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Reviewed By: twin_star_of_suzaku [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2007 23:08 CST
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Waii~ excellent smut ^.~ you definitely have my vote... even though it did make me chuckle at the thought of Inu clearing off a desk for their little episode... it's one of those cliche images that I always find kinda funny in fan-fic writing...
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Reviewed By: forever_love [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 22:23 CDT
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Have to say Im impressed there arent many authors I know who can write good lemons.I cant blame them though its a hard task! You seemed to nail it pretty darn well! great job
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Reviewed By: Inu-Koi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2005 05:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE IT!!! NOW I GOTTA HIDE FROM THE PERVERT NEXT DOOR BECAUSE NOW THINKS I HAVE A BF SINCE I NEVER TALK TO HIM ANYONE!!! I MUST HIDE THIS STORY OR ELSE I WONT WALK FOR A YEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!! BYE!!!!!!! IF YOU NEVER HEAR FROM ME AGAIN!!! IM SORRRRYY!!!!
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Reviewed By: Hellkeeper [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2004 19:53 CDT
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i've read this to many times cuz its so good
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Title: Aaaaand...it killed my review.
Reviewed By: Anata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 02:31 CDT
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Here's the rest of it, starting with the sentence that got cut off: (and why don't reviews make paragraph breaks? I've put "Break" everytime there should be one.) There are so many authors (including me. Sheesh, I can't write) who could use a lot of assistance with their writing, and your comments make some good points. -Paragraph break- Anyway - the review. ^^; -Break- This was interesting, but I didn't find anything particularly special about the storyline. It would probably be more grabbing if it were part of a multi-chaptered fic, but that's your decision. The "punishment" was interesting, and the bondage was a nice touch (what can I say? I liked it) but, to my own preference, I guess I would have liked a bit more S&M. *shrugs* It's a personal enjoyment of mine in fiction. -Break- I noticed a few typos and spelling mistakes, but other than that, there wasn't much in the actual English department that I would change. -Break- The lemon itself went a bit fast. It could use a little lengthening and some more details, but, for the most part, it was quite good. -Break- I'll definitely check out more of your work.
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Reviewed By: Anata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 02:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Tiranth2 was quite rude. This was obviously an AU, otherwise, why would Kagome and Inuyasha be getting "loot" and sitting in surveilance vans? Don't skim a story just so you can flame. I'm glad that I finally got to see a story from you. I've run across some of your reviews on other stories and was sad that others felt the need to verbally attack you for putting some helpful criticism. There are so many authors (including me. Sheesh, I can't write >
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Reviewed By: Haunt On: August 18, 2004 02:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mph, no. Inuyasha and Kagome BOTH come across as OOC, whether this is AU or not. Inuyasha wouldn't treat Kagome like that. And I don't think he'd call her a 'bitch' so much. It lacks something to keep me reading...left a bad taste in my mouth the moment I saw how disgustingly OOC Inuyasha is. Not to mention the fact that I really can't tell what the point of him having sex with her is. Dogs don't MATE to discipline each other, okay? My apologies....but...no. I just didn't like it.
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Reviewed By: Tiranth2 On: August 11, 2004 15:27 CDT
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Well that was unimpressive. I'm sorry but there is nothing erotic about slurping noises. If there were then everyone would be getting off on listening to dogs lick their butts. You really could use a beta reader. You seperated paragraphs were there should be no seperation, confusing the reader as to who was speaking. Kagome was out of character, unless this is AU and I missed that somewhere. And the amount of weaponry they carry is very unrealistic. If they are supposed to move quickly then they would travel light. The small knives and a few items I can understand but they carry too much. This could use some major work.
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Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 12:26 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! I think after that little tirade i need a clean pair of panties! Sometimes its......refreshing to read a little hentai now and then! Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: DeathChildInuLover666 On: July 02, 2004 01:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ That was so so so so so good!! I want Inuyasha to be MY boss!! Hell yeah...I mean come on I would love to HAVE HIM...hehehe as a boss some day!! O FUCK IM THINKING HENTAI THOUGHT !!! O FUCK IT I LOVE BEEN HENTAI!! Your and exellant write and I REALLY LOVE THIS STORY!! HENTAI THOUGHTS HEHEHE ^_~ IM A SICK ONE HEHEHE!!
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Reviewed By: DBZ Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2004 21:02 CDT
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Ooooh, that wuz GOOD! Keep writing!
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Reviewed By: YasashiiAme [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2004 22:55 CDT
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Wow, heh ^^ That was good, I enjoyed it. I believe it was better than most of the lemons I've read! ;)
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Title: Nice!
Reviewed By: Rand [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2004 22:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good writing, loved the lemon scene really good.
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Reviewed By: AMANDA-TRINH On: March 12, 2004 09:38 CST
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0_0 THAT WAS THE BEST LEMON EVER!!!INUYASHA WAS SO HOT!!!HE COULD BE MY BOSS ANYTIME!!!U SHOULD MAKE MORE FICYS LIKE THAT ONLY WITH MORE CHAPPYS!!!
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Reviewed By: sango-chen [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 03:03 CST
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INUYASHA COULD BE MY BOSS ANYTIME!!!!!!! GOD HE'S SO HOT!!!
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