| "Temptation Waits" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] |
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Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2002 11:34 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ssjprincess: *looks at Vegeta* I never knew that.
Vegeta: *looks curiously at ssjprincess* Knew what?
ssjprincess: That you liked to push buttons too. *smiles*
Vegeta: I like no such thing! *crosses his arms and scowls*
*suddenly a console appears with a large, shiny red button*
ssjprincess: O.o How?
Vegeta: How what, Onna? How are you such a moron? *smirks*
ssjprincess: *rolls her eyes at Vegeta*
Vegeta: *picks up ssjprincess' eyes and hands them back to her*
ssjprincess: *blushes* Sorry, I know that was stupid, but-
Vegeta: But look who did it. That explains why it was stupid. *chuckles* *suddenly stops chuckling as he notices the button* Oooooo....
ssjprincess: *smirking* I thought you didn't like buttons.
Vegeta: *inching his way towards the button, thinking he is being inconspicuious* I don't!
ssjprincess: Then why are you making your way closer to the button?
Vegeta: *standing next to the button now* What in Kami's name are you talking about, Onna? I think you are going crazy. Or should I say crazier?
ssjprincess: Ha. ha. *shakes her head at vegeta* Really though, I wouldn't push that button, Vegeta. You don't know what it will do.
Vegeta: *running his finger around the console* I have no intention to push that button. But you know, it is really shiny, isn't it?
ssjprincess: *runs towards Vegeta* No, don't push that button! You might blow us up or something!
Vegeta: *a crazy look comes to Vegeta's eyes* Pretty button. Must..... push..... pretty.... button....
ssjprincess: Nooooooo....
Vegeta: *pushes button and laughs insanely*
ssjprincess: O.o;; Now you did it!
*suddenly there is a loud poof*
BVegeta anmd ssjprinmcess: O.o
ssjprinmcess: NMow
look
what
you
did!
BVegeta: What|? What did it do?
ssjprimncess: Look it
totally screwed nmy
keybvoard up!
Ahhhh!! *nmarrows her
eyes at BVegeta* *BVANM!*
BVegeta: x.o Hey!
ssjprinmcess: *drops
the
fryinmg panm with a clang* O.O!!!
BVegeta: What?|
ssjprinmcess: *poinmts inm the directionm of where the conmsole onmce was* NMy keybvoard wasnm't the onmly thinmg that bvuttonm did!
BVegeta: *looks inm that directionm* Oh Kanmi!!
*Frieza is stanmdinmg there dressed inm a tight bvlack teddy*
ssjprinmcess anmd BVegeta: *look at each other*
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorry that was so lonmg anmd poinmtless.
I just wanmted you to kmnow that I like how this fic has started out. :)
As soonm as I figure out what NMonmkey BVoy did to nmy keyvboard,
I'll bve
bvack. :) |
Reviewed By: bob On: July 19, 2002 14:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's great, i love! |
Reviewed By: Sam On: July 18, 2002 12:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like it! It's soooooooooo sweet how vegeta says home is where the heart is. Please update soon |
Reviewed By: Angelfire@home.com On: July 12, 2002 11:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a great fic. But know i'll probably have nightmares from Vegeta haveing feelings for another guy and haveing Yamcha bio. All well right more please! |
Reviewed By: Neiome On: July 11, 2002 18:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man i think i am going to die from laughter hehe i think Lucas The Incredibly Good Looking Elf is the coolest this *sigh* i wish i had one and i never new vegeta was afraid of pink rats and street preachers but i mean who wouldn't??? YOU HAVE TO FINISH THE STORY!!!! |
Reviewed By: JOZIAHAS On: July 09, 2002 13:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Fic! Write more as soon as possible please!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Jesa Jaisai [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2002 13:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You HAVE to finish this fic! I think it's absolutely hilarious! Don't ever let anyone tell you that you aren't funny, because this fic rules! Anyway, keep up the good work!
I like how you're not jumping straight to the Lemon...it makes it better when you draw it out ^^ |
Reviewed By: Kui On: July 08, 2002 22:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love yer fic so far! also, i have just opened a dbz fic gallery, if you would care to submit this or any of your fics! you can see the site at http://kui.s5.com/home/, or email me at sailor_kui@yahoo.com. i accept any and all types and ratings! |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 20:25 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay another good chapter love it |
Reviewed By: serendipity [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2002 09:31 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I love this story! haha. I can't wait for the new chapters. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: cherry On: July 07, 2002 03:30 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hi again!!!! Just to tell you, keep up the great work. Hope you can finish the next chapter soon!!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2002 21:28 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is getting better love it |
Reviewed By: Amy135@home.com On: July 05, 2002 21:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wrrrrriiiiiiittttttttteeeeee Mooooooorrrrrreeeeeeeeee PPPPPPlllllllleeeeeaaaaassssssssssseeeeeee!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Amy On: July 03, 2002 13:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS FIC IT'S GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!RIGHT MORE RIGHT AWAY!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2002 10:26 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love it keep it coming |
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