| "Control. Infirmity. Defiance." Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: yo On: May 07, 2009 10:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'M DROWNING IN BUNNY FUR! funny PLEASE CONTINUE!
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Reviewed By: Phalon (nsi) On: May 07, 2009 06:53 EDT
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Plot bunnies = Evil. But this story is awesome, plenty of angst. I just have to wonder when Kikyou's future will start to present itself, if even so slightly. Keep up the good work, I continue to love the stories your write.
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2009 15:03 EDT
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Ooh, action! :D I love the action!! This is a really great take on the original arc from the manga. I love the dreams/visions you inserted, for both Sango and Kagome - interesting, in some ways, how they wish for the same things (or at least, think the same sorts of things will make them happy). LOL, Kagome's visions in particular were unexpectedly citrusy, but in the most pleasant way, hehe :) What can I say? You're drawing me into your world and leaving me wanting more. The end of the chapter was spot on perfect - though it makes me wonder why Inuyasha is forcing the issue, like he wants her to admit her feelings first or something. Couldn't he see that she was also frustrated with her lack of knowledge from where that killing blast of power had come from? Not exactly the time to be bringing up, "So, hey, tell me about your wet dreams!" LOL. But, I like how you're strengthening the intensity of the triangle, like you're ready for it to break - I'm still wondering how you're going to set the characters on their ultimate paths. And now I will go read your author's notes, seeing as how you said this was your 'favorite' chapter so far! =) Looking forward to more!!!
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Reviewed By: kmoaton [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2009 13:04 EDT
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YAY! What a kick ass chapter! You did fine reworking everything into a very interesting tale. I so enjoy the angst of all of it. This was totally perfect for a rainy day! Great Work!
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Reviewed By: landofthekwt [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2009 11:38 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting the way you have reversed many of the roles. Kagome and Sango get the dreams they want. Even Kikyou feels the lure of the flowers offering her what she wants. Kagome is able to use her powers to save herself. Kikyou may have weakened while Kagome has been strengthened.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2009 08:11 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*eyes twitches* omg that was great!!! Inuyasha can see it???!!! OMG DO SOMETHING ABOUT IT INUYASHA!!!!! Oooo where did that power Kagome had came from?? i want to read more... T_T
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Reviewed By: jflorea [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2009 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! And no Inuyasha, she doesn't know...she needs you to tell her. :)
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2009 08:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol creepy... I would have though that the flowers would be to confuse and make youki think that there were no humans in the village (lack of 'human' scent) but I like your version better very creepy!!!
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Reviewed By: phalon (nsi) On: April 16, 2009 01:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, wow. Of course Kagome's condition gets worst. I see now that Kikyou is going to have to help Fluffy-Hime, instead of Kagome doing it. Poor Yasha, not able to comfort Kagome right. I can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: phalon (nsi) On: April 16, 2009 01:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gotta love your stories. This has to be one of my favorite stories of yours. Drama = Win.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2009 08:25 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
crying blood?? holy hell! i must know more!! and hmmm Inuyasha, GET SMARTER!!!!
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Reviewed By: Selina MacCloveror [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 15:23 EDT
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Awesome chapter, girlie! I feel for InuYasha (as usual, LOL) as he struggles to figure out how to deal with the already crazy (but now even more so) emotions of females. I'm curious as to how this is all going to wrap up with half of the girls' souls in each of them; I have to figure one of them is going to eventually die and the missing half would return to the remaining woman, but I suppose that would be too easy, ne? I'm sure you're going to come up with something super-creative, and I'm excited to see what it will be! (Not TOO exciting...I'm hoping this story will be longer than that!) I'm feeling for Sango, too, as I'm sure is expected. Kohaku will always be a source of confusion and torment for her, and this news about possibly being able to overcome the darkness of the shard (or not being able to, rather) is obviously going to bring her even more heartache. But Miroku was awesome in that scene; every bit the supportive friend (or fiance) without sugar-coating the truth for her. Loves him! Great chapter! Can't wait to see the battle go down in the next!
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: LuxKen27 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2009 14:04 EDT
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Ahhh, another excellent effort! :) Very interesting to see both Kikyo and Kagome feel like they are at a loss of control at the beginning. You make Kikyo seem very sympathetic here, a nice feat considering where she left off in the last chapter, heh. It's also nice to see Kagome overcoming a bit of her angst, finally - it seems so strange to see her depressed! is this really Saint Kagome we're talking about, the eternal optimist who can't even think badly of her romantic rival? :P Hehe. Let's see, what else...there's so much going on it's hard to remember what to comment on! I like the segue back into the manga, very nicely done ~ and I look forward to seeing how the situation plays out now that the Inutachi has been reorganized.
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Title: Very Awesome:)
Reviewed By: LustfulBeast [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2009 18:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is really good! Its interesting to see how Kagome deals with Kikyo's emotions and how Kikyo deals with Kagome's. I guess less of a soul makes ya a little cranky. I can't wait till the next chapter^^.
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Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 16:19 EDT
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definition: crocodile tears- a hypocritical display of sorrow; false or insincere weeping. ~ i believe a better phrase would possibly be 'bitter tears'. IMHO ♣ human nature is to jump to conclusions but if he had reviewed his words and her typical responses then he would have known why she had been radiating such feelings. ♠ one hasn't a clue as to where you are taking this but it promises to be one heck of a ride! ♥
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