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| "Digital Moon GX: The Joining of Heroes" Reviews/Comments [ 36 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: Another good chapter
Reviewed By: Gallantmon of the Hazard [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2008 05:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, it's me! I've looked over the chapter and I think that it came out quite good. We're still having problems with that grouping situation, but I think that we will figure it out sooner or later. Anyway, I think that we should take care of that 'Kari concern' with TK knowing about the truth of Kari's feelings for Davis, TK isn't mad at Davis and Kari for that, and the three of them staying good friends in Chapter 7. Is that all right with you? Well, anyway, another good chapter and I hope there are plenty more to come. I'll starting working on Chapter 7 as soon as I can. Later and best wishes!
| Title: WTF?!
Reviewed By: A Takari fan On: June 02, 2008 00:00 CDT
Comment/Review:
Um, I've read horrible fics before (especially from Mykan the so called king of Daikari and Gallantmon of the Hazard) but this takes the cake, TK Would never bow to the phony king Davis you have in this fic I rather see Davis knocked off his throne and TK take his place
| Title: interesting
Reviewed By: A Digimon Fan On: June 01, 2008 23:36 CDT
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the last two chapters were pretty decent I have to admit it though I think it was kinda kind of selfish from Kari to use TK just to get Davis jealous, what if TK would have ended having feelings for her? she didn't thought on that? Also there is something I find hard to believe and is this part on chapter 6: "And if you are 'sleeping together' just makes sure to use protection or birth-control pills." You have to be kidding me, what kind of parents are that fine with allow their 15 years old daughter have sex, even if it is with her boyfriend? what happened with the overprotective parents? heck Tai was more overprotective than them on the series o.O You sure should check carefully what you write, even if it is fiction, that really didn't had much sense if you ask me ^^;
| Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2008 21:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!
| Title: Good update!
Reviewed By: Gallantmon of the Hazard [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2008 05:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I've read over the chapter and I have to say that it is another pretty good chapter. You are still leaving a few grammar mistakes that corrected, but it isn't too bad. The spacing problem is somewhat less than the last chapter and everything seems quite good! Well, I hoping to see what ideas that you have for TK and I'll work on Chapter 6 when I have free time. Later and best wishes!
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2008 20:51 CDT
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Well, I think you've done a fantastic job. It was really good, seriously. ^^ I think you should update again so I can keep reading lol.
| Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2008 15:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story Plz Plz Update it Soon!!
| Title: You have to be kidding right?
Reviewed By: A Digimon Fan On: May 16, 2008 19:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
While I admit the fic is well written and the battle well described, I can't help but wonder why the Davis fans treat him as if he was the all might powerful god? I say that for this part of the chapter 4 that I quote: Magnamon, his body still glowing, says, strongly, "When you have faith and belief in your heart, there is nothing that you can't do and you can make miracles happen!" Magnamon says, with a serious tone, "That's why I was partnered up with Daisuke Motomiya, the one and only legendary Digidestined of Miracles, and one of the most powerful and future king of the Digidestined!" Tai, Ken, Yolei, and TK gasp in shock and Yolei yells out, stunned, "King of the Digidestined?!" Jun says, with a dark sly grin, "That's right! My bro is no ordinary Digidestined! He is a legendary Digidestined that's going to rule over all Digidestined and the Digital World! Even the Sovereign Digimon has to bow to him when he takes the throne of the Digital World!" Come on, you think that if that was true, Azulongmon wouldn't have seen it on Davis since the first time he appeared to the digidestined after they saved the last destiny stone? I mean, I know Davis did his share of things for the team but is not like to put him like if without him the others are nothing, if you ask me Tai and the other 7 digidestined of season 1 did it pretty well and Davis wasn't with them at that time. Honestly and really I barely recognize Davis on your fic, I know you would ask why I did read it and the reply is because you never mentioned anything about Davis being a king till the chapter 4 at least not that I remember, then again the chapters are pretty long so maybe I missed a thing or two. Still Godmodding Davis like that is really old now, you took Gallantmon's example pretty well, and it's okay everyone has a role model but I really don't like when Davis or any of the others is godmodded in that way, I know TK has his bit of fics with him having amazing abilities but I have noticed that at least those fics have a better explanation of how TK gained those abilites while Davis out of no where starts to show his powers from one day to another. I'm not flamming you, is just that I think you can do it better, Davis is impossible to be king of the whole digiworld, let alone the sovereigns bow at him, mostly Zuqhiaomon (the phoenix one) is well known from Tamers that he hates humans so I doubt he will accept to bow at Davis, he first fries Davis before bow to him ^^; But well is your fic, just one thing don't you dare to bash TK and Patamon, Gallantmon did that on a few of his fics where Davis was all powerful in ways that not even Davis himself got portrayed like that on Davis bashing fics. The best you can do to TK and Patamon is put them happy for Kari and Gatomon (since I know it will be Daikari and for what I saw on Gallantmon's fics where there is Daikari, VeeGato follows XD) and give them own girlfriends, they risked a lot themselves for their friends like to see Davis getting all the glory, Patamon even saved Veemon's life on 02 when he took him out the way of Virus MetalGreymon's foot when Ken controlled Tai's Agumon. That proves that Davis always had help from his friends in hard situations, oh and I would give a speech about the crest of miracles and the gold digiegg but is useless to say that Miracles can't exist as a crest nor Davis can own the gold digiegg, not matter how proved is that Davis doesn't owns the gold egg nor has a crest, the gold egg only is summoned when necesary and through different ways, in the movie for example it was Seraphimon the one who released it (Magnadramon released the one for Willis), but well no sense on mention that on a long speech because no one listens about that. Sorry if this sounded a bit harsh but I think this of Godmodding Davis has been going on and on for too long, not even Ryo Akiyama who is the legendary tamer gets that godmodded. Good luck with your fic anyways :)
| Title: Best Chapter Yet!
Reviewed By: Gallantmon of the Hazard [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2008 05:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I've read what you have posted up and I think that this is our best chapter yet! There are a few 'problem areas' with spacing, but it was a bit more problematic last chapter. I feel that we will get the kinks out of the system sometime in the future. Also, you accidently left a spelling mistake that I had already connected earlier on. However, this chapter has come out really good! We really did something great! I'll get to work on Chapter 5 and show you what I came up with! I hope that you like it! Later and best wishes!
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2008 20:19 CDT
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By the Goddess, this is your best chappie yet! Excellent writing coupled with the plot and things like that make me shiver in a good way . . . It also makes me a bit jealous though, I wish I could write like that . . . But anyways, I wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed this chappie, and I know I want to see you continue with the amazing job you're doing. I hope you update soon!
| Reviewed By: Glory Nizenea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2008 17:52 CDT
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Wow, this is interesting! Update soon! =)
| Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2008 18:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2008 11:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
*applauds* Well done, dude, well done. It was amazing to read and again, I do love the uniqueness of the story when compared to my own Treasured Era or Gallantmon's stories. Keep it up! P.S. Can I ask you to review my story? I'm not too sure I'm doing so hot.
| Title: Very good chapter!
Reviewed By: Gallantmon On: May 02, 2008 08:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, there, it's me! Well, I've got to say that it is quite good and you followed my advice. It looks like there is some 'spacing problems', but it looks like that it was more like caused by the uploading, not anything that we did. Well, it is far cry from the first chapter that was posted. I think that we will get rid of these 'kinks' sooner or later. Anyway, this chapter went very well. However, I think that I should give you fair warning on what wording you put in the chapter summaries. These chapter summaries are made to be 'readable' to everyone even here in the 'X' rated stories. I don't want to be mean, but I'm just saying. Anyway, I've got more ideas for the future. In Chapter 4, why don't you have the Digidestined's Digimon come into the story, Queen Serenity gives Davis the Crest of Miracles, and Koemna uses some kind of 'emergency order' to make Davis the new Spirit Detective of Earth with Yusuke, Hikari, and Kira going to train him along with 'Grandma Genkai'? Hope to see more soon! Later and best wishes!
| Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2008 22:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!
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