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Title: Good on every level
Reviewed By: J Luc Pitard [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2009 15:57 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really like the setting, the characters discovering one another (presumably intended as a one shot?) and then the progression with Myoga. Hope this catches your attention again.
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Title: Your fans have spoken!
Reviewed By: emily2242 On: October 09, 2009 21:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL so I saw this over on FF.net and thought I'd hop over here to see what other people have thought, glad it's the same as me! I don't think I have ever begged an author to write more but here I am on my hands and knees saying pleeease turn it into a longer story! There's so much potential...maybe Inuyasha could decide that it's safest to leave and go back to his pack but when he does they punish him for failing his assignment and she finds him all battered and bruised...all because of her... Or perhaps he tries to forget about her but ends up coming to her rescue when another Youkai attacks her... ...or he takes her back to his pack and has to pretend that he's going to kill her but he can't... lol or maybe you've just got some splendid ideas of your own! The setting is very intriguing too...would love to find out more about this AU. Emz :) x
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2009 21:53 CDT
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I just reread this for the umpteenth time and without further chapters to let me know where the story is going my mind can't help but create scenarios about where it might go. I could easily see Inuyasha taking Kagome back to the Pack for them to retrieve the jewel from her body, in what he hopes to be a very humane and simple surgical procedure, which of course it would not be because why would any demon be concerned as to the survival of a human, and him then making her his mate without her consent in order to save her life. I hope you update soon. I would love to see where this does go even if I am totally off base.
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2009 18:48 CDT
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Congratulations! Your story has been nominated by the Inuyasha FanGuild for Best Alternate Universe/Reality for the first quarter of 2009. If you would like to track the progress of your story through the rest of the nominations, seconding, and voting process, or simply find out more about the IYFG and perhaps join yourself, you can find everything you need to know on our website: www.inuyashafanguild.com If you have any other questions, don't hesitate to contact our moderators at IYFGModerator@gmail.com. Congratulations again! -- IYFG Beta Group
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Reviewed By: Fenik Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2009 23:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your one shot was superb, this story has so much potential to be so much more. I would love to see a continuation. Fenik Fan
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Reviewed By: Karaumea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 14:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wait a minute... Was this really meant to be a oneshot? I can't believe it because you have all the elements needed to create a long, exciting story here. It would be a sin to waste them and leave the story incomplete after such an amazing introduction. I'll be hopefully awaiting an update!
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Reviewed By: Ai Kisugi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 12:59 CDT
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I loved it. This story is begging to be continued as a full fledged story. I just had an image of Koga trying to obtain the target and kidnapping the Kags from Inu. That could be a lovely bit of drama. And I like the idea of Inu getting the Tessaiga via an optical eye scanner. Perhaps Kags can be helpful with understanding the science and technology of the humans...? Oh and more lemons...I would hope... OK, please continue writing... This can't just be a one shot...
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Reviewed By: nicc85 On: March 02, 2009 17:51 CST
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can't wait to see how this develops
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Title: Hunter....
Reviewed By: GloomingPeace On: February 15, 2009 22:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WEll, there's a beginning... The story caugt my attention, not so much the title. But it's a good start. Looking forward to reading more. Very descriptive, and good job on putting a new spin on a classic scene. No idea what's with the second chapter though... so Hurry back :)
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Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2009 23:56 CST
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Wow. Just... wow. And like your other what is it up to... umm 16 reviewers, I too would love to see you continue this story. That wasn't a one-shot, that was a teaser excerpt from a much larger story. There is far too much universe there to leave as just a simple one-shot. Though please don't get me wrong as a one-shot it is fabulous but there is so much more you could cover: the unknown disease that is ravaging the land, the ongoing conflict between the demons and humans and how Inuyasha and Kagome are now stuck in the middle, how the demons even know about the jewel and seem to have some elaborate government system and are searching for the jewel in an organized manner yet there seems to be a no-man's-land in the ruined remains of a former human city that is home to rogue demons who do not fall under the jurisdiction of the demon government... anyway there is some great material here that you could weave into a very elaborate and beautiful story. I hope that you will consider writing it. And even if you don't I enjoyed what to me will always be an excerpt from a great story yet to be written.
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Reviewed By: ghoulgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2009 23:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh...my...gosh that story was fantastic!! i loved it
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Title: I love this!
Reviewed By: Aj On: January 06, 2009 16:50 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg, this fic NEEDS to be more than a one-shot! I absolutely love it, it's so sexy and sweet, and It would be soooo great if you could add more chapters :D
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Reviewed By: rndmnessnsus On: January 06, 2009 11:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You ave to write at least a few more chapterS!!!!I mean, come on!!!!!You can't leave ardent readers such as myself hugering for more!!! So please continue :D
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Title: Assigned Target
Reviewed By: Nosphera [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2009 19:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue this one.... this fic is begging to be more than a one shot. Im begging too!!!
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Reviewed By: IC On: January 04, 2009 19:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Youe one-shot is so well written. I think you should make it a full blown fic.
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