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| "Loneliness of the Free wind" Reviews/Comments [ 28 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Reviewed By: frenchdiamond_1 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 12:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I totally loved your fanfic!!!! And I must say you deserve the title of king of lemons. Wow that was soooo hoooott!!!! ^//^ I loved the characters and it was different seeing Kagura end up with someone besides Sesshoumaru (although I really like that pairing). So congratulations on your awesome fanfic. Oh yeah, how did you come up with the name Arcerdo and how do you pronounce it? Again, thanks. It made my day.^^
| Reviewed By: Fishchicken [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2006 11:00 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good. Very different from what I'd expect after reading your Dark Soul of the Future, White Heart of the past. Good drama full of emotion and interesting thoughts. Also there are good humorous moments, the pager parts were hilarious. Quality stuff all the way from the first chapter to the erotic finale. It's great how you gave Kagura more depth, changing her from the villain to a deeper living and thinking person with her own life, feelings, thoughts and hobbies, you did really great with her. Also Arcerdo seems quite interesting character, I like his personality. And I think it would have been interesting to see what happened to everyone, the other characters and how they've been living their lives, but I understand why you kinda left them out, since this is a story about Kagura and how she finds a new life after Naraku, So it would go too off suddenly concentrating on other characters and things that aren't that important for the story nor have much to do with it. Maybe they have bigger roles in Time Soul Exodus, which you told is a direct sequel to this, maybe not, I just have to read and learn more. I really like your style of writing and telling things, you put much details in the text which really helps create the image, but nothing completely irrelevant (final chapter, especially the hot second half was simply sweet, you're very good with lemons). And with the characters, it's good how you make the men very manly and the women very womanly, it adds more certain kind of beauty to the story. This is fantasy after all, not all have to be like the average in real life. Very good reading, now I must read the sequel when I have time and see what happens to Kagura and Arcerdo.
| Title: Ms_Senstive
Reviewed By: Pauline On: May 23, 2006 20:47 EDT
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I liked this sory a lot, i was a little sad that you did not mention Sesshomaru, he is like so asome. so like did he die in the final battal? Anyways i would make a sugestion thought, you sould tataly put it underUV insted of OS, i think you would get a lot more people reading it. another sugestion i would make is to take out the () it realy distrats the story. if you have somthing to say you can always say it at the end.
| Reviewed By: VelvetNight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 00:19 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Heya!! Don't ask why, but I had this burning urge to read this story again...ahahaha... And I had to leave you a gi-normous review!! Teehee ^_^. Maybe it was because my co-worker (the one with the accent fetish...ahahahhaha) asked how I met you again. Funny how things move in a circle. This is the fic where I saw your true style shine through (the Sinner's doesn't count ^_^). God, if I thought this was good the first time, it's even better the second time. Kind of like spaghetti...tastes better the second day, or the third...ahaha! One tiny bit of critism...and it's something even the greatest of authors struggle with...the ability to balance detail with the flow of the story. I noticed that in certain parts, the depth you would explain things in sometimes hindered the flow of what I was reading. Not to say that it was difficult to read, but some parts just didn't flow as much. And in chapter 2...there is a paragraph where we get inside Arcerdo's head...when that football was thrown and knocked off Kagura's sunglasses... yeah...um...that paragraph is kind of...for lack of a better word...off. Your point of view switches from first (Arcerdo's) to third (you, as the author). It's just a tid bit confusing. However...there was one line that I'm absolutely in LOVE with...it's in chapter eight when Kagura see's Arcerdo's...youkai appearance: "In this appearance, Arc looked like… well, literally… a god, whose wrath would be un-imaginable, whose passion and strength un-rivalled and… his tenderness and love un-questionable… " God...something about that line, just gives me the chills *shiver*, I must say that this is definitely one of my favourites!! I absolutely love how you take the time to develop each and every one of your characters. No one is flat and stagnant. They're all round, full, and so very dynamic. Even InuYasha and Kagome, who play very minor roles, are very well- developed. Sheesh..how do you do it? It''s still kind of weird to read how Kagura is...I guess it makes sense given her past, but it's still kind of weird to see her so dependent on Arcerdo (who I abosolutely adore, by the way....*sigh*). I have to say, hands down that chapter 8 was the best chapter, and not just because it had the long...and I do mean LOOOOONG-awaited lemon, but it just seemed to have the most...substance and emotion. I literally felt everything in the entire spectrum of feelings, from sadness, to humor, to anger and just a tinge of remorseful nostalgia. I seriously think my brain is confused...it doesn't know what to feel or think anymore...ahaha! So I'll just leave on that note...ahahaha!! Hope to talk to you soon! Catcha Later!! *Smooooooches* ~Velvet
| Reviewed By: vivi333666999 On: October 28, 2005 00:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude!!! first of all, THAT ROCKED!! Second of all, that was the longest One-shot that i've ever read. I loved it though, and I can't wait to read the sequel! p.s. the spam flter hates me
| Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2005 21:57 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!!! First of all, that's gotta be the longest one-shot I've ever written...short story my @$$! Anyways, I LOVED this story!! I can't wait to start reading the sequal! Your writing style reminds me of Charles Dickens. I love how during the story you intentionally leave loose ends only to tie up everything in the end...very nice tactic! I also love how each character show such depth and growth. There nothing I hate more than a stagnant major character. You take the characters and make them your own with many parts to their complex personalities. The thing I enjoyed the most about your fic and your writing style,is how you have the perfect blend of comedy, angst, fluff, drama, and citrus in your stories. It has a wonderful sense of....balance is the only word that I could think of. I really enjoyed reading your own imputs and the comic relief (the pager messages), it's really refreshing in the midst of all the angst and drama, but you always insert it at an appropriate time! Mad props to you and keep up the superb work. I know it will take you far...you should definitely look at doing writing as a career, you would definitely succeed!!
| Reviewed By: Sessheyboo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 06:05 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good God Man!!! That was long! its 3 am for pity sake!!! But i loved it none the less. Wonderful story and your author comintary had me laughing And the story was sweer. Keep writting! And did i meantion this was a long one shot! Sheesh!! -_-' But i still loved it cant wait to read more wonderful storys!!
| Title: Hehehe
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2005 22:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol, I know I said that I'd leave a final big review at the end, but I had to put one in here! That chapter was awesome! You had a great mix of contrasting emotions that fit in very well with each other (IMHO). First off, you get the deep, cognitive part at the beginning, where Arc (cool name btw, where'd you caome up with it?) and Kagura basically have their minds on overload, thinking over their actions...in the past two hours...my how time flies! Then when Arc is leaving, the comedy starts showing up: You got the gossip-chain rearin' up its ugly head, and then his angry (or amused, haven't read the next chapter yet) parents to deal with, who turn out to be none other than Kagome and Inuyasha. I had a feeling it was them - any 17 year old guy who acts timid in the way you portray it probably would have a mother like Kagome, lol. Anyway, awesome stuff! Aside from one or two spelling/grammar errors I found (Hmm...need a beta?), this story is excellant. Keep it up! d('')b
| Title: Hey... (Ch1)
Reviewed By: forechunkukee (nsi) On: July 24, 2005 01:44 EDT
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Whats up? Just dropping a line to let you know I really was going to read your work. I won't be reviewing wach chapter individually, but will leave a final review. First chapter looks pretty awesome though, love it. Thanks again! Peace! d('')b
| Reviewed By: MTMind [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 18:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
your fan fic was most-excelent. I enjoyed it alot. it is like a small book story.some parts were worded funny...nothing to big but I can't spell well so...ummmm good job. for the stories rateing I expected a bit more "action" but you did extreamly well better than I could do so I bow to you. -takes hat off and puts it against his stomach just below his chest and extends his left leg behind him while slightly bending his right leg then gracefully bows to your greatness-
| Reviewed By: jester12350 On: March 01, 2005 13:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
beatutiful...just beatutiful what else is there to say?
| Reviewed By: Yoko Oro [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 14:24 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
On the down side, you tend to use run-on sentences alot. On the plus side, your story kicks ass. I just finnished reading part one. I'll give you a review per chappie.
| Reviewed By: sha kenren [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2005 19:22 EST
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this story was great!! i cant wait to read the sequil
| Reviewed By: GothycCoalChambr(logged out) On: February 12, 2005 05:08 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awww kagura got to be happy for once. i really like this fic and i plan on reading the sequel. i also plan on checking out any other fics you may have written. this was a very long one-shot but well worth it. i hope the sequel is as good as this one.
| Reviewed By: osuwari00 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 23:30 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is amazing, I just finished reading it im about to start Time Soul Exodus, i'm sure it will be just as great as this one. I've added you to my author favorites!!! Check out my fic if you want-its called Lost in the Rain and is under Continuation. It's dont done yet though. I hope you like it!!!
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