| "Temptation" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: Tatoosh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2003 14:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is the first DBZ fanfic I ready. I enjoyed it thoroughly, but then I like your other work.
Thanks for openning up a new fandom for me.
Of course I don't really need another yaoi obession, but it is nice to have a new one. |
Reviewed By: Dave On: June 21, 2003 21:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
Very well done. I'm new to fanfic so it was nice to read something good from the get-go. Keep up the good work, you're very talented. |
Reviewed By: Myself On: March 23, 2003 00:21 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should be very proud of your first yaoi. Its excellent, and yummy. Having Goku so bloodthirsty in sex is...delicious to say the least. I think I like him uke for the general though, but it's nice to have a change ^.^ |
Reviewed By: Kris On: March 17, 2003 19:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
first one i have read...so i dont know if the ratings mean that much.....reason why they are so high is i got a lil aroused by it n i didnt think i could cuz its two guyz so yea good job there hun |
Reviewed By: alfarrar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2003 23:36 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
A'nore: Black leather on Goku! mm mm good...
L'orn: This story makes me wish to be a coat hanger in Goku's closet! Yeah! Where are those Dragonballs?
A'nore: That's original. You're really strange sis...
L'orn: I love strange. And tight leather and whips and little bloody daggers and bondage and a certain Saiyan Prince strapped to the bed naked!
A'nore: So we both agree, good bondage yaoi between our two favorite Saiyan toys, um I mean boys! Keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2003 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow is all that i can say, i was glued to the screen and nothing more bothered me either well writtin and welldone. Great frist time fic loved it and as always kepp up the good work |
Reviewed By: otaku On: March 10, 2003 08:58 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was awesome! I can't believe this is your firs yaoi fic! Note to Vegeta: don't take it like this prince,you're born to be uke!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: manawolf [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 23:30 CST
Comment/Review:
::whimpers, crossing legs:: Ooooh... oooh.... ooh... ooh... I -- that's your FIRST???? You lie!
Only adjustment I would make is, perhaps, use of lube. All pain is not created equal... & un-lubricated anal sex is awfully, awfully painful! In th' bad way. Yeah.
But otherwise.... puuuurrrrrfect.
::wiggles:: |
Reviewed By: Star Spangle Mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*stands in shock* Wow! I can't believe this is your first yaoi! It was too awesome for word....I loved it!!! |
Reviewed By: Shastania [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 17:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Shasta: *eyes go VERY wide* By the seven Dragonballs of Namek, i feel i am scarred for life... Vegeta and Katarokk..... doing ...THAT.... *curls up into a ball, shaking uncontrolably* Think of happy things, Shasta... purple rain... marijanna.... Trunks in his underwear.... Trunks in bondage gear....Trunks butt naked.... *mutters to self*
LMAO! T'was a very good yaoi ficlet, me dear! :p
Even though the thought of Veggie and *gag* Katarokk doing THAT disturbs me to my very core, it was well written and the masterbation scene was believable! *gives a thumbs up*
Trunks: *curls up into a ball, twitching* The horror... THE HORROR!!!
Shasta: Excuse me... my muse has been scarred for life.. ^_^ ' *drags Trunks off for some 'sexual healin' * |
Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 14:53 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kurai: (eyes glued to the screen, drooling)
Yami Gemi: (Passed out on the floor, wings twitching)
^_^ Damn. For your first yaoi, that was excellent. Hell, for ANY yaoi that was excellent.
Hope there's more soon!
Later Dayz & TAnx!!
Gemi, Y.Gemi and Kurai |
Reviewed By: Dark Serapha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 14:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wow.. very impressive. Pretty hard for a first time, but definetely a very interesting PWP. Personally I'm not so much into the SM section, but it was done very well. Would love to see a sequel! |
Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 13:37 CST
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Heh heh, I understand about Budokai. I myself went on a binge not too long ago, final flashing every unfortunate soul that agreed to play against me. Hahaha! Uh anyway, I shall actually review your story now. That is the point after all. :)
Damn woman, I must say that your portrayal of Goku was ingenius! I always knew he had to be a closet perv (no pun intended) with the psycho wife he has! I could definitely see Vegeta being intrigued by the big goof actually behaving like the Saiyajin he is. Mmm, I liked it. Starts drooling thinking about leather clad Saiyajins chained to the bed... |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 12:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I STILL find it INCREDIBLY hard to believe that this is your very first yaoi fic!! It's EXTREMELY well written, VERY original...sure there are GxV bondage fics floating around, but the setting itself of the BDSM bar is totally new to me!...LOVED the closet scene!! YUMMY!! I'll admit that I'm not the biggest Goku fan in the world, but DAMN I love your characterization of him!! It's exciting seeing him as feral and passionate, not the happy-go-lucky fool that he usually is portrayed as, but a sexual being. Again, I must say YUMMY!! EXCELLENT first foray into the world of Yaoiness!! And I know your next fic, the Truten ~winks~ will be just as delicious!! THANK YOU for your note to me at the end!! ^.^ You made my day!! |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 20:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFFFFFFUCCKINGGGGGGOD!
THAT WAS ummmmm ok I dont have the words GOKU U FUCKINGGG!LOW CLASSS BAKA I HATEUUUU!!!! HOW DAREEEUUUUUUUU!!!!
Ahem Im calm YUp ! thats me ! Well I dont like yaois and I hate my prince to be dominated by that low class bich but ok 2 thumbs up!
Geta u ok baby?
+no onna I I --- +
NOW U SEE WHAT U HAVE DONE!!!!! Dont worry baby come here let me heal u baby u want so me hot sex Vege baby? HUH?
+yes+
Ok lets go!
Dont do that again ok!
*PSSSS! Hey this is NSBVEGETA well..... her sycho self and let me just say UUU ROCKKKKKKKKK!!!!! YEAH BABYYY OH BEHAVEEE!! GGRRRRRRR!!!!! I loved it girl!! GIVE ME MORE!!! , anyways my normalself is fucking the Geta man and I canttt miss that!*
*HEY BEFORE I FORGET WHEN ITS THE NEXT LEMON GOING TO BE HUH >:D*
and HEY UPDATE Pantera tigris tigris and For godsake PLEASE I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOREVERR!!!!
Oh Vegeta yes!!!
*LATER>:D* |
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