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| "Feudal Berserker" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] | Reviewed By: BerserkRonin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2008 17:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Short, choppy, but I like it, keep writin kid I wanna see where this goes.
| Title: Please don't be offended
Reviewed By: Rootbeer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2005 21:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This looks promising, but since you haven't updated in over a month and a half I'm laft to wonder if you've grwn tired of this fic or if you're just taking a break. Which ever, I think it has potential and you should keep going. Course, I can't tell you what to do, and I'm not trying to, but I did enjoy your story. Constructive criticism, I would try re-reading what you've written out loud to yourself, and fix some of the grammatical anomalies in your writing. Also, and I'm not sure if you intend to do this later as there hasn't been much but action so far, but I'm a little bit in the dark about a few things, like this vortex and whatnot, so elaboration would be appreciated, but as I mentioned, I don't know if you plan to do that already. Still, everything aside, it's a very good storyline from what I can tell, and it has good potential.
| Reviewed By: Inugurl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 11:46 CDT
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Interesting. Update soon!
| Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2004 11:47 CDT
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OH! and does anyone know if there are more episodes to Berserk??? And if there area when and were can I see them?
| Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2004 11:45 CDT
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I like the story I just finished seeing all of the Beserk episodeds and I wanted to see if there were any fics only to find out that you made a cross over with my favorite anime Inuyasha. I like the way you crossed them over and I also see that you haven't updated for a while. I hope to see that you do update soon because this is becoming a ver interesting story.
| Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2004 16:31 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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Good job on the fight sequences! Enough detail to be convincing but not a painful amount. I'd like to see where you are going to take this.
| Reviewed By: Relix On: January 28, 2004 02:50 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE!!!
| Reviewed By: cursed_jax [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2004 21:35 CST
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nice fight...a legitimate excuse for guts to go after inuyasha (blood rage will get ya every time). update when next you can, and good luck with the rest.
| Reviewed By: The Beast On: January 21, 2004 22:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hell yeah Guts is the coolest. Update soon, I can't wait until Guts and Inuyasha meet.
| Reviewed By: Relix On: January 21, 2004 12:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
are you updating soon?
| Reviewed By: AngelOfBlades [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2004 16:24 CST
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Very nice. Very nice. But remember, this is set before guts gets the giant sword. the length is right, but it's only about 6 inches wide.
| Reviewed By: Relix On: January 05, 2004 10:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
a little bit too fast but still good!
| Reviewed By: dhrachth [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2003 19:46 CST
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I'm really liking this so far. I'm reserving judgement till the two sets of characters actually meet--so many crossovers go wrong at that point with one group being favored over the other in the depiction--but judging from two good chapters I have high hopes that you'll get it right. Berserk/Inuyasha is points for originality. They don't seemingly go together, but I can see how it could work. They are two of my favorite animes and it's nice to see them together. One thing to note, you set this before Griffith went evil. At this point Guts wants Griffith to be his friend, or wants to be worthy of Griffith's friendship, or something complicated & subtle along those lines. The lines about being free weren't out of character, but going further in that vein would be, considering the time frame and what Guts does and doesn't know at that point. I don't want to sound too pushy here, you are the writer, it's your story, you're in charge, and I don't have any reason to think you don't know what you're doing. You could have an absolutely superb storyline already in mind--something my feeble author skills could never dream of. On the other hand, I read a lot of crossovers and I've noticed some things that often go wrong. Presenting my concerns for your consideration before anything goes wrong couldn't hurt and might help. Pitfall #1: The two characters fighting for no particular reason and someone ending up looking bad. For instance, with your story, Inuyasha comes upon Guts killing demons. Why on earth would they fight there? (I'm not saying that's what you're planning, just that a fight first thing is a common crossover occurence.) Inuyasha doesn't attack humans unless he's having one of his full demon blood episodes. Guts likes to fight, but he doesn't randomly attack people for no good reason. I'm not saying one can't fight with the other, just that there needs to be a good reason for it first. Actually, come to think of it, a fight of some sort would be quite likely, or at least an argument. Kagome, Inuyasha, Guts, & Caska aren't any of them the calm, peacemaking type. Pitfall#2: The two groups of characters immediately spot their similarities and become life long friends. Two groups might be similar but on first meeting how the heck would they know? They wouldn't even know on second or third meeting because who trots out their entire life story for every new acquaintence so that they can compare notes? For instance, with your story, first meeting I'd say Inuyasha (and to a lesser extent Kagome) could admire Guts & Caska's fighting abilities. Guts & Caska could appreciate whatever help Kagome & Inuyasha give, medical assistence, info about where they are, whatever it is they do. But, they wouldn't be pals to some later date, when they aren't perfect strangers.
| Reviewed By: cursed_jax [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2003 16:33 CST
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interesting renditition of what happens, kinda interesting how ive only seen the second and fifth dvds of berserker.kinda weird i know. wonder how many demons he'll be able to defeat. it would also be very interesting to see inuyasha and guts fight, the of the bfs's (big fucking swords)dont ask. no mistakes seen as of yet, but ill tell you if i do find any. farewell for now, and until next we meet be at peace.
| Title: Not bad.
Reviewed By: Michiru On: December 24, 2003 03:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad at all. The beginning is interesting, and it's great to finally see some Berserk fics around here. ^^ My only suggestion would be to work on your detailing. The story went very fast, with no details to flesh it out, and that takes away from the overall product. But it's more than interesting enough to make me want to read the next part, and that's the important thing, right? ^_^
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