| "Inner Struggle" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Reviewed By: Chibikori On: December 23, 2003 09:10 CST
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Please update! Its really really good ^-^
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Reviewed By: al On: November 27, 2003 22:31 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I take back my lame threat because i didn't realize that this fic was finished. You really should write more though.
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Reviewed By: Sakura Tom marvolo Riddle [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2003 20:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your fic was great.Please continue.Please please please please please!!!I wanna read more.^^
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angel_2891 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2003 17:26 CST
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man your story is addicting!!anyway i say it is wonderful and i think you should continue!!
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Reviewed By: al On: November 06, 2003 01:04 CST
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whatevr you write don't leave it here. Your fic is strangely addicting and i will continuosly annoy you every 2 weeks you don't update.
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Reviewed By: yahsa On: November 05, 2003 19:22 CST
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i love this fic but when is marik gonna be mentchined??? write osme on him on here to
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Reviewed By: *QueenOfGames* On: November 04, 2003 22:24 CST
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awww Kura is WAY WAY OOC! haha that's so sweet... he killed for Ryou! ::giggles:: Baka rapist don't TOUCH my boy uh huh Go kura kick some ass! GRRR BAKA PHARAOH! DON'T TOUCH MY SEXY ROBBER! grrrr HURRY and update before I hurt you! The *Queen Of Games*
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Reviewed By: Hieislover1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2003 21:09 CST
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Awwwwww. SO cute. MOre please.
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Reviewed By: Kogas_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2003 14:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was great pleez keep writing!!!
~Kogas_lover |
Reviewed By: QueenOfGames On: July 11, 2003 02:19 CDT
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Oh honey you did NOT just have someone rape my Ryou! grrrrrr I swear if that was malik...... well i wont really do anythin cuz he's my bizill so yea... ::glomps Baku:: Give her her new toys ::Baku throws plushie:: PLUSHIES FOR ALL!!
The *Queen Of Games* |
Reviewed By: AngelicMouseGirl On: July 08, 2003 22:59 CDT
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Yay for Ryou! ^_~ This is very good. Please have more up very soon! Arigato! ^_^JAA! |
Reviewed By: Oakland Peanuts [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2003 19:01 CDT
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What a change from the old Bakura! Write more! Light Kore! Blight - whoops, what am I saying? Write more! |
Reviewed By: ShadowsLight [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2003 19:08 CDT
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I Demand an Update! Or I may start a riot! |
Reviewed By: Em On: June 21, 2003 08:22 CDT
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plz Plz PLZ update!!!! I've been waiting like what... four day now? This story is just awesome! I need to know what happens next!!! |
Reviewed By: ashley On: June 18, 2003 14:56 CDT
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well ive been grounded but managed to sneek away on the computer....and yay a new chapter was waiting for me! it was a good chapter by the way...anyway you want ideas you got them {humphmmm}*clears throat*
1. whatever you do tyr not to rush the love between ryou and bakura alot of people tend to do this but forget how long and hard it is for bakura to love someone in the first place.
2.the situation although it already seems at a climax with the violence should get worse ...as bakura becomes enraged with his weak thoughts caused by ryous presence.maybe it should get to a point where ryou is almost killed by his yami or in frusturation with the new beatings he is recieving ryou will attempt another suicide...this time with consequences that land him in a hospital.
3. maybe in the next chapters you should try to ease in the thoughts and feelings of other characters [mainly yugi] by ryou going to school once again in another abused state [with cuts or bruises on his arms or something simular or worse] except that this time maybe by accident [yugi perferibly]will discover the tell tale signs of a beating and investigate further, maybe telling yami, who maybe confronts bakura who then maybe in reaction beats ryou who the goes to the hospital![ohhh! im on a roll!]
4. lastly maybe another idea is to have ryou in the after state of being raped and beaten and maybe famished goes to the only other person with a yami and thus with an understanding.... yugi! ryou trugging though the rain with torn clothes and such a heavy burden on his soul for feeling so weak helpless and dirty would make for a heartbreaking chapter...not to mention interesting at the innocent friend's response and the events that would follow!
....anyway hope my ideas will give you inspiration in continuing your story, update soon! they are just my ideas feel free to use them but you dont have to youre the boss! ja ne |
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