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| "Spring fertility festival" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: Oh no the Go Shin boku
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2003 00:12 CDT
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what did that idiot do to the gods tree...Inuyasha's going to hell...lol | Reviewed By: Crystal Singer On: September 08, 2003 13:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As a Buddist Monk...wouldn't Miroku be violently opposed to abortion? To the extent of forcibly preventing his most desired heir from being eradicated? Kagome would also want to keep her child, as a way to keep Inu Yasha from following Kikyo to hell, it would be 3/4 human and could stay with her mother in future, big problem would be being a teen age pregnancy in high school. Also, don't they have morning after pills in Japan? That would be much safer than abortion and Sango could conceal that better> | Reviewed By: saki smurf On: September 08, 2003 08:13 CDT
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hmmm nice story I've been reading if for while. Much of it reminds me of the Betliane Rites that are used in Druid culture.
the fact that Kaede is married is interesting and I was sort of wondering about that. How ever wouldn't have been hard to take Kiyo's soul right after she died?
Also it was very in character for Sango not to let Miruko finish his sentence when they were talking about marriage, but have you heard of the rumor about 39 or 36 is of the manga where Miruko asks Sango to raise his childern?
Also why weren't there any demons that have appeared, wouln't have been attracted to what was going on last night or were they all killed? | Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2003 23:39 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great chapter. please hurry with the next chapter | Reviewed By: N aishin no Miko On: September 07, 2003 10:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why the 7 and 8: It needs to flow a tad more smoothly, but otherwise, it's fine. I think I noticed a couple of minor grammar errors as well. Nothing big.
Why the 9: While these festival stories are more original than these damn "they're in high school!!1" stories, I've seen a couple of festival stories now involving "risque" Shinto material. That's also why I gave this 10 on the enjoyment factor. This IS enjoyable thus far, and I do like the fact that you have researched Shinto ceremonies--plus, you added the names of the creation god and goddess from Shinto legend! Wow, almost no one does that! So I am very impressed. A good read, this is. | Reviewed By: Thiemo Günther On: September 05, 2003 18:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you've done a good job at dealing with serious and sensitive subject mattter. You've warned from the very beginning, that this story would be serious, so I would hope that other readers would understand the "tough love" you give your characters. ^_^ Your certainly applying a level of
detail to the characters and situations not to be found in the original manga, or anime. Much of the nitty gritty (and nasty truths) of live in the
Sengoku Jidai is ignored in Inuyasha. Makes your story all the more interesting, for readers like me, at least. | Reviewed By: Angel452 On: September 05, 2003 03:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story! Does Kagome believe that she is pregnant as well? If so, wouldn't Inuyasha be able to tell by her scent? Please update as soon as possible. | Reviewed By: MoROn4Life [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2003 23:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What the heck goes in your head? Great story! enjoyable with a bit of history I love your fic write more soon! | Reviewed By: neoqueen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2003 22:26 CDT
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sorry, forgot to say Ja Ne.
R/N (Reviewer's Note), Neoqueen AKA No Tama in some places ( got the picture of ff.net on my beautiful head), sorry for my grammar, but you see, I don't speak English as I would like, I would rather left you my reviews, on Spanish, but I truly belive, that if I do that, then It would be a complete mess up here. | Title: Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!
Reviewed By: neoqueen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2003 22:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!! For updating this way, truly, I think I would die, if you hapen to not update sooner, I have told you once, in the first chapter, that you were evil in human form, but, I have change my mind now, and once again, Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!!Thank you!!! (now multiplie all those Thank you!!! by 1000000000000000, and that's my way to say, keep the good work man. | Reviewed By: Kirisame [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2003 13:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As great as ever ^^
I love History , and you're doing a really good job, as always.
I think your fics are really special, you know ?
You just take your time and let history set itself inside... that's great !
Keep going on with the great job !
Kirisame. | Reviewed By: Yoraeryu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2003 12:37 CDT
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o.O XD!! Love it, love it, LOVE IT!!! I'm actually learning Shinto Religion instead of simply sitting on my ass reading lemon fanfiction! What a change, what a change!! Thanks a bunch!! Update as soon as you can, okay? Sango and Miroku lemons are good... But I like Inu-kun and Kagome-sama lemons MUCH better! If I don't see an update by the 28th, I'll be miffed, 'cause then I'll be on vacation 'till school starts, and then... Rrr... Just try and updater before Thursday, okay? I wuv you!! ^^; | Reviewed By: nekochan30 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2003 20:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
and this one is great. I usually dont review but I couldnt help myself. I enjoyed reading this story and actually learned quite a bit. NICE!!! I shall be looking at your other stories. Gracias! Thanks a lot! | Reviewed By: Geshron Tyler On: August 19, 2003 13:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read what you've posted so far to FFnet, and MM. I've even commented on your Kyoto story. ^_^
I'm impressed at the effort your putting into your
research. Certainly, the Inuyasha manga and anime
are restrained in their authenticity of the times, so I like fanfics that intergrate cultural oddities and realities of life of the time, like you have with this festival fic. Two major points- writer comments really break up the flow of a story, especially where the flow of the story is so crucial as with Kagome's dance. You need to draw the reader into a sort of trance, just as Kagome is. Whenever possible, try to work any explanations into the story dialouges, or descriptive passages. All the good fanfic writers that I've read, and their commentary on the stories of others, will repeat that over and over.
The second point, I think Sango reacts a bit too much like Kagome. Certainly, her village was quite isolated, and it's own festivals might have been quite risque, especially considering the sort of dangerous life the menfolk led, and how important keeping the birthrate up to secure the new generations of Youkai Taijya would been(i.e., need to put on a _good_ show to ensure the fecundity of the village). My suggestion would be that Sango might have been reluctant, but not really against it- she could even have a hand in convincing Kagome- her objections would be centered more on the fact that Miroku would be her partner. ^_^ | Reviewed By: Babsie On: August 17, 2003 11:44 CDT
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So interesting.
I confess that I canīt imagine the all village going to it together, at same time...but...itīs a festival right???i donīt understande the real mean of it.
I like your story. I like the way kagome is acting and specually Inuyasha...I donīt care if it is a little OCC this is GOOD. real GOOD.
So...keep writing and update soon. | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] |
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