| "Loveless Suna" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Title: oops
Reviewed By: Kagome0102 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 20:23 EST
Comment/Review:
sorry. i made a mistake. in one of my last reviews for your story, i told you that it didnt make sense that you were caling iruka a dolphin. i just found out right now that his name actually translated to dolphin. the second i found out, i had to come here to tell you that i made a mistake. sorry about that. note that i come back to read your story consistently hoping that you update yet it hasnt been updated in a while. please dont be like the 60% of the authors who never finish their story and leave it up incomplete for years.
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Title: AmayaRainStorm
Reviewed By: Kagome0102 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2008 14:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nicely done. If i had read this story about 5 years ago, you would have been my goddess, it has everything that I would have wanted in a self-insertion. During this winter vacation I decided to start reading these again. However, now that I read this story 5 years later, I still enjoy it. BUT, the grammar and punctuation are, for lack of better words, not that great. Some of your "expressions" like calling Iruka sensei a dolphin doesnt make any sense. Sometimes you accidentally call a "he" a "she" instead making it hard to follow. Then you also use the wrong words even though the spelling may be correct. But I definetely cant blame you for any of that. I would rather have the author uploading chapters upon chapters instead of making her re-read everything that she wrote. Please dont consider this a flame review. I am only trying to help and I know that learning from your mistakes is one of the best ways to improve yoru writing style. And I also admire at how dedicated you are at writing this fanfiction, uploading more than 3 chapters in a day, and you started this in August. It took me an entire day just to read it from chapter 1 to chapter 41. which btw you should definitely continue because Im curious as to what is going to happen... You have definitely inspired me to write my unfinished fanfiction this winter break. so thank you for that. ^_~ I definetely admire the work and dedication that you are putting into this. so please keep it up. your newest dedicated fan: Amaya
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: December 24, 2008 18:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have no clue why it did two of the same message..
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: December 24, 2008 18:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I still love this story!! Y'know if she keeps having sex with gaara without protection shes gonna get pregnant..Then hes SCREWED!!!LOL!!Keep going with the story!!
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: December 24, 2008 18:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I still love this story!! Y'know if she keeps having sex with gaara without protection shes gonna get pregnant..Then hes SCREWED!!!LOL!!Keep going with the story!!
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Reviewed By: yuki_hatake [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2008 22:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
im officially hooked on this story!!
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: December 02, 2008 17:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh!! And ill take yur advice and not think the worst!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: December 02, 2008 17:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry i havent said anything i just saw the story!! I loved the last chap you MUST keep writing. Ill keep checking on this story every day until you insert the next chapter. But honestly i cant even express my feelings tward this story because its so good!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: yuki_hatake [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2008 20:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude, this story rocks! please, please, please write more. please, i promise i'll review after each new story! :)
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Reviewed By: Camp-crystal-lake On: November 24, 2008 22:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude this is an awsome story PLEASE keep writing!! i would die if you stoped writing!! I love this story!!
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Reviewed By: mixedfic On: October 17, 2008 00:36 EDT
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I love this fic. I didn't know that on fanfiction you weren't allowed to put ur OC character with some manga/anime character?? I thought you could do that cause i did it??!!!
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Reviewed By: buzzk97 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2008 18:16 EDT
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end it? I am a little bummed; I was looking forward to how they were going to make Gaara admit that he was in love and not just lust. I love the fact that you brought Sasuke into the story again...for an anime character I think that he is rather sexy. I really did like your story and I hope that you get inspiration to continue writing!
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Reviewed By: buzzk97 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2008 00:08 EDT
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great update! So Neji is making Gaara jealous for fun... bummer, but what does he get from Ino and Sakura for his part in the deception? It would be very unNeji-like (I think I made up a new word..go me!) for him to do this for S's and G's. Please let me know. Oh, and I adore the Iruka and Kakashi moment and of course Gaara's reaction to being aked if he likes men. hehe
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Reviewed By: buzzk97 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2008 18:12 EDT
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This story really made me giggle! The way that Shizuka and Gaara banter off of one another is comical. I am anxious to see how the Gaara -vs- Neji showdown will end. Keep up the good work!
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Title: loveless suna
Reviewed By: vegetas moon On: August 11, 2008 17:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah!!!!! you found it hopefully this will work out for you!! so when ya posting chapter 36?? i can't wait!!
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