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| "Spring fertility festival" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] | | Pages (3): [ 1 2 3 › » ] | Reviewed By: Oiche Ghealai Faolchu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2007 00:18 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this story is well writen and does explore very different ideas from anything else i've read, but it does so in a very believeable way. I will read your other stories.
| Reviewed By: not named chick On: May 28, 2006 15:34 CDT
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I just read chapter 7. Your story is very original. I've never seen a fic about the fertility festval. Im not quite sure how I feel about it.. Kagome stripping with everyone watching.. wow.. and miroku and sango getting it on infront of everyone... damn..I'm not trying to flame.. just.. commenting.. As far as the abortion thing..(which I don't know if you're actually going to do it or not) I'm actually really impressed that u'd have the guts to put that in there. I mean.. I personally don't think abortion is right.. but I belive every woman should be able to choose on her own. I've also always wanted to write a story or do an rp (role play online with friends.. nvm) w/ the inu gang and one person either looses a baby or has an abortion.. but I'm a wuss.. Anyway, so far some of it is a little difficut to understand but still very intresting.. That people would be THAT open w/ their sexuality.. touching themselves and each other in front of others.. wow I could never do that...Anyway.. bravo for your bravery.. I'm going to read the rest now =)
| Reviewed By: muffin_of_god On: December 04, 2005 02:46 CST
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neh stopped reading this story half way cuz it was to depressing. liked the history and all but not as much the story. not really a good or bad story in my view.
| Reviewed By: sveta89 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 18:02 CST
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great story
| Title: MikoAyame
Reviewed By: MikoAyame [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 13:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great story Jeff! I love history also and this story was a cool way for me to learn a little more about ancient Japan. Good job! I do agree that Sango was a little bit too bent on revenge, but it worked to keep her from throwing herself on Miroku. I think that Inuyasha could have been a little more sympathetic towards Kagome when she was talking to him about her child though. But it's fine. Well Goodbye then!
| Reviewed By: err... On: August 14, 2004 05:24 CDT
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holy fricken hell that was long. i thought since it was so long...it would be really really good. sorry...no offense (really i don't mean to be rude) but the story wasn't that...inticing. it doesn't really draw you in. inuyasha is way too mean! it's such a depressing story too....
| Title: Cufflink95@aol.com
Reviewed By: Cuffers On: February 29, 2004 22:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thus far I have read quite a few of your stories. Like so many others you enjoy Rumiko's characters, as do I. You keep in keeping for the most part within their character personalities but one I find you make a bit more callus and serious lack of humor is Inuyasha. He is a 15 yr old male in fuedal times and a hanyou to boot. In his acceptance of Kagome and her untraditional ways in which she communicates and is able to say whats on her mind, wears what she wants and has knowledge of things way beyond their means to possibly fathom, you forget the awe in which he feels over her, he won't admit it and makes it completely known with his constant need to belittle her, making it all the more obvious to Kagome. It actually comes down to the degree of his insecurity to the degree in which he attacks her. Inuyasha can be seen through quite easily and the affection between them seems so obvious to everyone but them. Kagome's only real delemma is Kikyo. She knows what she wants but feels she has no right to his affections. Until the delemma with Naraku is solved Inuyasha acts like a soldier, but yet laughs, ponders what if, forgets, kids around, wisecracks and reacts appropriately to his circumstances. You tend to dwell only on that side of Inuyasha that is serious and not giving him the full rounded personality he has developed into, if anyone truely knows the anime. I guess i'm trying to say a little levity into his personality might be more fun to read. Your right sex is sex and so many offer up their take on how the couple would be. That would be a one thing I think he would undoubtedly dominate his demon and male influence over. Many stories sugarcoat this and westernize the act, here your historical backround has proven to be a tad more realistic, and being a dog demon would shadow the act also. But the one thing Inuyahsa is, is always a gentleman where romance seems to be an item. Hes crude in many other aspects and actually defers to Kagome at times, but where sex becomes an issue he is not historically accurate. Men in his day seized oppertunity and Kagome gives more of it than the traditional Girl of that period. Yet until its right and situations permit he dosen't go that route, the one thing that endangers Kagomes opinion of him is the fact he kisses Kikyo and not her. She feels like she has nothing to look forward to and this creates the only doubt she has of their true future. You capture Miroko and Sango pretty well, I don't think she'd clobber him to unconsiousness though, but it adds humor. She knows as you pointed out about her marriagability in the ways of that period with no dowry, no family ties and not effeminate. But the reason these 5 all work so well together is that they all share a devastation to their way of life due to the demon Naraku and being outcasts and loners for one reason or another they have created their own family of sorts. They are there for one another, till the end putting all their own fears and egos on the ledge till the important task is finished. The side benifit will be the reconstruction of the jewel, where one pure wish can be granted to its holder. Then its like being the new ruler of the world what do you do the following day... I do like your style and I do wish you to continue your writing, and like I tell anyone I deside to write a review about and thats rare, with your ideas and your historical knowledge and obvious love for manga, try your own wings and write something of your own.........what could happen? The same person you are now you'll still be? or imagine the possibilites.........so I leave this note to you ... keep up the good writing I'll keep your name in mind and fly.............. Good Luck >^..^< P.s. I too have a bit of knowledge into the Japanese culture and my Dad fought in WW2 on the U.S, side, they had an extremely violent nature and dedication to the cause of emperor, homeland, family to the degree at one time of being nauseous. I am glad that is behind us all and can only hope for a continued peace between the 2 countries..........
| Reviewed By: Alesyira [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2003 00:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Good job. I'm pleased with seeing how much detail you put into the history and the information you gave for most chapters as side notes. This story was a nice not-so-nice change from the norm. I'm glad you approached so many issues, and gave us alternate ways of seeing things. Good luck with future stories, and again, kudos to you and your muse for putting so much into this tale.
| Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2003 02:29 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, you do realize that with you story, so well done and thought out, you make others seem wrong and like a joke? Lol sorry not to sound, like it's a bad thing. But your so precise it's intimidainting. I know your not trying to do it, your just providing help. Maybe once I get my other stories done I'll do something as unique as this... -_- ... maybe not THAT decent, but something good. ^_^ (overall rating again ;p)
| Reviewed By: misticknight2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2003 06:02 CDT
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This is a very well put together story, I was very impressed with how well the story flowed and came together. If I was to rate this story(which I won't because I don't like doing that sort of thing)I would put it in the top 10 along with my favorite writers.(if you are wondering who those are they are: Lord Archive, Skittles[ff.net], T'laren[ff.net], R80, Red Rover[digiartistsdomain],and then this.) Looking forward to another great fic by you, Keep writing. ^-^ | Reviewed By: xfiledino [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2003 02:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a good story. Only one problem that I saw, Kirara is a female. Other than that it was good. | Reviewed By: (AIM) BooBooKitty27892 On: September 14, 2003 23:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fanfiction, I love it when people KNOW what they are writing about and put actual thing that would happen and stuff
in there. I will be sure to read your other fictions and am glad you wrote it like this. It's like Tom Sawyer (I hope that's how you spell it.) Where they say nigger in that book a lot and some people won't read it for a class because they say the author (I forget his name right now) was racist. The author wasn't racist he just wrote the book like it would have happened and in the context it would have been in for the time period. As you say he just didn't "Sugar Coat" it. Some schools have banned this book because it is "racist". Well I like people who don't sugar coat things because people should know the truth and I admire you for telling it like it is or was. I was just so enthralled by your story that I had to review it and I guess that says a lot since this is the first story I have reviewed on here and I have been reading stories on here for months but none were ever worth the time to review, but this story was just so great. You have it in you to be a real fiction writer! | Title: Momma Cat
Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2003 00:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is by far the most intellectually written story I've read,period.When I say this I mean you didn't make up your own stories and actually took the time the find out the truth of old Japan 'rituals' as well as there beliefs.I notice you hold your standard's very high and apologize for not being descriptive or elaborate enough,when the truth is this is a fan fic and most don't go even as far as you do when it comes to giving the real story.As for the OOC,people don't seem to realize that the character can't really be written the same as the person who created them.You can write them and stick along their personalities but you can't trully duplicate them.This a great story and the first I read that teaches you something.And I wouldn't mind writing the 'Inuyasha strip tease' but I wonder if I counld write one that dosen't come out...perverted. | Reviewed By: Naishin no Miko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2003 15:20 CDT
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Interesting. Not Sango's reaction...no, not even Higurashi-sama's reaction to Kagome-chan. I read other reviews, and honestly, I disagree with them, and I am not opposed to how you have handled the situation thus far. Miroku-sama against abortion? Yes, I'm sure he is, in more ways than just his devotion to his beliefs (the whole heir thing tends to come to mind, after all), but this is Sango-chan's decision that we are talking about here. If we look at it accordingly: 1.) Sango-chan, though she's female, seems to play the more dominant role in the "relationship." Everyone has seen that, time and again. Why would Miroku-sama go against her wishes? He wants her love and her happiness. That aside, 2.) if people knew anything about the history of Buddhist monks in Japan, well, they aren't your typical "devoted monk." Nobunaga-sama abhored and was disgusted with the monks, as they acted much like Miroku-sama does. He even noted their lack of honor and their lack of devotion to their vows. Considering how Miroku-sama acts toward women, why would he press his beliefs upon a woman, especially Sango-chan, now?
Also, why would Kagome-chan keep the child to keep Inuyasha from entering hell? Keeping the child out of her love--that I can see. However, keeping the child out of a desire to force Inuyasha to stay with her or even to stay out of hell is just not feasible as it is not like Kagome-chan at all. That would make her OOC, and OOC-Kagome-chan is flaky and unbearable (although, I am sure that it's just me that finds her unbearable when she is OOC).
Very interesting read. What will come out of Inuyasha's "visit" to Goshinboku? Ha, nothing good, I'm certain. Till then, I am ever your humble reader! | Reviewed By: Angel452 On: September 10, 2003 00:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What will happen at the God Tree? What will Kagome and Inuyasha's 'talk' result in? Please update as soon as possible. | | Pages (3): [ 1 2 3 › » ] |
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