| "Heart of the Beast" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Reviewed By: mona On: February 20, 2004 05:02 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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love the ending on chapter 2... great story please update:>
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Reviewed By: Mely On: February 19, 2004 23:17 EST
Comment/Review:
Please continue with the story!
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Reviewed By: The Hunny On: February 14, 2004 19:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree, although this is a free country, and I love it graphic the hot iron up the ass and nipple thing just don't do it for me. However, a threesome with Zarbon certainly does! I'm glad you're open to ideas, just don't toss it all up to the standard B/V fic, please. Even though I'm a die hard B/V fan, I do enjoy watching them suffer. So give Frieza a few more chaps! Great job so far.
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Title: sugesstion
Reviewed By: crimson darkness On: February 14, 2004 09:51 EST
Comment/Review:
just a sugesstion but what if freiza has his way with bulma and then hands her over to vegeta so u know the usual bulma becomes vegetas slave but she is suffering really badly because of how vegeta rapes her all the time then something happens on vegetasei or namek for instance and bulma is captured by freiza again and given to zarbon and they do a three some or something i don't know (my god i'm fucxked in the head :P) i know it doesn't sound too good at the moment but i'm sure u can work with it also i agree with Lelia don't let vegeta sharte his toys it's so not him and u know maybe throw in a vicious gang rape of the ginyu force or something from bulmas perspective ya know anywayz i'll shut up now :P good luck wtih ur story hope u like my advice :D
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Reviewed By: crimson darkness On: February 14, 2004 09:44 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i really like ur style of writing and hope u continue with it ur story is turning out really good are u going to send it dark and gothic or make it more innocent just wondering can't wait for the next chapters
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Reviewed By: Evil Saint (not logged in) On: February 13, 2004 15:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! I'm so glad some one with talent decided to do a (gasp) ORIGINAL B/V. Stories with promise are so rare lately and I'll definitely be looking out for future updates of this one. I know that it's kinda tough writing B/Vs these days, because for whatever reason, people are horribly critical of the pairing - if you follow the tried and tested "recipe" you're accused of being cliché; if you try something new, more often than not, your characters are labelled OOC >_< I love the way you've written Bulma in this chapter and I'm eager to see what you do with Vegeta. I don't really have any constructive advice for you, except to tell you my personal likes and dislikes, which - hopefully - are shared by a couple of other B/V fans. I like angst fics more than any other genre and I'm usually up for anything as long as the story remains believable and maintains at least some miniscule measure of decency. Call me old fashioned, but a graphic description of Vegeta amputating Bulma's nipples with a scalpel while raping her anally and having her wide awake for the whole ordeal is just a little more than my stomach can take :-X Since you asked I'd personally like to see Bulma end up Veggie and not Frieza in the next chapter, but this is YOUR story and you should go wherever you creativity takes you. You obviously have a lot of it and I'm sure the story will be awesome whatever you decide. Well that's enough rambling from me ^_~ Good Luck with the writing! ES
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Reviewed By: Evil Saint (not logged in) On: February 13, 2004 14:41 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! I'm so glad some one finally decided to do a(gasp)GOOD B/V for a change. This looks like a promising story and I can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck with the writing!
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Reviewed By: spini On: February 13, 2004 09:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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wow I really like it! I hope vegeta gets her! lol
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Reviewed By: Meli On: February 13, 2004 02:28 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story has potential, I look forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: Punky Monkey [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2004 19:46 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very good, and that is basically what I can say since it is the first chapter. But, of course she should be handed over to Vegeta. I'd love to see what he does with her. And of course, you gotta love the slave fics. I just can't wait for one that is totally original and has something new. Me, I'm not much of a Frieza fan. In fact, you could say I hate him. I hate rape, too. Update! What Lelia said was what I wanted to say. I can't wait. You've been doing great. Especially for only having two fics.
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Reviewed By: Lelia On: February 12, 2004 15:26 EST
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Oh, once again a Bulma/slave fic. you can never have too many of these. Well, duh, she ought to be sent to vegeta, I mean frieza doesn't even have a dick and the tail rapin is soo yeasterday. I can handle well dark stories, oh, who am I kidding I'm loving them, but please don't make vegeta share her with the rest of his crew. That is so not-vegeta like to share his toys, I'm sure that he could find other creative ways to punish her. Update!
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