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Reviewed By: Vejitalover [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2004 01:15 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh My God!!! You have to finish this. Poor Bulma... loosing her mother, her father, and then the love of her life all in one year! My heart is breaking for her. Do you plan to have a happy ending? Please update ASAP.
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Reviewed By: Fibounette On: July 16, 2004 15:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incroyablement bien écrit... I love that story, Lisa. I know I won't find the right words to tell you why I do. So instead, I'll just tell you that I found it *amazing*, for lack of better words, and that I really cannot wait to see how it all pans out... Great job.
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Reviewed By: amy04 On: June 14, 2004 11:16 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was INTENSE, not what i thought would happen. it's so clear he still loves Bulma but i don't know how she can forgive him! you write so well, i am defintly adding this to faves. updaet soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 - Carla On: June 13, 2004 17:24 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, this certainly is interesting. Bulma had sort of a muted response... I would have expected her to throw a pure fit... but I guess the fact that she didn't is a testament to how deeply she has been hurt. It will be interesting to see how Bulma and Vegeta handle their emotions and each other.
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2004 18:17 PDT
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This is a very nice take on the flaws of Vegeta and Bulma's relationship. I personally am a V/B fan but I have often explored the unfaithful thing. It is just more interesting. It has such attraction and allure. I applaud you for writing this and making it all seem so logical why it happened. Good job and I am looking foreward to the update. I found this awhile back and then coudn't find it again, but I am glad I did.
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2004 18:15 PDT
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This is a very nice take on the flaws of Vegeta and Bulma's relationship. I personally am a V/B fan but I have often explored the unfaithful thing. It is just more interesting. It has such attraction and allure. I applaud you for writing this and making it all seem so logical why it happened. Good job and I am looking foreward to the update. I found this awhile back and then coudn't find it again, but I am glad I did.
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Reviewed By: Chata On: June 11, 2004 21:16 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice story. Me like.
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Reviewed By: Denmark de la Croix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2004 19:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's settled. i don't like bulma. does she just drive men to infidelity? i don't really like vegeta either. i'm actually surprised their marriage lasted this long. your take on this is convincing. your dialogue is good. with this story i actually think you need to slow down the pace a little. sometimes i feel like not enough reason is shown for the character's reactions. it IS told, but i don't see it. and a lot of that i think could be solved in taking one more moment before the characters react. so the reader has a moment to SEE the reason. but really good overall. you seem to be very forgiving of men who cheat?????
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Reviewed By: jalan On: June 11, 2004 19:45 PDT
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really good chapter. even though i don't like vegeta, i'm not happy that he and bulma are fighting. i hope they'll be back together soon. nicely written.
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Reviewed By: jalan On: June 11, 2004 19:33 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi. i liked the story. it really gets good at the end - the element of suspense.
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2004 19:19 PDT
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I can't believe it. I think I've found 'someone' to hate even more than ChiChi! You've created a fantastic villainess - pretty, cunning, ambitious, and what a bitch! It was a perfect setup, and although I abhor affairs, Bulma should have seen something like this coming. Hopefully she'll come to a similar conclusion during her solitude. Chapter Two was so sad. It's obvious that Vegeta had adapted to his life on Earth and the recent changes have thrown him for a loop. Enter the Bitch to turn him completely upside-down. Bulma's reaction just tore me up. You know she wanted to scream and throw things and probably gouge the woman's eyes out, but she came up with the perfect response that couldn't be discounted. The bedroom scene made me cry harder. It was extremely emotional; Vegeta sounded like every other man that's been caught with his pants down. I just have to feel badly for him though. If only because 'he ain't from these parts.' :) I don't think 'happy' will be in any of the next few chapters, but I'm sure looking forward to a little sunshine for those two.
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Title: horrible wonderful thrill...
Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2004 07:07 PDT
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You know I adore this chapter, Lisa. I've read infidelity lemons before and dark lemons before but this one is so compelling--sexy but not emotionally gratifying in the way most ff lemons are. The concern for the characters, story, Vegeta's freaking folly and dread for his marriage is a strange sort of undertone for a reader while reading such a hot little lemon! And the confrontation scene in Bulma's bedroom has made me cry three times now--each time I've read it! That "you could've killed me" line just kills ME! Your writing is so in control of the story. I've rarely been so wildly curious in a continuation fic to find out how the plot resolves itself, and what's more, I'm just dying for more of your little details of dbz life in this era (Marron? What's she like? What role will the baby play? Hey, where's that ole cheat but good buddy Yamcha?) Oh great freaking Kami, I love this fic!! YOUR FAN, debbiechan
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Reviewed By: amy04 On: May 30, 2004 14:22 PDT
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This is really well done! I dont want to believe any of it but I do. I guess Veg would do something like this is he was really angry and Bulma was being psycho. I hope she realizes what she's done!!!
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Title: NO!
Reviewed By: super girl On: May 28, 2004 18:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! oh my god! is he going to cheat on her??!!!! NOOOOOO!!!!!! shure bulma's being stupid but... VEGETA CHEATING!!!???? thats just wrong! i mean his prioritys are all based on trust and loyalty! p.s. oh and by the way...GIVE THAT SEDUCING BITCH WHAT SHE'S GOT COMING!!!!
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Reviewed By: christabeleve61 On: May 18, 2004 15:12 PDT
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WOW, I loved how you got into Vegeta's head, great flow and well written.
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