| "The Wild West and the Gang of Four Souls" Reviews/Comments [ 36 ] |
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Reviewed By: Aitu-- not signed in On: August 12, 2004 15:23 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVES IT! hehehe. Yey! The story is back! I'm so happy, hehe. Well I went through and did what you asked so I'll just post up some little editing parts for ya. Didn't find that many mistakes though; good job for no editing, hehe. Oh yea, they are in sequencial order too so hopefully it will be easy to find and correct if ya want to--- I were you even thinking doing something as stupid as riding into that street alone?" (Omit the "I" and change to Why)----I don't think that's it Kagome; I think you think I'm too stupid and untrustworthy to know your big complicated life." (add ; between Kagome and I)---I was never jealous, originally, and she didn't rub it in; we were actually near inseparable for most of our childhoods. (add the two commas before and after originally)---and a blanket I wrapped him up and carried him out since he was still too drowsy to think on his own. As (Omit the word "as" unless it was a sentence that got cut off?)---I made Souta stay with them but I couldn't; it put them all in too much danger.(Use ; instead of a comma)--- End of editing. Hopefully you can understand all that jumbled together. Great chapter! Yey, Kagome finally told Inuyasha her past. I've been holding my breath until that happened, lol. I can't wait to see what will happen next! Once again, amazing work and I'll be reading and reviewing more soon! ---Aitu
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Title: Rokage!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: rin_sama1989 On: June 07, 2004 17:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I realy love this fic.Im a hard core inufan and 24 hour critic yet i find few things to realy rant about.You are very original and sensitive to the caracters personality you can descibe clothing and apearences,yet you neglect the backgrounds and seanery.im only seven years old but i now potential when i see it.keep this up and you can go far.i suggest you read some novels with more horor. that will help with the details and necicery battle sequences. overall i think this fic is something you can work with as an original work with a switch of names and minor details.i would also like to ask you if you would be interested in a joint fic were the original inuyasha carecters get troughn into verios dimentions and meet ther counterparts.ill be recomending this to my other authers and will be looking forward to a responce from you. rin_sama1989@yahoo.com
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Title: GGGGGGGGGGGGAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHY???? ;.;
Reviewed By: Aurora_thorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2004 00:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! How long has this chap been posted???? My e-mail is malfunctioning and I never got the uto-notify that you updated! WWWAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! *Sobs* *Stops* I'm better now... Anyways... This chapter was good. It was lacking on comedy, but still very good. Sounds like kagome and Sango are going to have to save the men's butts. Haha ^^. I also noted that you are using Western names along with the original Japanese names in your story (Shirley, Jone, Jim) (Kagome, Goshinki, Miroku) Does that mean that all of the characters that you will make up are going to have wesern names? That would be awfully daring, and I like that quality. It will also help the newer Inu-fans know if your characters are in the original or not. ^^ I also must compliment you again for keeping your characters so well... err... in character! This fic is a wonderful sigh of relief compared to most of other fan fics out on mediaminer now. I hope you become inspired to write more soon! Sorry about the late-ness of my post. ;.;
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Reviewed By: Y On: May 17, 2004 17:33 CDT
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Hmmmm... The last chapter was better, but as I already said the last chapter was well above your usual standard. This latest one isn't extraordinary, but it's still good. I think that, with more time and less pressure, you can do better than this. Keep up the good work and remember to not rush yourself no matter how much we all scream at you to HURRY UP!!! It will all come with time. May the muse be with you.
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Reviewed By: Aitu (Not signed in) On: May 16, 2004 14:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there. Just voicing my opinion here. I really like the whole western spin on things if I haven't already said that? I can't remember if I've reviewed before or not but if I haven't sorry. I think that it's original, creative, and obviously entertaining! I think that you are doing a really good job on the story so far. If it ideas that you would like or do you have things pretty much figured out? If there's anything else that you would like I'd be happy to help if I can. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more of your story.
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2004 08:23 CDT
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good chap. I can't wait to see how kagomes gonna get inu back now. update soon plz
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Reviewed By: Aitu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2004 23:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Liked it, loved it, can't wait for more. I really enjoy the western theme. Can Kagome kick some ass now? hehehe.
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Reviewed By: Y On: April 26, 2004 19:29 CDT
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Oh *pause* My *pause* GOD!!!!!!! THAT was the best action sequence I have read in a loooooong time! You should seriously consider doing more of those! This chapter definitely exceeded(my) expectations! May the muse be with you
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Title: *Sweatdrops*
Reviewed By: Aurora_thorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2004 23:48 CDT
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Sorry for dumping all of my problems today on your review board!!!! Sorry!! ^_^;;;
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Title: THANK KAMI FOR FREQUENT UPDATES!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Aurora_thorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2004 23:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello again! It's nice that you kept to your word and updated so quickly. I like it when people update good fics on a frequent basis (which is rare). So, now I'm even more curious about Miroku's prank. We (the viewers) haven't seen the slightest clue to what it might be yet and from what you said, you leave me in never dying suspence. Anyway, I take it the "non-tribal" is Rin, correct? It would be nice to hear the story behind that one. Uhg.. I'm also so happy that you updated. No one is updating my favorite fics NOBODY and I checked out some of the newer fics and I nearly died from shock on how OOC all the characters are. I believe I even flamed one under an anonymis (I don't know how to spell that) name. I was also in a cranky mood today since I got sun burned after psycho dragged me to her house to sell (out of all the things in the world) lemonaide. This is sadly money that we're trying to collect to go to Japan. (We're so pathetic) And I ended up giving her my half (which was a surprising total of thirty something dollars judging from the product) to let us go inside. Then I was more content. Your fic, truly made my day better.
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Reviewed By: Y On: April 19, 2004 20:20 CDT
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P.S. Someone should dance. I don't know why, they just should. Possibly with one other? I dunno.. this was completely random :P
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Reviewed By: Y On: April 19, 2004 20:16 CDT
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*groan* You made him SING. How degrading can you get. Oh well, it was really really funny and in the end, isn't that what really matters? The compassionate answer would be no, but whatever :P 4-3-1 I hope that means you did good! I really couldn't tell you... May the muse be with you
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2004 11:20 CDT
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YEAY!!! my hunny sesshomaru makes an apperance, I can just picture him in indian clothing (nothing but a loin cloth) and that bare chest :::starts to drool::: . Please update soon. Oh! and no problem, I like reveiwing to good fics :)
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Reviewed By: Aurora_thorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2004 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello again! I'm intrested to see how Miroku will plot his revenge. For you to bother to keep it a secret means that the prank and the reaction of the prank should be good. I also can't wait to see how Kagome's reaction will be to her lovely shampoo. Then agin I can't imagine Kagome taking that lightly with Inuyasha once it does happen. It should be enjoyable... Anyway, great chap. Evil cliffy, but it keeps readers hooked so great job. Out of curiosity, is Rin going ot be in this fic and if so, will she be older or still a child? I'm looking foward to your next update (Sunday probably, correct?) One last thing, I think it's good to have a friend in fanfiction too. ^^
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2004 22:00 CDT
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Lol, I love the story. It's a great story live and a break from the original plot. i love the creativity and the fact that the charictars aren't ooc in a completly different setting. All in all this is comming out to be a great fic. Hope you update soon!! *cindy*
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