| "Illusions of Desire" Reviews/Comments [ 43 ] |
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Reviewed By: blackcat On: December 17, 2002 22:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this rocks keep it up |
Reviewed By: Ghosts Dance On: December 12, 2002 08:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
*laughs all evil-like* Wai! Found ya! ^.^ You're doing a very very good job. I like the ending to the chapter too. The only (and I mean only) peeve I have is the voice of the Narrator is taking away from the impact of the story.
Example: "When he heard Kaiba's words, he stopped struggling and gave Kaiba his response by spitting in his face. Uh oh, bad move. Really bad move!"
The "Uh-no, bad move. Really bad move." Takes away, heavily, from the impact of the situation and the story.
The reason I say this now is because you seemto use those a lot in the chapter. **shruggs** Lesson up on the Narrator voice and you have yourself a wonderful story. ^_~ |
Reviewed By: lizzie On: December 09, 2002 20:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is awsome please write more soon!
it is very original and well written. Please update soon so that i can find out what happens!!!!! |
Reviewed By: sailorcelestia [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2002 20:26 CST
Comment/Review:
this is good. update soon! |
Reviewed By: nell On: December 07, 2002 21:46 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
So, Yami can't be with Seto, ne? How about Honda or Yugi or Shadi? *Goes off to think of other slash pairings....* |
Reviewed By: Blue-Wolf On: November 29, 2002 11:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...I may not be a member here..but I think I plan to sign up soon though..anyways.. I love this story and I expect to see a continuation of it!!! ^.^...the style of writing is awesome and I really really loved this fic!!!..
Take care,
Blue Wolf |
Reviewed By: Katmon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2002 16:57 CST
Comment/Review:
Katmon: OMG!!! Poor Yami!! You will make it better, right? *puppy dog eyes*
Seiji: Kill him...
Katmon & Kurai: *bash Seiji on the head* SHUT UP, SEIJI!!!
Katmon: Uh... Yes, we still want you to continue!
Ja!
Katmon =^.^=
And Kurai!
*from pile of broken bones on floor* ...and Seiji... |
Reviewed By: DarkWitch On: November 22, 2002 04:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't understand the ending. What happened?
Please don't leave it like this!!!! |
Reviewed By: firebirdy [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2002 14:01 CST
Comment/Review:
You evil evil person. How dare you stop right there. I like you! I do the same thing. Great fic. Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Blue September [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2002 23:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this fic so far, and it's good to see that you even put in some reaserch on the actual effects of the drugs that were used. Please continue. It was really quite good. |
Reviewed By: Borath On: November 15, 2002 16:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. I'm so glad that you've posted this here as well as I would hate to not know what's going to happen. Good luck with chapter 4 as I know that it'll be a gooden. Take your time, maintain this level of quality and I'll review it the second I've finished reading it when it's up! Thanks again.
Borath ;p |
Reviewed By: ccam3 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2002 17:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
its good great really but i dont like yugi /yami in that much pain.:\ |
Reviewed By: ccam3 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2002 17:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
its good great really but i dont like yugi /yami in that much pain.|\ |
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