| "Vixens and Kitsune" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] |
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Reviewed By: hell drake On: December 22, 2007 22:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i personally enjoy this story a great deal. it is a very original way of looking at the naruto universe, and i find it very refreshing. true, i would like to see longer, more frequent chapters, but i understand the author's reasoning for the way they are writing, and will respect it by not complaining, as this set up just gives me more to look forward to and keeps me in suspense waiting for the next chapter. Great job, and please keep up the great work. -Drake
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Reviewed By: naruto rules [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2007 09:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great but here are some ideas for the harem . ayame . temari.
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Reviewed By: YashaReader [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2007 21:21 CST
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I have to agree with your 'AN' about the greatness of a lack of rules to the amount of fun to be had with characters. I keep finding myself more and more entertained with each chapter and I will be waiting in an excited and fidgety fashion for the next chapter; and probobly every chapter after that. Keep up the good work and I pray that ideas move through your head faster so that we won't have to wait to long for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Soliderboy [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2007 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey it look good update soon.
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Reviewed By: Passerby_Dyl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2007 06:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I love the fact that there isnt a lemon every chapter. Constant lemon can really ruin a story and bore the readers(Apart from *cough* a few :P)A quick question though, how many chapters do you think this fanfic will have? Anyway, update as quick as possible ;)
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Reviewed By: Roark On: December 08, 2007 02:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is still quite fun to read, and I like the plan you have written down. You seem to know where your story is going already, a definite plus. You also are doing well with the grammer and spelling from what I read. Keep up the good work. p.s. I don't usually write reviews, so don't be suprised if I don't give another one for a long time.
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Reviewed By: Remenis [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2007 16:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a pretty good story so far, i dont really care how but can you make it so that naruto is older? if possible just make them all shippuden age since that seems easiest.
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Reviewed By: the forgotten angel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2007 15:55 CST
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I really like your idea and i can't wait until you start updating. :) CLAP CLAP write more
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Reviewed By: snowecat(not signed in) On: December 02, 2007 00:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
My biggest gripe with harem fics is that Naruto is UNDERAGE!!! Heck he's not even 16 in Shippudeen! So unless he's going to go someplace and age mentally and physically 6 or more years, give him some time. Remember, he's 12 and most boys his age are just starting to notice that girls are pretty, not that they want to do things with them. At least that's what they should be doing. You can't give him current 21st century ideals and mannerisms. Keep in mind how everyone acts in the manga and anime. Kakashi and Jiraiya are really the exception rather than the rule. Another question is WHY the Kyuubi is giving him this knowledge. Demons don't do things for free. Period. That's why they are demons. She has no motive for doing this, there's always a reason for a demon. Even if it's just to cause chaos. Why does Naruto want to be the greatest lover? What will that do for him? What goals will it help him accomplish? How will that help him in being a ninja? You need more detail. You have a lot of speech and not much else. That sort of dialog should only be used for a very short amount of time. Less than a paragraph. Anything more and you might as well be making a script or something. Hopefully I have not turned this into a flame. That was not my intention in the least. I have read many harem-fics and find them greatly lacking for the most part. With luck, you will be different. I wish you well in your endeavor.
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Reviewed By: YashaReader [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2007 10:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would have to say that this is the beginning of a potentially good story. I also noticed the grammatical mistakes but overall there doesn't seem to be much in the way of needed corrections. I have to say that the premise of a harem story with a plot is ambitious, not usually being the norm, and I am looking forward to seeing it accomplished. I am giving the story a six out of ten mostly because it is a new story and needs development before anything higher can be given. I did notice that Kyuubi was not included on the list of females in the harem so I am wondering if this was an oversight or if there is something to the plot that hasn't been revealed yet. I look forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: Roark On: December 01, 2007 00:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The writing was good, but you had a bit of a problem keeping proper grammer. Nothing horrible, just a few places where commas would have been nice. (I had a really good English teacher for many years, and now I can not make myself not see errors in grammer. Sorry) The story was plenty original from what I have seen, and it was quite enjoyable. The charaters not going at it constantly is a plus in my opinion, because proper character and situational developement is good. Thus, in my opinion, you have an eight that is well earned overall. I look forward to the next update.
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Reviewed By: Deadberserker [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2007 23:38 CST
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This thing is looking good so far. I can respect you making a plot and not having lemons every other paragraph keep up the good work.
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