| "Found in the Mist" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: miraicatarina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2003 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your story a lot. It's very well written and the grammar is way better than mine LOL Hurry and update soon! |
Reviewed By: Drackir On: April 18, 2003 19:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm impressed! Poor Trunks! Can't wait to read the rest! |
Reviewed By: Lark Kalusi On: April 17, 2003 22:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of writing:The way you explaoned things and how people acted really kept my eyes on the writing. I had to turn my music off to consintrait and I usually dont care for writings much.
Spelling and Grammer: Even tho I was not lookingofr any I noticed you used symbolz like hand jestures very creative kinda lead me to how that person or object felt.
Originality: Never read anything like it in my life. So much hatered for Trunks Girl friend HOW COULD SHE DO SOMETHING LIKE THAT TO HIM!
Enjoyment Factor: It kept me reading dident it. Even the part with the mom talking a little bit about her past was good.
Overall Rating:you hit the nail on the head great work type some more Ill come back ^_^!!!! |
Reviewed By: conrong On: April 01, 2003 10:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!! you've got talent. nicely done. i can picture all thats happening because you write so well. i dont know what else to say. but WOW!!! and i feel bad for trunks. :( |
Reviewed By: Space Monkey Ku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2003 20:27 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm terrible about reviewing! You know I love this fic! I can't wait to read more!! |
Reviewed By: icenectar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2003 21:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You definitely know your characters, J! Wish I could be the same way. Good job! |
Reviewed By: Lance On: March 24, 2003 08:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I remeber when I first read your begining draft to this story. I was in awe at the level of detail and depth in the way you wrote. After reading the finished thing I still have that same feeling. This was an entertaining read. I would be speechless if you top this in the next chapter. plz finish the next part! |
Reviewed By: EmberMaxximus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2003 04:16 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow! Great start and interesting plot, I just love Mirai to pieces.
~EM |
Reviewed By: liz On: March 23, 2003 18:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT B*TCH! I can't beleave she betraid him! |
Reviewed By: dbzobsessed On: March 23, 2003 17:04 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow, what going to happen to poor Trunks now? How could Misty be so confused on what really happened just because Trunks can fly? Great start with a great cliffhanger. The part Bulma and her feelings for Vegeta was a unique twist. |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2003 15:07 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this was great. and well writen and planed. I really feel for Trunks poor kid. lol I know he will get out of this ( Well I hope he dose.) Anyway keep up the great work. |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2003 08:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautifully written, I love the way you use your words... NASTY cliffhanger though!!! I agree with AM Bring back Veggie to Final Flash her ass!!! I have a Bardock you could borrow to do the job, if Veggie is unwilling. Great work so far... Keep it up!! |
Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2003 04:59 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow Jzara! The begining of your story is so wonderful. There was so much emotion flowing through your words that I couldn't stop reading.
I loved the scene with Trunks and Bulma especially. I wonder what happens now? Poor Trunks! A very imaginative begining, orginal and well written.
*hugs*
Ember
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Reviewed By: christabel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2003 23:17 CST
Comment/Review:
I love it. Poor Trunks I can't wait to see if she will be evil or good. Nooooo is she android? |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2003 22:42 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, Jzara, this is a very intriguing fic so far! Great cliff-hanger, but I'm worried about poor Trunks!
That girl better get her head out of her butt and realize that she's letting a great guy slip through her fingers and do something to help him!!!
I'm a little disturbed about Bulma's revelations about Vegeta, but you know, it's very, very possible that she really felt that way about him. 8-( *Sigh* Prince Charming he wasn't.
Great start, kiddo! |
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