-Chi. So who is this 'Docter'? is he Dr. Gero? Does 17 or 18 come in to this story? Frieza? Krillin? Piccolo? Any others? |
Reviewed By: Bao M On: December 29, 2011 01:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this fic. Please update soon! |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2011 21:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man, why did you have to stop there?! I hope you update again soon, because I have to know what happens next. Great chapter tho. Now, if only you would heat things up with b/v. I'd love you forever, lol! |
Title: loved it!
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2011 14:54 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a great chapter. I usually don't like chichi's character, but in this fic, u have made her to be a very strong willed, yet likable person. Things are slowly unraveling regarding vegeta's character. I want to know what he is up to. Is he trying to bring down saiya corp? Ugh! The anticipation is killing me! Hope u update soon, and maybe have a lil more b/v next chapter. |
Reviewed By: bj On: December 08, 2011 05:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am so inlove with this storie ur an amazing writer.i love the mystry its so exciting cnt wait 4 u to update nd go B/V they are the best |
Title: keep updating!
Reviewed By: hplovecat [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2011 12:34 EST
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Very excited to see where this goes. Was pretty bummed out when I reached the end! I wasn't sure that I would like this office themed twist on a BV--imagining the tired mean-boss-falls-for-secretary trope--but I've become sucked in. It's not simply a BV get together--it's concise and complicated. This is well written; I can tell you've taken great care with it. Anticipating that Vegeta belongs to a Fight Club, ha ha! I love how Chichi and Bulma are pals, but I'm also not impressed with Yamcha! Picture me booing and thumbing him from the side lines while he had no right to get righteous with my girl like that. Ha! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Title: Love it
Reviewed By: mommyof2 On: December 05, 2011 22:27 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg, I love this fic. It's well written and has an original storyline. Please update soon. |
Reviewed By: bj On: December 01, 2011 05:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
im glad that u decided to continue this storie i like totally luv this storie.it is so different 4rm other B/V fanfics it draws ur attention nd i cnt wait 4 u to update so plz soon nd gudluck |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2011 16:47 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the witty convo between b/v. I think only bulma could get away with talking to him like that and not face a horrid death, lol. I also like how you have bulma analyzing and over analyzing everything in her head. I can totally picture her doing something like that. Hopefully things will heat up between them. Btw, I wonder what vegeta has up his sleeve. You mentioned he had something planned for bulma. Wonder what though. Anyway, I'm happy u updated. I took the liberty of reviewing your story on ffn too. Hope u don't mind. |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2011 13:16 EST
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Lol, I got all excited when I'd seen that updated. But when I started reading, I realized that I already read this chapter. I'm such a ditz, lol! Hope to see a new chapter soon:) |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2011 10:42 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is well written and very interesting so far. Update please. |
Title: great jib
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2011 21:49 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a great job introducing the main characters. I think we can all relate to bulma's situation at least once in our lifetime. The stifling pressure of trying to gain independence and the quest to find yourself. It can sometimes be a long and windy road. |
Reviewed By: I am Steve On: May 19, 2010 12:10 EDT
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I don't know how likely it is that you are still working on this, but I'll cross my fingers anyway because it is quite delightful. You've done a very good job of building up tension and interest in what lurks beneath the surface (what's up with Vegeta, and with the company as a whole. How does a dude get such a great suit but live in an apartment where you can hear the neighbours banging) while maintaining character integrity and development. There are a few malapropisms, in the earlier chapters, really, but the writing reads smoothly enough despite the minor bumps, and your premise is interesting and well-written, not to mention a little different from the norm -- I've only read a few VBs with the business world theme, and none besides this with any sort of interesting ~mysterious undertone~.
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