| "My Project: Jounouchi Katsuya" Reviews/Comments [ 43 ] |
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Title: And is that a chicken crawling up my back?(Seto reflecting on Eddie)
Reviewed By: Felidae5 On: August 17, 2004 15:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know how to tell you this without hurting you feelings, but, please,for the love of God, my sanity and your own story-GET A BETA!!! Don't get me wrong, I love your story, especially the 'Home Improvement(G)' Seto, aswell as the conflict between Jou and his mother, but the grammar-why pour cheap vinegar over a perfect ceasar's salad? Or bake a boysenberry pie with rotten fruits? I know, grammar-and spellchecks are the bitter part of being a writer, but remember that many readers 'only' know school-English(*cough*like me*cough). Using slang in dialogues is fun and gives the characters more depth, but for telling the story itself, try to keep the language 'clean'. It may seem more boring, but, especially when it comes to descriptions, your readers will be grateful if they don't have to start taking out their dictionaries and play teacher. Thus said, I leave you doing that magic plotting of yours again, because *that* is pure magic. Ja ne!^^
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Reviewed By: Anone On: August 17, 2004 07:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Rarely i get to read fic that i actually enjoy and that make some sense. You'll make my day\week\month (depends on your updates) even more pleasant by letting me read the next chapter. (In other words: Update... now.. err.. plz? )
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Reviewed By: THE ONE AND ONLY! ((Tamra of Egypt)) On: August 16, 2004 21:50 CDT
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I was soOOOOOOOOOO_ happy when i saw that you updated! THIS story is AWESOME! and i practically rolled on the floor laughing out loud on the other chapters with Mokuba and Kaiba. ITs funny to see Mokuba thinking he's gonna die because Seto can't cook. WEll i got a kick out of that! But i did love this chapter and i can't wait till the next! I really can't! Oh and by the way: UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeEEEEz! SOON?
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Reviewed By: Yamia [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2004 15:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh man,this story narrates my cooking life to a T.i wish i had Joey here to help me.i can do without the burnt food and nicked fingers....*sigh*anyway,this is a great story so you must hurry and continue this!!!please!!!ja!!!
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Reviewed By: Nekocin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 20:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O.O Wow! Just... wow! I can't believe I've been away from MM.org and missed this story. I love this story of yours. Perfectly described; although I do find it a bit hindering to see the story change from POVs. But okay nonetheless... uhmm, mayby humourous. ^_^ I've not found any grammar/spelling errors so it's okay to give you a rate 10 ^_~. Originality a 10!!! I love the way how interesting this AU can get. lol. I've truly enjoyed this story. The way how Seto starts to see Jounouchi in a different light. Believe me, I love this Jou character ^_^. So surprising and so quick-minded. I've become a bit fed up from the many dumb Jou... (;_; he's my fav. character so it's not very nice to write him so weak) I'm amused how you're going to get them together if Seto still has to keep up his project/stalking/observing. An off-side comment is the relationship between Seto and Mokuba [I love the cooking disaster chap]lol.lol.lol. They're so hilarious whereas Jou's relationship with Shizuka is pretty sweet. ^-^ Overall I'm quite satisfied after reading your story. I hope to see more of this and don't worry... you're going to be on my favorite list too ^___________^ SO PLEASE KEEP IT UP!!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!
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Title: AUTHOR NOTE
Reviewed By: Madyamisam [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2004 15:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ok I'm back on this story... please wait
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Reviewed By: Dyth On: July 12, 2004 11:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it, but just try to tone down the OOCness a bit.
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Reviewed By: Madyamisam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2004 05:36 CDT
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AUTHOR NOTE: WHEEEE SO MANY REVIEWS!!!!! THANK YOU!!! I'm putting this story on hold for a bit so I have a chance to update my other stories... GOMEN but I will get back to Project very soon!!!
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Reviewed By: TenshiStar-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2004 02:09 CDT
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Oh, and I ment to ask a long time ago, sorry for posting twice in a row, but did the cheerleaders and Mai go crazy because they somehow received some of the anger that Joey pummeled into the poor chicken? Again I'm sorry for posting twice in a row, I know that gets on a lot of people's nerves... Please don't hate meeeeeeeeeeeeee! ;_;
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Reviewed By: TenshiStar-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2004 02:03 CDT
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Gwahaahaaaa! Poor lil Mokie... he'll have nightmares for weeks! I would go on for hours over the intense detail about the cooking and all the ingenious lil things you put in there, but I still can't get over Sir Edmund Hillary.... That was so smart and funny! I must... have.... pet... chick... Seto HAS to open a pet shop... ^-^
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Reviewed By: smalvina On: June 28, 2004 17:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was very funny ;) can't wait for more
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Title: YEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Ceribi Motou [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2004 09:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MWHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!! *cough* Anyway, I LOVE Clay Aiken and YAY!!!!! FLUFF!!!!! What did Joey say, "Yo Kaiba, I've got a huge crush on you!" or something? lol! BUT I LOVE FLUFF!!! AND I LOVE THIS STORY!!! And I love your quotes too!!!!!!!!!!! You MUST continue!!! (BTW, if you haven't checked my fanfiction.net account, under ceribi motou, then you wouldn't know that I've quoted your stories. For example: 'I'M ALL FOR MY HIKARI KICKING ASS LIKE REI USED TO, BUT NOT IF HE STARTS KICKING 'MY' ASS LIKE REI USED TO!!!'-Yami Bakura, from 'Children of Destiny') Anyway, please update soon!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Tamra of Egypt (not logged on) On: June 28, 2004 07:45 CDT
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KEEP IT UP! CUZ I am still loving it! UPDATE soon!
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Title: Um?
Reviewed By: Tamra of Egypt [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 21:02 CDT
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I put you in my fanfic...well ur info on the Elvish name generator and i used the same idea you did...with changing my name...I hope you don't mind. I told the readers, that if they wanted the website, they would have to read ur story. I really hope you don't mind. Cuz if ya do, then i can change some of my fic to something else. thanx ~Tamra........but other than that: UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPADATE UPADTE UPDATE UPDATE! (i think you get the point!)
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Reviewed By: Rowan Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2004 20:40 CDT
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OMg, that is TOO funny! XD TOO funny! you HAVE tp update soon!
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