| "Undying Light" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] |
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Title: jaideen
Reviewed By: jaideen [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2003 13:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have got to be kidding. What was that supposed to be?
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Reviewed By: bfcat On: November 16, 2003 16:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a good plot, but you need to just a little more detail at some parts throughout your chapters. I liked how you delved into other's thoughts, and how you ended with the poem like thing. Also, about the detail thing, the one that sticks out the most in my mind is with the "crazy idiot dog girl" or whatever her name was, what did she look like? How could Seto tell she was flirting with him? From what I could get, she was just thinking these things, yet Seto seemed to suddenly "see the light" so to speak. And, I'm not sure if you did this, but I think you didn't since I never saw it. You need to put a warning for Anzu bashing and OOC-ness on her part. And, I still don't see how Italics SetoItalics could have given Jounouchi AIDS. If Seto OR Otogi had AIDS, they probably wouldn't have lived that long, and if they did, they'd pretty weak, constantly having to go to hospitals and such. You showed no evidence of this throughout your fic, whether this was an AU fic or not, you showed no evidence for either suspects. *shrugs* These are just my thoughts on the story, but I liked it overall. It was a good story.
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Reviewed By: Evil Inga and Evil Yami Inga [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2003 14:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evil Inga: *cries hystarically* T___T
Evil Yami Inga: *cries like a little girl* T__\\
Evil Inga: THAT SO SAD!! but such a good story nontheless!!
E.I&E.Y.I: *are having a moment of silence for joey* |
Reviewed By: Evil Inga and Evil Yami Inga [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2003 14:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evil Inga: 0__0!! YAY! ANZU IS DEAD!!
Evil Yami Inga: 0__\\!! *thows confetti in the air* PRAISE RA! SHES GONE!! *starts brake danceing*
Evil Inga: *skips around in a circle while singing in a sing song voice* DING DONG THE B**** IS DEAD! THE B**** IS DEAD!!! *in normal voice* ok im gonna stop now b4 i scare someone... |
Reviewed By: Tran On: June 16, 2003 10:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg, that was amazing. Thanks for the heads up.If you're making one of Trigun you better give me the link! |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2003 07:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
Karen: ;_; That was so sad.
LD: Damn it! That sucked.
Karen: It was a good story...
LD: That is not what I meant. The ending sucked. It was horrible.
Karen: But you like angst and tragedy and all that.
LD: I know. It is just, this was really sad. And I liked it, but it still sucked.
Karen: O.o You are so confusing |
Reviewed By: bakurasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2003 23:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
NOT JOEY! NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!! MY ALTERNATE BISHIE! Oh well. This is good, Gralnak! I want to see what happens to Joey! |
Reviewed By: Dragondreamer Yami Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2003 08:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
YD: WHAT THE HELL!
DD: *falls over*
YD: What have you done to JOEY?!
DD: And Seto...with Ryou and Yugi? But, but he loves Joey...but, he SLEPT with them!!
YD: Damn you!! If you take as long to update this time, I'm goona come looking for you! Got it?!
DD: *cries* poor Joey! |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2003 22:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
Karen: Umm
LD: WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?
Karen: Yeah, that is pretty much what I was going to say.
LD: I can't believe this. This is just so wrong... on so many levels.
Karen: I suppose that is what we get for reading an angst fic. The story is really good, it is just really tragic at the same time.
LD: Well, update soon. Lets get the torture over with... |
Reviewed By: ~Jocelyn~ On: April 04, 2003 18:11 CST
Comment/Review:
wow... almost as good as bakurasgirl... wow... OMG WHO DID SETO SLEEP WITH!!!!!!!!!!!! *faints* Hes my seto!!!!! DIE OTOGI!!! Anyway... you need ryou in this!!! *hands out ryou dolls* Ryou ryouryouryouryouryourour... wow it looks like your!!
Ryou: Tsk tsk... so easilly amused... its sad |
Reviewed By: Tran On: April 04, 2003 16:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved he too.....
GIMME MORE!
NOW! |
Reviewed By: bakurasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 13:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ha!!! My Anzu is contagious!!! I love the friendship part! Go Otogi!!!!!!!!!!! You rock, Gralnak!!! Poor Seto! He is such a sweetheart!!!! *hugs Ryou and Seto plusheis* |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 09:30 CST
Comment/Review:
LD: Ok, I hate Anzu as much as the next person, but did ya hafta kill 'er like that?
Karen: This so sad and extremely disturbed. But it is also really good. I wish you would update it more frequently. As it is, I can't wait for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: Dragondreamer Yami Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 06:55 CST
Comment/Review:
YEAH OTOGI! Shooting Anzu's like friendship!
Wait a minute! Who the HELL is Seto in bed with?!?!?! AAAAHHHHH!!!!!!!
UPDATE!!! PLEASE!!!! |
Reviewed By: Tran On: March 28, 2003 14:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GIMME, GIMME, GIMME, GIMME, GIMME, GIMME MORE!!!
NOW! |
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