| "Firefly Wishes" Reviews/Comments [ 24 ] |
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Reviewed By: Zackzman [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 02:03 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey........UPDATE PLEASE
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Reviewed By: Sakouya [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 17:12 CST
Comment/Review:
This fanfic is the best! Please update soon and quickly... (*Too much suspense! Must read!*) PLeeas, please, please update!!!!~
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Reviewed By: GreenEyedFloozy*nli* On: September 06, 2004 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just 1 thing *deep breath* UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Moon Child [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 11:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Noooooooooooooooooooooo, a cliffy!!! Ahhh! LOL! This seems like it'll be a short fic and will end soon. Hm.
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Reviewed By: Moon Child (not logged in) On: May 31, 2004 09:33 CDT
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I'm only on the first chapter but I have to say that was really good first chapter. Bravo.
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 08:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ok. I like the story. However there are a few things that need improving. First of all, you make it unclear wether or not Kagome knows the full extent of Inuyasha's amnisea. First you think she's just talking about what happened in the desert, and then I can't figure out if she's talkig about all of his memories. Inuyasha didn't tell anyone about his memory loss, so how would the others know about it? And do they only think he's lost memories of the desert?//////////// Also, in chapter four you have a major problem. I'm only commenting up to chapter four because that's as far as I've read at this point. You switch tenses. That is a huge no no. It starts out in intimate thrid, focused on Kagome. Then it switches to Inuyasha's first person after he speaks. Then it goes back to intimate third, then it goes back to Inuyasha's first person. That kind of thing is always unacceptable, and even if it's the kind of affect you were trying to achieve, it's still bad writing. Not to be rude, but sometimes people have come back to me complaining that my review was horrible because they were trying to achiece an effect through thier grammar, when the grammar was just horrible. Anyways, I don't know if you are going to fix that, or if you do it in any future chapters; but please watch out for that when you continue writing. You never, ever, ever switch tenses in the same scene.
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Reviewed By: Shaid [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2004 22:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
::smiles:: I read this, or rather, the firts 10 chapters when you posted it on AFF.net and I loved it. I'm so glad you've added to it! More please!!
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Reviewed By: cursed_jax [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2003 21:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey, great job so far, i think you've done a very good job doing a first person story, good luck with the rest |
Reviewed By: DarkCat On: June 10, 2003 13:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved the story please update so I can read the whole sory on all the chapters^.^ |
Reviewed By: Sessha On: June 10, 2003 02:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
you killed Miroku!!!! *Bawls* I dont know if I can continue reading this... I will try to see what happens but im still upset about miroku! other wise you murderer *winks* nice start Im interested. |
Reviewed By: DBZVegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2003 09:07 CST
Comment/Review:
I would be a reviewer of your Fiction "FireFly Wishes". I have no suggestions whatsoever, but maybe make.. well I do have a few suggestions. Perhaps the chapters can be a little longer, and you can add some more romance and or lemon content? I don't know about the others, but I would enojoy any of the above greatly. |
Reviewed By: EvenStar On: February 17, 2003 21:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oooo poor inuyasha... maybe you can do a lemon... but with like a lot of romance between Inu and Kagome.... that would be nice ;) and maybe add some angst into the mix ;) |
Reviewed By: moon kitsune's soul On: February 18, 2003 11:10 CST
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please make the next chapter a sango and miroku romantic fic part i like the inuyasha with half memory and half pride thank god miroku is alive i was getin worried you did a good job on making it seem like he was dead i dont think you should do lemon but i did like the love scene with kagome and inuyasha but he didnt say i love you too :( its almost like a cliffhanger This is a graet love fic in the frist chapters are heart- wrenching |
Reviewed By: sirencirce [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2003 22:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH MY GOODNESS!!! You are the master of EVIL cliffhangers. This story is great and I can't wait for more. Poor Inu and Poor Miroku. Please update soon. |
Reviewed By: Evenstar On: February 06, 2003 20:43 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
yippi!! another chappie! i love this story, although sometimes it does get a little confusing with the POV because i forget it changes but other than that it is really well written! update soon! ;) |
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