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| "Don't Cry" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: Nekocin [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 20:52 CDT
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Chapter 11 was interesting too, kinda freaky because of Schuldig's reaction ;_; poor Schu. I've noticed a few grammar mistakes and misspelled words, but they're not too big.
It's quite sad that Aya is left heart broken... poor Aya, maybe next time, buddy.
Ken is really torn between those two, huh? although he loves Youji, right?
Now I'm curious what Brad is going to do. Because Schu has revealed his secret crush. Poor guy, the whole seducing scene in his head.
Please update this soon. ^_^ I know this might not be a proper review, but I guess that's the only thing I wanted to point out. Maybe some more romance mix with confusion and hatred [thinking about Aya and Bradley] | Reviewed By: Silent Cherub On: April 05, 2003 18:04 CST
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Yes! Yes! YEEESSSSS!!! ....uh, okay. Just ignore that. ^.^' That was just my screwed-up way of saying 'Glad you updated.' ;P
Indeed, it's been a while but hey.. This extra-long chapter makes up for it bigtime! Except.. that I'm still waiting patiently for the sex ofcourse! ^.~
That reminds me.. Tch.. isn't it funny how a hurt person ends up having a sex (as solace)with another instead of just talking or whatever. Cause this was SO the case. (Poor Schu.. Ken was NOT being nice to him! Bad, BAD Ken! No sex for you tonight, loverboy! ;)
Plus, I'm almost sure that Brad won't like the idea of him being used as a sort of substitute but then again.. I don't think he'll be heartbroken as well. ...Or will he? o.O He won't, right? I hope not. Not another heartbroken person! We need some loving right now~! ^.~
Hey, I liked the Brad/Farfie part too! The way you decribed that little scene of Farfello leaning against Brad, it was just so kawaii!! ^.^
However, I do feel kind of sorry for Aya now.. Now, it looks like as if he's the bad guy and sure, he may've not acted completely righteous but he's only a man. And I'm sure that if I happened to find out that my enemy was sleeping or doing whatever in my house I'd probably NOT say 'Oh joy!' and offer him milk and cookies. ^.~
By the way, I liked the fact that you made Yohji more 'normal' again. It's going good! No more madhouse-thoughts again! XD One point for Yohji, zero points for me. ^.^
Well, well.. looks like I've talked quite a lot again but you don't really mind, ne? o.O Else you've got to tell me! I'll just stick to 'it was cool' then. ^.~
Oh, and are you going to show that picture you drawed, the one you were talking about? It seems so cute. :)
And yes, I'll show you that fic once I finish chapter one but I'm so lazy *or* busy, it's not even funny. ~.~'
Oh and didn't you notice..? The last review I wrote.. It wasn't finished. lol! I had finished it though but for some reason it didn't appear fully. I discovered it some while later and thought 'oh well' ^.^' I hope she doesn't think anything of it.
Anyway, it's late. I should go~!
Good luck with the next chapter! May it be as good as the rest! :)
*pp's*
~S.C~
P.S wow! I've never stood by anyone's fic as I've had with yours. Sure, I review sometimes but with you it's just.. Something urges me to click that review button and tell you what I think of the story. o.O I sound like a groupie.. >. | Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2003 21:38 CST
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*eyes wide* wow... poor brad. i would cry if that happened to me. and wow that line "brad makes god scream like a girl" i seriously laughed out loud for like 5 whole minutes. the brad/farf moments you do are great! this is a totally cool fic and i can't wait to read more. so you better post or else!!!! >, | Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2003 20:44 CST
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Ayan should end up with Yotan! (i'm reviewing from ch 5 so i don't know what has happened so far ~.~ foolish me
Mara | Reviewed By: Toudou Higiri On: April 02, 2003 07:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
No sorry I didn't. :(
Keep up the good work, your very talented.
-Toudou Higiri
P.S- Did you send it to Adorable_Nagi_Naoe@hotmail.com? | Reviewed By: Pandora.81 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2003 03:41 CST
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Ohoho, Schu-chan at Weiss'? Please go on writing and post the next chapter soon! I'm so curious how this encounter will take part. ^^ | Reviewed By: voidsenshi On: March 14, 2003 15:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sigh* for a while there i thought that you were going to kill Nagi-kun, then I would have had to come after you with Hiei's katana. but none the less....Bombay's Prodigy lives so your life is safe, for now.
I can just picture Omi glarring. *grins* HAHAHAHAHAHAH!! Ayan got what he deserved MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! Keep this story going because my previous threat is still in play! *starts to look for Hiei's katana without him knowing*
~the REAL voidsenshi~ | Reviewed By: Silent Cherub On: March 06, 2003 12:39 CST
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Hiya!
Glad to see yet another chapter of your wonderful story! *wails* I'm just so happy. :) As for your lemons/limey's? and the couples.. Schu/Ken, Ken/Schu, Brad/Schu, Omi/Nagi and the other way around. I don't give a flying fuck. o.O ::coughs:: (Sorry. Didn't mean to get "vulgar" :P)I just mean.. I think you really don't have to ask us, readers, what we want. (Sure, it's nice but..)Just do what *you* want to do! It really doesn't matter to me. I'll be happy anyway, no matter what you write. ;)
Anyway, Chapter X was just super! Especially the thought of Yohji sleeping? through all the commotion and finally coming down with the line of "what's going on?" :P *pictures Yohji yawning and looking sleepy-eyed with an expression like 'wtf!?'* XD
So.. Schuldich's like on his way to the others, now or not? :) Aww.. Ken's knight in shiny armor. *sob* It's all so cute. Just as Omi's so protective of Nagi. It's definately sweet. You see, before this,I wasn't really such a big fan of the O/N pairing but now.. I've totally fallen in love with them~! *hugs* So now, I'm busy writing a fic with N/O in it myself. ^_^'Just hope things will work out. >__ | Reviewed By: Toudou Higiri On: February 21, 2003 08:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is sooo kawaii! I love Omi x Nagi and Brad X Schu. and I'm a big angst fan so keep up the good work! | Reviewed By: Pandora.81 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2003 13:12 CST
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Ohhh, you're mean. How can you let us hang like that? *wants to see Schu-chan at Weiss* ^.^
Hmm, a lime-pairing? How about Schu/Ken? *grins* Yeah, I know that wasn't an option but I still would like it. ^^
But despite pairing you'll chose, please update soon. ^^ | Reviewed By: Nekocin [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2003 11:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Heya! I forgot to add another one of my longest comments or ratings. Sorry ^-^'. Anyways,...
YAY!! You've finally updated. I've to agree that cliffhangers are sometimes neat ^-^, because you can attract a lot of readers who find the story quite exciting. Now I want to know what's going to happen next!
Like I said about your style, it's great. Not bad. It's very interesting.
I've noticed some misspelled words in your last chapter there [chapter 10] ::nods:: Uh-huh, it's there. But I think I should shut up before anyone gets furious about my constant pointing out to grammar mistakes, I myself have to read my fanfics a few times and notice a few misspelling too XD.
VERY VERY original. I like N+O pairings :D I like them. The other pairings aren't that bad. A+O is also not bad, but I kinda feel awful for Aya there... chapter 10, I mean. Very sad. Poor guy.
YUP! I've really enjoyed your fic, please keep updating!! ^_^
Overall, it's a very cute story though.
I've really no idea what has to come next ^-^', maybe a new mission, Weiss has to take action or something, Schwarz need to talk about Nagi being with Weiss... I don't know... ^-^ Well... just hope you're getting some ideas. Keep it up!!! | Reviewed By: Silent Cherub On: February 09, 2003 10:01 CST
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OMG!! I'm not around for a while and look what happens! Aya's about to behead poor little Nagipoo! It makes me wonder though *who* exactly should be in a madhouse (besides Farfie). Yohji or Aya? Tch.. choices, choices. :P
Anyway.. Loved it once again. *nods* Also the Ken/Schu part. I'd say: just ditch Yohji A.S.A.P! (Not that I hate the guy or anything) But, he's doing Ken no good anyway! ;_; That way, Schuldig can come, comfort Ken and make him happy. And then we'll be happy as well cause we get some Ken/Schu lemon. And then it's *all* good. ....Or maybe not. :D
Just ignore my rambling! :P I only wanted to let you know that I adore this fic and await your next chapter patiently. :)
*pompoms to you*
Ciao!
~S.C~ | Reviewed By: Yanagi-sen On: February 06, 2003 01:25 CST
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comment for chapter 9... hmmm... how about... YOU LEFT IT THERE?!!!!!!!!!!! A cliffhanger worthy of one of mine... you are evil... and you must post the next part SOON!!!!! ^___^ | Reviewed By: Yanagi-sen On: January 23, 2003 00:07 CST
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A cliffhanger... but not as evil as mine apparently... YES!!! Nagi-angst coming up! ^_______^ | Reviewed By: gale On: January 22, 2003 15:52 CST
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Im not really a Ken fan but I love Yoji/Schu and dont mind Yo/ken/anyone(ran,Schu or Brad)and I guess the suggestions obvious...
good story too by the way | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] |
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