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| "Pure Sex" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 > » ] | Reviewed By: damien_black On: June 30, 2005 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
its ok but you could do better with this one. By the way, I seen that rough sex fanfic on finalfantasyh.com and that one was decent. Its good but do better. Thats all I can say. Here's my message to the heterophobic mimi, if you don't like heterosexual fanfics, go kill yourself quickly and if you got a problem with what i said, my email addy is skylar_the_hellraiser@yahoo.com cry me a river (if i care enough to listen).
| Reviewed By: Cl4yivi0r3 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2003 18:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
The spelling and grammar were great. This has the potential to be an awesome fic. However, there are some points that need serious addressing. first off, it's called "Rough Sex" , not "Wussie-first-time Sex"; thusly, the reader expects what the title describes. If you're gonna keep this title, the fic needs some hard, back-against-the-wall, yelling, screaming, making-the-neighbors-jealous sex. Additionally, if Squall is a first-timer, then why is he so deft and daring? I mean, he seems to have no qualms undressing Rinoa, and he seems to have this amazing inborn knowledge of how to eat pussy like a pro. Same for Rinoa, she is not shy or anything. The LANGUAGE is impeccable, which is an awesome skill in the world of fanfiction, where most ppl never think to chack the darn spelling when they post their fics...but the LITERATURE is mediocre. There were no surprises here, no memorable scenes (well, except for mebbe the idea of Seifer getting back at Squall for doing it on his desk :) ), in short, nothing to set it apart from all the other "Squall x Rinoa" fics out there. But hang in there, spice up the scenes, and you'll have a masterpiece!
| Reviewed By: Sibilant Spirit On: March 13, 2003 03:17 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmm.... very nice. i liked this one. continue, pls. :-D | Reviewed By: Yuffie lockheart [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2003 17:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT SQUALL AN RINOA FIC!!! | Reviewed By: xan_nova [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2003 21:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this was awesome, I normally bash Rinny (for personal reasons alone) in my stories but I liked her in here. And to Mimi that complained of it.... she can read my ff yaoi... plenty of Squall and Seifer in that. | Reviewed By: NeonGirl On: December 26, 2002 16:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think the title perfectly fits the story. But Good Job.
NeonGirl | Reviewed By: The Professor On: December 20, 2002 15:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought this was an excellent piece of writing.
Now I am going to put in my two cents about people who only review fics to complain about them. First, if someone doesn't like lemons, they should not read them. And if they happen to hate lemons, then they should ceratinly not review them. Rants of "ewwwwww! you sicko!" and "you make me sick" make me, for one, wonder if the person actually read the fic. Also reviews are for constructive critisism, not flaming.
::steps off soapbox:: Thank you to anyone who read through all of this little rant of mine. | Reviewed By: Mimi Glassforde On: December 16, 2002 21:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
you hentai freaks make me sick. Its all about the love, and the gentleness. No fun. a good hard fucking, leaving them screaming their lungs out. thats what you need. and whats with your titles? I mean, Pure Sex, Deep Sex, Hard Sex, Rough Sex, these are just the same damn word, with four different adjectives. it makes me want to hum the Daft Punk song, "harder, better, stronger, faster". and it seems like something you could put in a ressume. Like
"Things Im good at: Rough sex.
My plans for the future: Pure Sex
Things I love to do: Deep sex"
do you have some sort of obsession with the word sex? and the worst part, ITS RINOA! EW! lets stab Rinoa and ease squalls tention. watch him fool around with Seifer. YAY. thats a good fic plot. yours...yours sucks. sorry, but it does *Writes that down in the big book of facts* no more writing for you. because it sucks! | Reviewed By: Shadowreborn [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2002 01:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this story, very tasteful and nicely spoken i fely i was in there minds at times. good work. | Reviewed By: Subaru_Sumeragi On: July 20, 2002 19:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let me say this up front. Hentai tends to blow the giant monkey (pun intended ^.^). This, although, while being almost entirly about sex, has feeling, emotion, and is beautifully written! I don't even consider it so much hentai as a work of art. Keep up the good work! I'd love to see how you write combat, what with all the muscle tensing and climaxing XD | Reviewed By: Goku's Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2002 20:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the story a lot! Squall and Rinoa are my fav characters. Keep writing! | Reviewed By: Dave Well Huang On: May 29, 2002 04:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah, strange I havent seen the dedication here before... ;)
This is still a great story and truly deserves its rank here. And I am still looking forward to DS... | Reviewed By: Teko Windstar [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2002 08:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was really cool as so I like FF games alot and I was waiting for a Story like this. Good Job.
^-^ | Reviewed By: Hiasha On: May 21, 2002 23:37 CDT
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I love it! Sweet and romantic...
Itīs not just sex, we can see Squall and Rinoaīs feelings... Great job. | Reviewed By: Big Fan On: April 01, 2002 20:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ive never read anything so good | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 > » ] |
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