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| "Fury" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] | | Pages (3): [ « < 1 2 3 ] | Reviewed By: I love Yugi and Davis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2003 05:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MOREMOREMOREMOREMORE | Reviewed By: Tea Fan On: January 10, 2003 16:12 CST
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Awww, I still feel really sorry for Yugi, but I'm glad he got over his crush for Tea and moved on to Darcy. The only thing I can say is that I am sad that Yami and Tea are no longer together. Hmm, maybe you could *possibly* get them back together with nothing to hold them back (:cough: Yugi :cough:). Don't worry, I like the little tyke but I think Yugi's friends need to be happy with their loves as well. ^_~ Well, keep up the good work! ^_^ | Reviewed By: DJ On: January 10, 2003 14:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is getting good! I'm really glad that the thrid chapter is up! I hope that chapter four is good as well! I have a suggestion here, so I hope it meets your approval. Here it is!
Yugi and the Kaiba Brothers arrive at Domino City, and head towards the Turtle Shop. Yugi is more then reluctant to see his old friends again. His guilt and shame come back, stronger then ever. When they enter, Yugi sees all of his friends (Tea, Joey, Yami, Tristen, Bakura, and Mai). They are happy to see Yugi again, but they see that he does not look at them. They understand why. He doesn't even look at Tea, still ashamed on what he did. She tells him that she forgives him, but that only lightens him a little. Seto tells them the situation on why he brought Yugi back. After he explains the situation, they are ready to help Yugi. However, Yami asks Yugi on what he has been doing all this time. Yugi, reluctantly, tells them everything that has been going. He tells them about his new life, his new friends, and his new love. Tea is a bit shocked by this, and she doesn't manages to hide it. Meanwhile, Darcy is on her way to Domino City. She knows about Yugi's past, but she wants to be with him. She loves him very much, and wants to protect him from harm. She also wants to meets his friends. Unfortunatly, someone is planning something. Pegasus is at the Duelist Kingdom, hiding from the law. Even though he doesn't have his Millenium Eye, has been keeping tabs on his enemies. Mainly Seto Kaiba, Yami, and Yugi. He knows their past and present. He also knows Darcy, and on where she is going. He plans to kidnap her, and use her to get to Yugi. He loathes Yugi above all others.
That is it so far. Sorry if it is long. I hope you check this out. Keep it up! | Reviewed By: leev [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2003 11:54 CST
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Fantastic! Very exciting, and an interesting plotline. Keep going! | Reviewed By: I love Yugi and Davis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2003 13:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautiful! Whats Yugi going 2 do? Will he go back 2 Japan? | Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2003 18:15 CST
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Beautiful! Very well written! | Reviewed By: DJ On: January 06, 2003 17:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is getting interesting. I hope Yugi and Darcy get through this okay. They look good as a couple, and it would be a shame if they broke up. Well, gotta go. Keep it up! | Reviewed By: DJ On: January 06, 2003 08:46 CST
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I know I already sent a review, but this is a suggestion for the next chapter. I hope you approve. Here it is!
Yugi opens the letter, and it tells him that Tea and the others are missing him. They want him to come back to Tokyo. Back to them. They forgive him of his outburst and say that they really didn't mean to hurt him. Yugi, however, is a more then a little reluctant to go back. He realizes that he has a new life here, a better one at that. He has friends that care about him and a girlfriend that loves him and would never betray him. There is something inside him, however, that urges him to go back. He makes up his mind, and starts to pack. However, he wants to take Darcy with him. He realizes that their relationship can't go any further unless he tells her everything about his past. The two are their bedroom, and Yugi starts to tell Darcy about everything that happened before he came to Canada. She is a bit shocked to hear all this, but is really a caring girlfriend. She understands on what Yugi had been going through. Yugi then asks Darcy to forgive him, forhiding his past from her. She does, and Yugi declares that he will never hurt her, physically or emotionally. Darcy does the same. With that said and done, they feel more full with each other. The empty space in Yugi's heart is now full, thanks to Darcy. Yugi then asks her to come with him to Tokyo, to face his past. She agrees and both ride an airplane, first-class, back to Tokyo.
This is all I have for the moment. I hope you like it. Gotta go. Keep it up! | Reviewed By: DJ On: January 06, 2003 08:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you very much for mentioning me. I'm very honored that you did. This is getting good! Keep it up! | Reviewed By: GOODwriter123456 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2003 11:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hhaha! This fic is so sweet! That is so awesome, Yugi going on a homidical rampage! Write more!!!!!! I usually like the pairing Yami/Yugi but I think it is so kickass when Yugi snaps | Reviewed By: ????? On: December 27, 2002 22:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
....incredible that one word describes this fan fic this is the best ive seen in a long time please make a sequle -??????? | Reviewed By: stupid kid 04 On: January 08, 2003 17:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MOREEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! | Reviewed By: DJ On: December 13, 2002 07:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice fanfic here! It really is sad, however, when Yugi does snap. Honestly, I wouldn't blame him. He is always on the sidelines when he duels, and Tea really looks interested in Yami (not Yugi).
Well, I really hope Yugi finds comfort in his new friends. Maybe even a new love, a girl that loves him! Well, hope your write the next chapter to this! Keep it up! | Reviewed By: Nite Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2002 19:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yami N.A.- WOW! I never knew Yugi had it in him. *looks at N.A.* what do you think...? N.A.?
N.A.- *cries* THAT WAS SOOOOOO SAD! *snif* I dont know who to feel sorry for! PLEASE WRITE MORE! | Reviewed By: Trunks' Girl 787 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2002 19:12 CST
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WRITE MORE! YOU JUST *CAN'T* LEAVE IT LIKE THIS! | | Pages (3): [ « < 1 2 3 ] |
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