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| "Vengeance" Reviews/Comments [ 371 ] | | Pages (25): [ « ‹ 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 › » ] | Title: Once again Fantastic!
Reviewed By: Saiya-jin44 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2009 12:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my Lord I had said I was going to review the last chapter and never did, so please consider that this is for the past two because I have so much to say! That is nothing new though. :) Of course this has been awesome. The whole Raditz/Puar situation has me in stiches. I LOVE it! It's great how you can make a little shapeshifting cat seem like such a sex fiend!!! :D I think my favorite line in Chapter 10 involved Dr. Gero "bent over a slab" trying to create the best "mechanical dick" possible. Brilliant!!! However, as I mentioned you do have a penchant for the macabre and a super handle on it at that. In that sense, I was really touched by the scene involving Zarbon and Frieza. There hasn't been much about Zarbon yet and even so I felt really sorry for him in that moment. Has Vegeta gone Super Saiyan??? Hmmm... and now that they're off to Red Station, what does this mean for Bulma? Suspense!!! Of course, this means you must come back soon with the next one. :) I sympathize with your busy life, but really... this is just too much of a cliffy! :D Hope to hear more soon!! Bravo.
| Reviewed By: Silver Lady Crazy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2009 11:06 PDT
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Y´know, I´m starting to suspect about Oolong... he´s not that intelligent or evil, but he´s certainly amoral and dishonest. My other suspect is Dr. Briefs - perhaps he´s doing that innocently, or worried that Vengeance might harm his daughter (I saw something like that in some fics). I don´t believe that Tien is the culprit - certainly NOT after everything he passed on the slave champs, unless he has been somehow brainwashed. Now I really pitied Zarbon. Nobody deserves to be touched by such a... eww... calling Freeza a monster would be an insult for the poor monsters. ""Iseducedhimandalmostsleptwithhim" XD XD That reminded me those good episodes of Friends and Fraser (nostalgic sigh). Funny is that Chichi, despite admitting her need, she still thinks she´s one to be moralistic and criticize Bulma.
| Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 15:32 PDT
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There is not a person alive who would blame Bulma for that fantasy. Even if we know that it's the same person, for her, that's about the hottest thing ever. Great chapter, can't wait for more.
| Reviewed By: Vegeta's Blue-Haired Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 15:14 PDT
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Gah!
| Reviewed By: Xaverri On: August 24, 2009 15:08 PDT
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Such suspense!!! I love the twists you make, it shows you really have the whole story laid down in front of you as everything just follows up smoothly! I just knew Bulma was going to expect poor Puar to be the traitor, I hope it turns out for the better and I really have no idea how you're gonna do that but I can't wait for the next chapter to happen! So many things are going to happen, chi-chi and gohan, puar and radditz and of course our favorite couple of all times :) Hope to see the next chapter soon but don't rush it, quality outweighs quantity :) -X-
| Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: not a member On: August 24, 2009 14:43 PDT
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AHH! Okay, first off, pity that Bulma thinks Puar is up to no good... unless of course, Puar is, but I think that Tien is a good suspect for being the sneak... (Ginyu). Also, interested to see where the whole storyline is going with Guru and Dende and what they can come up with. Finally -- RED STATION?! Oh jeez, this is going to get even better. I am so excited to see where you take this next, things are going to get messy (maybe in the good way for Bulma and Vegeta? ;D). Also, I think you wrote the scene with Bulma and Chi Chi very well, I was laughing out loud during that sequence. The entire situation was hilarious. Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next chapter! Thanks!
| Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 12:52 PDT
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Oooh Red Station. This should be interesting.
| Reviewed By: nutnatz [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 10:53 PDT
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Dun Dun Dun. Vegeta is headed right into the belly of the beast now. And poor Puar, all his indiscretions being revealed like that. I did suspect that 16 would not have been anatomically correct as he is a full android and not a full cyborg/artificial human like 17 and 18. I am also curious about Zarbon. Cannot wait to see what happens next!
| Reviewed By: nutnatz [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2009 14:53 PDT
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"I absolutely looove what you've done with the place so far" Just joking. Really though it's good to see you writing new stuff again and honestly, I'm loving the Puar/Radditz. I am getting sort of excited to see where you are going to go with the ChiChi/16 story. Especially now we've confirmed that Goku is still alive. By the way, I am so happy that you found a plausible reason for Chi Chi to start training again. Hope that the delay between updates is not too long.
| Title: So Good!!
Reviewed By: yunglucyboo On: August 14, 2009 23:18 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this story keeps getting better. i love how you make the characters act as they do in the anime, but at the time i can see your talent shine. What makes this story interesting has got be the dialogue, its just perfect, and funny as hell. Especially the scene where puar realizes that raddiz will eat him when learns hes been sleeping with a blue cat!! lol other than that, quick up the awesome job! i cant wait for the next chappie
| Reviewed By: starbrella On: August 13, 2009 18:33 PDT
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I wish i would have read this sooner! It's amazing as expected from your work. I can't wait to see where the story is going next. How Goku and Pic are going to survive. What Bulma and Vegeta are going to plan and how Chichi and Sixteen's relationship is going to go :)!!!! Ur full of surprises and i love this fic! please keep writing!
| Title: chapter 9
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2009 15:02 PDT
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oh my gosh, oh my gosh, this gets better and better, and i think I know who the mole is, and if it is how I think it is my gosh, I never saw that coming, I love the way you are interconnecting everything, and showing how all the characters over lap, I also like the way you drop clues, or atleast what I take to be clues, like for instance, your reference to the female changing room that Chi Chi uses, and how Gero might have used it for a female. And oh my gosh, you completely threw me with that 16 and chi chi thing, wow, I was like Chi chi Nooooo! and um, is 16 built like other guys? how could you leave it at that Cliff hanger. And boy was I happy when you revealed Goku, oh gosh, and the way you showed his personality, I love it, his thought processes as he thinks out loud to Piccollo, I really loved his dialogue. also, I am beginning to like your Puar and Raaditz interactions, I laughed when you showed Puar looking at himself in his original form and thinkin that Raaditz will eat him when he finds out. The humour you inject into the story is handled really well especially the way it is balanced with the more sadder moments in the story. I can't wait for your next update, but I will try my best to be patient.
| Title: chapter 8
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2009 13:37 PDT
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16 is so cute, you just wanna hug him, especially when he gets protective over Chi Chi ""You will leave her be." Another thing I admire about your story is the way you have the dialogue match the personalities of the characters. And you gotta love 16's reaction to the magazine, lol "Those women have no clothes on." And this bit made me laugh "They appeared to be hugging each other, and Sixteen wondered aloud why the two other men would care about the friendship of two naked women." I'm also captivated by the political intrigue, and the tit for tat between the rebels and Frieza, I like that you have written in a potential mole, I'm wracking my brains trying to think who it could be, as if there mission wasn't dangerous enough, this adds another level to it. Bulma has told everyone about her operation, so it's hard to narrow it down, at the moment I am suspicious about Gero, I am suspicious of Tien too, but Tien seems like he lacks the motivation to do anything, he is so unrecognisable from the person he was before I wondered what happened to him exactly, he's like a shell of himself. The final scene blew me away, the showdown with Gohan Vegeta and Bulma, and then the final part with Vegeta and Gohan, I loved that last part with Vegeta, you can feel the tragedy and strength of his character. This is definitely one of my favourite chapters of the story.
| Reviewed By: not a member On: August 07, 2009 12:03 PDT
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Oh this one was positively fantastic! Just overflowing with plot details! I'm really glad to know that Piccolo and Goku are alive, albeit, not well, but I'm really wondering what's going to happen between Chi Chi and 16. Also, really glad to see the attraction between Vegeta and Bulma, that's always hopeful. Interesting to see who would be leaking information to others, I am curious as to who Bulma tells everything to exactly. Kills me that you say there are going to be delays, I absolutely cannot get enough of this story especially now because Vegeta has a face to go with Blue and knows exactly who she is. Keep up the good work, and thanks for the amazing chapter!
| Reviewed By: Vegeta's Blue-Haired Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 23:00 PDT
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You're killing me!!! Need more chapters, soon! =D
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