| "Accidental Redemption" Reviews/Comments [ 67 ] |
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2003 20:41 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a wonderful story. Very detailed and thought out. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please hurry!! |
Reviewed By: nienna18 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2003 15:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this really is shaping up to be a great epic!!! Keep updating and I'll do the same Evil Saint! |
Reviewed By: lilsaiyin On: July 07, 2003 00:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!
THAT WAS A REALLY GREAT FIC I LIKE THE END OF CHAPTER 3 IT WAS EXCITING KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND WRITE MORE CHAPTERS |
Reviewed By: Evening Lady On: July 02, 2003 23:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is your first fic? Amazing! You write so well and describe things like a true poet. You make us think and want to learn the characters. It was wonderful how you made this original and I loved the scenes. Everything was in good perspective and I love how this is turning out.You also had no mistakes! That makes it a lot easier for the readers. I'm sure everyone is quite intrigued with your writing and I hope I see more of your excellent work. You have so much bundled up talent and I'm sure your lemons will be absolutley beautiful. Personally, I'm a big b/v fan and I love lemons with them starring. I just think they have so much chemistry together.You are the perfect writer to show how two people can fall in love in the most interesting and odd ways. Put just a little more detail and I think there wasn't enough solid action. I can't wait for the sparks to fly. What I mean by more detail is like, say, where Vegeta has Bulma by the neck. He feels her body and notices certain reactions within her. Or, she feels herself stirring even though she's in a dangerous situation and she can notice his chest pressed so close. It is said that saiyans have very good smell, so Vegeta could probably smell her arousal. So,don't be lazy with your lemons and please don't quit in the middle of the story like some peopledo. This is a good quality fic with a lot of meaning that can be hard to find, so keep up the good work and you better give us more. Can you please make the chapters a tad longer? UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE soon! |
Reviewed By: Evening Lady On: July 02, 2003 23:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is your first fic? Amazing! You write so well and describe things like a true poet. You make us think and want to learn the characters. It was wonderful how you made this original and I loved the scenes. Everything was in good perspective and I love how this is turning out.You also had no mistakes! That makes it a lot easier for the readers. I'm sure everyone is quite intrigued with your writing and I hope I see more of your excellent work. You have so much bundled up talent and I'm sure your lemons will be absolutley beautiful. Personally, I'm a big b/v fan and I love lemons with them starring. I just think they have so much chemistry together.You are the perfect writer to show how two people can fall in love in the most interesting and odd ways. Put just a little more detail and I think there wasn't enough solid action. I can't wait for the sparks to fly. What I mean by more detail is like, say, where Vegeta has Bulma by the neck. He feels her body and notices certain reactions within her. Or, she feels herself stirring even though she's in a dangerous situation and she can notice his chest pressed so close. It is said that saiyans have very good smell, so Vegeta could probably smell her arousal. So,don't be lazy with your lemons and please don't quit in the middle of the story like some peopledo. This is a good quality fic with a lot of meaning that can be hard to find, so keep up the good work and you better give us more. Can you please make the chapters a tad longer? UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE soon! |
Reviewed By: Laina On: July 02, 2003 14:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooooooooooooooooooo...please update!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2003 03:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wonderful and captivating. You have such a good handle on the characters. I love it when Vegeta is all moody and defensive, poor Bulma she's got her work cut out having to baby sit Vegeta and Capsule Corp. *chuckles* I can't wait for the next chapter Evil Saint. |
Reviewed By: christabeleve On: July 01, 2003 22:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow, you have a writing style that is poetry in motion. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: July 01, 2003 12:37 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Jeez is Veggie IC or what! ^_^ Great update. It's brilliant, descriptive and in-your-face. And they'll be alone for the next 3 months-hehe. I can't wait to read what happens between those in your writing style. Excellent job!! |
Reviewed By: lil rach On: June 30, 2003 11:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story!! you have great writing skills and I like where this story is going! can't wait till the next capter!! haha |
Reviewed By: reader On: June 28, 2003 22:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved the story not going to disect it just tell you to continue it. |
Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2003 17:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow! You have such a powerful narrative. I was completely sucked in by the whole thing. It was almost like reading poetry in places. Beautiful! Simply Beautiful!
~Ember~ |
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate On: June 03, 2003 21:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow. This is excellent. For a first fic, it is shockingly wonderful! You write so well. I love the way you portray Vegeta and described such a crucial and devastating moment in his life. You have presented a few elements about which, I hope I am on point, so I am curious and anxious for their unveiling.
I haven’t read any good fiction lately that describes Vegeta, his purpose, and struggle, so I am doubly glad to read this fic. I'll definitely be looking forward to new chapters. And if you make a mailing list, my email is vegges_mate@yahoo.com. And if not, you can always email me just to chat. ^_^
Take care,
~ Eevee |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2003 19:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! It is so hard to find decent B/Vs these days, but you have the begining of a masterpiece here! Add me to that update list!
phantomscribe72@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: Susan On: June 03, 2003 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My God this is your first fic? O_o This is awesome. Mel was right...you do have an incredible way of telling a story. Adding Veggie's mom was a nice touch and so was reawakening my hatred for Frieza and his asshole cronies. Great job ES ^_^. I can't wait to read your updates and if you decide down the road to do a mailing list pls add my name to the bunch. It's suenami927@yahoo.com. Kudos for a grand effort :D. |
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