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| "Identity Crisis" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 13:14 CST
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Augh! The angst! I really feel for Sango in this chapter - she's so confused about Miroku. It has to be doubly frustrating for her as it is for us readers, to see them vacillating between their emotions on the one hand, and 'propriety' or 'logic' or the like on the other. I can't believe Miroku actually apologized for hugging her! I'd say that alone is enough to show he really is trying to change, LOL. Also, how much do I love that last line? It really harkens back to her introduction in the manga, and how she admitted even then that she had the capacity to betray her friends if she felt it truly and impossibly necessary. I sense nothing but trouble for her here as she attempts to spare Miroku's life and make this all her battle. I guess one can only hope he has such control over his temper when he discovers she's gone! Also - just had to mention your side story - a nice way to wrap up the Inu/Kag angst, and sooooo awkward to hear about "The Conversation", even if we didn't witness it firsthand. I can only imagine Kagome's turmoil in trying to speak with her mother in hypotheticals when she's already done the deed! Youch! But now they're headed to Sango's village in search of them? And when they don't find them...then what? So many twists and turns!! I'm looking forward to the next chapters :D
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2009 17:09 CST
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Sango just doesn't know what to do. She is so conflicted about her feelings. Miroku was a hentai and she didn't like it but when he stopped she wasn't sure of his intentions. I can understand Miroku's frustrations and hopefully, it can be settled. I just hope Sango doesn't regret her decision to go alone.
| Title: Chapter 9
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2009 15:49 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
o.O Oh, lordy, "We need to talk" is never good!! LOL, nice cliffhanger :P So, we get to spend this chapter in Miroku's head ~ definitely a nice change of pace. From his point of view, the dancing around they're doing is frustrating, but its nice to see he's being patient about it while Sango sorts herself out. Can he really be sweet enough long enough to win her over? The hug in the cave was really intense! I look forward to seeing what other ways he will use to convince Sango she's the only one for him. Looking forward to the next installment! :)
| Title: Chapter 8
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2009 15:33 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Can it be, I'm catching up on my backlog? This fic was, of course, at the top of my list :) I can see why the Inu/Kag fans were bursting at the seams after reading the first part of this chapter - it's so lovely! You do vulnerable Inuyasha *very* well. Though I'm not sure I like him blaming his woman troubles on Miroku, haha. As for the main storyline - nicely done, with Sango's sudden "day"mare coming so close on the heels of some other heated memories. I really liked that passage, the sudden onslaught, the feeling of loss of control and shame and confusion. Also, these lines: She told herself that it might not have had anything to do with her. She wanted it to have everything to do with her. were very strong, a nice delineation of her confusion - what her heart demands, what her head says in logical. You do her inner turmoil such justice, I can only bow in deference.
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2009 12:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a great update. I'm glad Sango and Miroku were able to have a chance to get some of their feelings out in the open. I thought it was cute that Sango was flustered by Miroku being a gentleman for a change. Keep up the good work and until next update.
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2009 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's good to see Inu and Kagome at least starting to open back up. What is really going on with Sango. I can't help but wonder is she dreaming or recalling. I can see how the memories/dreams are disconcerting. Imagine being the wanton woman she recalls and not even knowing if she really did those things or not. I can't wait until the next update and thanks for the early treat!
| Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2008 11:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful! You're doing a great job writing Sango and Miroku. I usually find them to be the "boring" ones in fiction, but you've written them in a way thats entertaining and refreshing to read. Sango's insecurities, Miroku's fustrations...its all done so beautifully. I look forward to reading more ;) ~Amber
| Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2008 11:14 CST
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Ahh, finally, a chance to catch up on this fic! :) This is absolutely breathtaking! I loved the premise of the original demon, using humans and their desires to trap them - quite original, and yet still close enough to Naraku's intentions to leave us wondering if they are related...? I think you've done a wonderful job with Sango's personal instability. This last chapter was just brilliant - I kept waiting and waiting for Miroku to reach out to her, and it was so satisfying that he finally did so in the end :) Even though I'm enjoying your secondary storyline with Inuyasha & Kagome, I'm glad Miroku & Sango have split off from them, and very much look forward to the explorations you have planned for them!!
| Reviewed By: ardy1 On: December 29, 2008 03:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
First - I don't blame you for dropping your beta - I gave you no real help. Second, I have no particular help to offer on this chapter. Except, perhaps, a few comments. Sango got pissed when she walked in on Miroku "comforting" a potential client. This felt, actually, a bit gratuitous, especially when you simply dropped it and tacitly acknowledged it was a reflex action when she felt compelled to apologize, without actually doing so. I can't help thinking a better move would have been for her to feel yet swallow her ire - in any case, isn't the whole point of the story her perceptions of herself? I guess I didn't get the point of that particular interlude; I'm still honestly waiting for Sango's identity crisis. Miroku's POV seems pretty consistent, if remarkably patient overall, but I'm just not getting Sango's problem. Sure, she's feeling guilty and letting everyone down, and perhaps reasonably concerned about it being something of a repeat of missing Naraku's deceptions in their early encounters. But wouldn't she also be aware that mistakes are natural, and that perhaps she would be particularly vulnerable to a demon attack that preyed upon supressed sensuality, all things considered? Mind you, it would be highly embarrassing to admit to the hedonist within the group, especially since said hedonist had made clear his own interest in her. But wouldn't her devotion to her own professionalism had required her to suck it up? I do like this story, but I have to say it feel incoherent.
| Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2008 21:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I sat down tonight and read the whole thing. I love it. I can't wait to see what the residual effects of the demon are and why they affecting everyone in the group. I love your take on Miroku and Sango. He is actually being good for Miroku and the idea of him and Sango sharing hot dreams are beyond awesome!
| Reviewed By: XxSarahxX On: December 15, 2008 11:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is really good. It's a great original story, which is something that doesn't come around very often. Your writing is fantastic, and I look forward to reading more in the future.
| Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2008 14:30 CST
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good fight scene. ♣ one hopes the affectionate pairs can continue to be so. and whatever happened to yasha and kagome? ♥ delighted, ginny
| Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 00:58 CDT
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one is wondering what the trap is meant to actually do? . . . “Curiouser and curiouser!†Cried Alice... and the red queen's "off with her head!" (jefferson airplane 'go ask alice'). . . interesting ride, eloquently described. sorry about the above quotes, they just popped into my head and at this moment seem apropos (they may not make sense to anyone but me). ~ a pleasure, ginny
| Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2008 23:17 CST
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Great story. Keep up the terrific work
| Reviewed By: Hitsugaya630 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2007 17:20 CST
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wow. really good, but...who did Inuyasha start cuorting Kagome? And....when did they start doing that in the forest in the middle of the night? Hmmm....*thinks hard and drifts off into space* *comes back slightly disgusted and scared* well...that..was....disturbing anywaysgreat story, please update soon!
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