| "Enemy Mine" Reviews/Comments [ 100 ] |
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2004 15:03 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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I'm enjoying the story but the spelling needs a little work. Here are a few I caught: immediatly--immediately, pointate--potentate; surficed--sufficed; plaqued--plagued; thier--their; nieve--naive; wentch--wench. I don't mention this to be mean but because your mechanics are pretty good otherwise and I thought you might want to make corrections.
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Reviewed By: cherios On: July 09, 2004 11:42 CDT
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okie hi i luv ur story n think u write absolutely fine w/o ur muse but hey if they inspire u then i too hope they come back soon please update soon thanks bye
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Reviewed By: TooLazyToSignInAtTheMoment22 On: July 09, 2004 07:44 CDT
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YAY! Thanks for updating! Your story is great! Mute
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: July 09, 2004 04:29 CDT
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That was abeautiful chapter. The interactions between them played out perfectly once again. The descriptions of the inner workings of their minds consise and to the point. Especially like the way Kagome is slowly become more enamored of him while he too is heading the same way even if he does not realise it yet. Look forwards to seeing more when your muse returns. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: MutelyMe22 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 04:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Very good. Hope you update soon I thought it was really interesting!
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Reviewed By: lemon_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 21:11 CDT
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stupid muse when is he coming back hopefully soon so you can finish your story update soon
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Reviewed By: Relina On: July 02, 2004 19:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I realy loved it! But the grammar is a little bad! I'm really sorry but you write too much "HAD's".But it was still good , I hope you update very soon. PLEASE HURRY UP!!!!!!!
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Title: hury up
Reviewed By: Sierra101 On: June 17, 2004 10:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU BETTER HURRY UP AND WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER BECAUSE IT'S DRIVING ME INSANE BECAUSE YOU WOUNLD'T UPDATE IT SO I will say it slowly. H u r r y UUUUUUUUUUUUUUPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! @-@ *-* T_T
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2004 20:49 CDT
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I like the story. However, your grammar really needs improvement. I highly suggest a beta reader if you can not find the time to edit your work yourself. I'm sure there are plenty of people who would love to do it if you asked them.
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Reviewed By: Cattykit [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2004 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, Mija! Okay, just letting you know beforehand, this review is strictly constructive criticism (and most likely a few compliments ^_~) so please don't feel angry or insulted. First off, your spelling and grammar is quite... not to be mean.... but atrocious. Many words I see are spelt incorrectly. You have a tendency to put an extra "l" in words like "beautiful" and "wonderful". In words like these, only one "l" is needed. The double "l" is usually for words that end in "y" (e.g. beautifully, wonderfully). Also, to let you know, the "i before e" rule doesn't always comply with some words (e.g. their not thier). You tend to leave out apostrophes needed for possessive words such as sister's instead of sisters. Also, you leave out apostrophes in words like I've, I'm, etc. Remember, "would of" is really supposed to be "would've" because it really means "would have". There is no such thing as "would of", "should of" or "could of" in the English language. ************* One other thing I'm going to nit-pick (^_^) is that in times of description, you tend to squash lots of writing into big chunks of writing (like I'm probably doing now, but mm.org doesn't allow spaces in the review... darn you mm.org!! =P). In the first chapter, I found it hard to read because of the big blocks. The first time I came across this fic, I turned away from it that time, but once I really started to read it, I loved it. So try to space out the paragraphs more. The plus side on that = your chapters look longer ^_~ ************* Now, I'm finished with the constructive criticism and I will start with the positives. I love this story!! The plot idea is so unique and I love all the sexual tension between them. Inu/Kag is the best pairing ever!!! LOL. I really hope you update soon and pray that your muse comes back with alacrity!!! Love your fic, and don't be discouraged! I'm sorry with the whole grammar lesson up there, but I only hope that I've helped you learn just a bit more on writing. I realize that you could just delete this whole thing and forget everything I've said, but I take joy in helping people write better and I hope that the next time I see an update from this story, you'll be just that much more smarter in the ways of the English language. ~cattykit~
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2004 18:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
thank you so much!!! i thought it was very good. but still i hope your muse comes back so you can review faster.
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Reviewed By: Jacko_Vance On: May 13, 2004 02:31 CDT
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You made me happy. For 3 months I was waiting for the new chapter and now...? Thank you, but the next one could be faster please. Such a long time between the chapters destroys the feeling for the story.
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: Slywolf9 *n.s.i.* On: May 12, 2004 20:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i LOVED it! LOVED LOVED LOVED it!!!!! EEE! Oh! I hope your muse comes back. OH! And Happy VERY BELATED Mothers DAY!!!!!!! Thank you soooo soooo soooo soooo soooooooo much for updating! OOooh! I loved LOVED LOVEDDDDDD it!!!! Yay! KEep it up Mija!!!!! Sly
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: May 12, 2004 17:13 CDT
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That was an excellent chapter, yes it was short but it showed a different side of the both of them and hopefully a glimpse of things to come. Many people could say half as much in twice as many words. That was as I said before, excellent. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2004 17:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update!!! i wont get my hopes up though. because its may and you last updated in february. but still please update!!!
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