| "A love like no other" Reviews/Comments [ 46 ] |
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Reviewed By: Catie On: July 05, 2009 23:10 CDT
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I couldn't get through the first chapter. I really liked your idea, however your typos/spelling mistakes were very distracting. Also, you can tell you're new to writing which is obviously understandable. The dialoge sounds like it's written by a 13 year old, which it more than likely is.
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Title: lalalalalalalalalalalalalalala
Reviewed By: Shar-Star On: August 30, 2006 15:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just loved it lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalal alalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalaalalalalalal alalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala Ok, im done :)
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Reviewed By: Saray On: June 30, 2006 12:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was good a little grusome but oh well good job! Finish it please! It needs the final battle with sesh and inu, somethig dramatic!
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Title: WAFF
Reviewed By: the critic On: May 31, 2006 21:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
this storyline has been over played. it strained me just to get past the first chapter because i was hoping to find something new to this sort of storyline, but alas there was nothing. you need to take an english lesson or something b/c your spelling mistakes must be against the law! i realise this is your first fic, but that's really not an excuse for poor spelling, structure or lack of originality. as far as it goes, you've also done the number 1 n00b atroscity; you've changed from past to present tense within one sentence numerously- this shouldn't even happen once during a story! (unless in flashbacks) as before, this story can obviously be seen as nothing more than WAFF, which is a story drowned of a plot too fast paced while giving no depth. i'm not here to flame you, i'm just pointing out what you need to work on. this is a short, entertaining fic to read for those who have twenty minutes or so, but nothing more. i hope you don't take this as negative light, but at least find a beta. cheers.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2006 09:44 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT STORY!!! 1 OF THE BEST!!!!
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Reviewed By: Nessie15 On: September 16, 2005 23:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are a very good writer and I hope you update soon. Sess, is such a bastard I hope he gets whats coming to him when Inuyasha gets there. This is one of the best fan-fictions I've read so far. Please add more chapters soon. I'm really looking forward to any other further fictions you write. P.S please up date soon
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Reviewed By: Dragoncountess98 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2005 00:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
i hate you! just kidding! no seriously i stayed up all night reading this story to get to that ending at the point of climax!? Please update!
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Title: A Love Like No Other
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2005 15:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: A Love Like No Other
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 21:50 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters? Can the pairing be Sess and Kagome please.
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Title: YAWN
Reviewed By: EL Clownius On: February 11, 2005 21:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your spelling horrible,your style very dull and dry,I seen this storyline a millions times, I didn't enjoy it and thus that how the rating goes. For you next story please use some sort of spell check and then have someone read over it. Like a beta. Also come up with something we readers have yet to seem. Please I beg of you don't do a high school fic, or Inu getting trapped in the modren world, or A Inuyasha was mean to Kagome so she run off to Sesshy or Koga. Those are sooooo lame and over. Most people are sick of them and are looking for something new. Also it would help us all if you at least did some form of outline for your stories therefore the pace won't be so fast. Again the spelling it takes away a lot of the story as a whole. You must watch it and as a rule you might not want to have author notes that take up half the computer screen. This isn't really a flame look at it as ways to improve yourself as a writer. Good luck and try again.
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Reviewed By: Kikyouhater101 On: January 19, 2005 15:06 CST
Comment/Review:
PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
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Title: sniff...sniff
Reviewed By: hentaiwritergal2006 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2004 14:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked your fanfic. It was very good. You need a little work on spelling and gramer but thats ok. Who doesn't. Well keep writting.
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Reviewed By: Zelix (Not logged on) On: December 13, 2004 08:36 CST
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I'm sorry to hear about your boyfriend, it must be depressing and quite awful to have to break up with someone... i haven't had a girlfriend since i'm a boy so i can't imagine what it must have felt like but i can imagine... I hope you're life will pick up again soon, there's nothing more worse than being alone, i know that out of personal experience, not because i've broken up with someone but a few years back i was so depressed that i really thought no one would care if i died, it was hell but thank god my parents and friends managed to pull me out of that hell... i hope you'll get out of yours, i really do. That chapter was rather depressing though, though you had a good reason to make it into one, i hope you'll update soon but if you need time to mourn i can understand, take your time and good luck.
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Reviewed By: LadEE_WaRRioR On: December 12, 2004 22:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oops didnt mean to click on it twice ^_^'
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Reviewed By: LadEE_WaRRioR On: December 12, 2004 22:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Same rating, anyway what a nice time to make a new chapter, I just finished your chapter just today in the afternoon and then the email thing told me that you wrote another one. So I read it and guess what? It's another freaking cliffy. *Evil glare* Anyway don't push yourself to hard after a breakup. It's always good to keep ya chin up and look ahead ok? So I'll see you later
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