| "Slavery through Protection" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: BakaHito [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2010 17:11 CDT
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Umm....I'm kinda new at this but I thought it was overall interesting. I do hope you write more. I'm hoping that you'll correct your spelling mistakes sometime (Sorry, it's a pet peeve) and that you make the next one longer. I like that you get to the action, because waiting gets obnoxious. Thank you for posting and I hope to see more! :)
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Reviewed By: mirrorhanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 18:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing is good, however I would suggest varying the words you use more, improving the flow of your sentences, and working on overall grammer. Other than that, it is a great story and I eagerly await more.
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Title: Amazing!
Reviewed By: Krinlon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2008 02:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's really interesting so far, I really hope you'll update this soon. I have to agree with AM, I'm such a sucker for these plots. Keep the good work up!!
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Reviewed By: moonskittles [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 23:08 CDT
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Very enticing so far, and well written. The only thing that bugs me is that if he really thought the necklace was real gold and they were THAT poor, he most definitely would have sold it if he had any sense. Even if it is real, I think it would be better if he thought it was plastic. That would fit with how easily he dismissed it in his mind and all. Also, please please please don't make it that the necklace is making her sick. That would be lame. But other than that, I really like the story. The characters are all very deep and interesting, and the main character sounds sexy. :3
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Reviewed By: otaku717 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 02:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
so far so good. I'm looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: silenthoughts [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2008 02:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
I love this already! There really weren't that many spelling mistakes and it didn't take away from the story at all! I hope you'll update soon because I'm already in love with the plot and the characters!
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Title: ^^
Reviewed By: Riyu-san On: June 05, 2008 19:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fic...really hope you write more on it soon...not very many people continue with their stories on here and it gets frustrating, especially when you run into a good one (like this one) so I REALLY hope you continue it soon...
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Reviewed By: AM On: June 01, 2008 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this kind of story! I have such a huge thing for "I'll help your family IF YOU'LL BE MY SEX SLAVE" plots. They're awesome.
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