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Reviewed By: Anime Freak317 On: October 11, 2004 23:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
In chapter 8, you have Cologne appearing at the Time gate. I liked how that left a mysteriousness in the story for the next chapter. I look forward to future chapters, And show some Nabiki/Ranma/Hotaru romance.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 11:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 9 it was great. Keep those chapters coming. You are an artist.
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Reviewed By: Gopu On: June 14, 2004 15:02 CDT
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Great chapter
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Reviewed By: Lonely_Destiny [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2004 11:39 CST
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nice. update soon
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Title: C. Rose
Reviewed By: Shi Hanna On: February 07, 2004 03:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright, I gave this a few more chapters and I have to admit it has improved in several areas. The only thing that really jumped out at me after the last few chatpers has been how fast some scenes move. I would suggest expanding several of the scenes out. It adds body to the story, detail, and most of all gives the characters more of a life. Check these out to see what I mean. http://shi_hanna.tripod.com/
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Reviewed By: ko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2004 22:44 CST
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update vary soon please
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Reviewed By: gourrina_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 18:17 CST
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Darn why you always write so short story...I want more more morrrrrre....
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Reviewed By: CyberAngelOne On: January 18, 2004 21:47 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice chapter though I do wish that it had been longer.
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: Lani On: January 18, 2004 15:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey! yay! you updated! im glad! its SLy bt the way...mm.org wont let me log in...T.T wah! neways, this was good! keep up the good work! so glad ya updated! now i feel giulty...i havent updated my stories for a long time...T.T kay-before i make another story, i shall finish two of my other stories! you are my witness kay! thanks hun! neways, good job on the chapter! dont really upnderstand the Sailoor Moon stuffies, been how many years???, but...why DO they wear such SHORT skirts? i mean-i like wearing short skirts too, but...wow...haha. neways, TTYL! -Sly
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Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2004 20:46 CST
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great story but short chapter keep up the good work
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Reviewed By: Kouryu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2004 19:18 CST
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-_-* You're blackmailing your READERS now?! Jeez, and here I thought it was bad enough for you to do it to your friends. Tsk, tsk. How cruel. *smirk* Better bump that count to ten. Make them work for their chapter. ^_^ Kami-sama knows I've done it enough times.
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Title: Hey, White Fox-san!
Reviewed By: Kouryu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2004 22:19 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have GOT to stop ending it in cliffhangers Briana!! *sigh* ^_^ Well, I finally reviewed, like you asked me, and I signed up as well. And, as promised, I am not gonna say anything about your grammar. *hugs kirbies to her* MINE. *growl* *goes from evil aura to happy aura* Off to read and review your other two fics!
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Reviewed By: ko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2004 22:37 CST
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i wound like you to white the next chapter
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Title: lo
Reviewed By: Slywolf9 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2003 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay! another good chappie! hehe-Ranma sounds pretty cool! hmmm...is that Ranma's other name wen hes a girl? sowwy, i confoosed! eep! wellz, good job newayz, hope ya update soon kepz! LOVE you story lots thats y!!! keep up all da good work! -Lani
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Title: Grand Poobah.
Reviewed By: Teal Thanatos On: November 19, 2003 09:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was initially dissapointed in your spelling and grammar. It improved somewhat. The storyline is brim full of cliches, I won't say how many times I have seen Ranma hit across to jubaan... not good. Also, A minor matter of matchup, you seem to have made the story and added a matchup to it, or vice versa. Either way that's a bad thing. If you want to keep the matchup you really need to keep the crummy matchup you have you need to implant a lot of backstory as to why Nabiki would give up a lot of money making to go with Ranma. Haruka as Nabiki's friend... Yeah, Right, the other leg's got bells on. Not only are they from Completly different classes of society (near dirt poor for Tendo, and quite well off for Kaioh and Tenou), but if your willing to be a friend with someone who is going to harrass you over money like you had Nabiki do to Haruka... It's not pretty when it happens in real life.
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