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| "Evermore" Reviews/Comments [ 28 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 > » ] | Reviewed By: The 13th Knight (Not logged in) On: March 24, 2005 19:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOME! I've been reading this over the past couple of days, and I love it. I can't really say much more than that... You have an impeccable writing style, and your spelling and grammar is good as well. I'm sorry to say I couldn't read your epilogue, since I'm underage for that, but I loved the ending to your fic. Then again, I love any happy ending. ^_^ Great job.
| Reviewed By: pertinax_prime On: March 15, 2005 00:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now that's quite a story. Bravo! You're quite the writer, and I would definitely enjoy a sequel to this story. The Good: That's some fine characterization work. It gets heart-wrenching at times, and you did a great job evoking emotional responses from the reader. I can't emphasize this enough. This alone makes the fic a rare gem. The Questionable: As many before me have said, on occasion the description gets a bit more than necessary. Don't take it the wrong way - the descriptions are doing a fine job of allowing a good mental visualization. On the other hand, sometimes it takes away from the momentum of the story, and other times it tilts the balance on the "showing and telling" scale toward the less desireable "telling." You do so well with the characterizations and plot-weaving - let us get more of that and allow us to infer the rest. So where's the sequel? Come on! You promised us a sequel! I want to read "The Final Dance of the Fallen Dove." Please?
| Title: e-mail: tealterror@sbcglobal.net
Reviewed By: TealTerror On: February 22, 2005 00:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a very good fanfiction. However, I do have several complaints. Please take them as constructive criticism. 1. Your style. First of all, especially in the beginning of your story, there were too many complicated sentences. Long and complicated sentences are fine for graduate theses, but for fanfiction, keep things simple. Second, you used synonyms for the character's names too much. I don't know how many times you used "dark magus" or "alien girl," but even once is too many. Unless you want to emphasize the fact that Raven is a dark magus, just use "Raven." It's much less distracting. Finally, you use too many "$10,000 words." If I have no idea what a word means, there's a problem. 2. Your spelling and grammar, especially your grammar, had a few glaring errors. I consider this a big deal, as bad spelling and/or bad grammar really detracts from a story. It's very distracting. 3. Too many unnecessary sentences, which is what brought Enjoyment Factor down to an 8. When a person can delete whole paragraphs without seriously affecting a fanfiction, something's wrong. Long extraneous tangents are fine for novels, but they're really boring and annoying for fanfiction. I have some other concerns, but they're over the 1500 character limit. If you want, you can e-mail me, and I'll tell you. Sorry for being so critical, but it's that 1500 character limit that makes this review this way. It's a really original and creative story, and I like it very much. Good job!
| Title: ur a GREAT writer!
Reviewed By: OMG!! On: February 21, 2005 15:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is great!and hope u pound out a sequel too.i agree wit other reviewers that your sentences are sometimes too awkward.but oaafiverall its a 10/10!
| Reviewed By: gohanstrife [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2005 13:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aside from a few miniscule grammatical errors that could easily be fixed by Microsoft Word with no problem at all, this story by far was the most well written, and original Teen Titans fanfiction I have read thus far. Creativity and much originality all formed this story, and it is great to see another author's point of view through the characters they play out, and the tale they tell. I do, however, agree with one of the reviewers, and their speaking of "Too Much" when it comes to description and writting, but not to its fullest content. Keep up your writting skilles, and polish your gramatical errors with reading over your documents. Keep your much wanted and needed original ideas coming, and out with a sequel for your fans already. ^_^ Ja ne
| Title: ME WANNA SEQUEL! ME WANNA SEQUEL!!!
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 02:58 CST
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I'm just adding this to get it off my chest...I WANT THE SEQUEL!!! I must know what happens next!
| Reviewed By: hajimeaoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2005 23:13 CST
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I absolutly LOVE this! Beautifully detailed and with such heart wrenching love. It almost makes me want to cry. I really can't wait for the next part of the story.
| Reviewed By: kirarapuu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2004 09:43 CST
Comment/Review:
yaaaaaaaaaa love it please write more
| Title: *burst into tears*
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2004 02:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a beautiful story! You sir (or ma'am) have had me hooked from the first chapter. Raven/Starfire is my favorite TT couple and there aren't enough good fics about them. This, I must say, is the best one. You have a great mastery of the language and the ability to portray the characters in such an amazing way. I honestly haven't felt this way since I played Final Fantasy VII and (SPOILERS) saw Aeris die for the first time. I honestly believe that this story has touched me, and I hope that the epilogue comes out very soon. I also hope that there is either a sequal or another fic like this in the works (email me, we'll talk (Wink Wink)) Agian, you rock!
| Title: A Joyous Comrade In Arms
Reviewed By: Okami_Kitakazeno [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2004 15:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off I'd like to say that this is one of the best fics I have read in a long time. The plot is solid. The characters are all, for lack of a better term, in character. Even the refferences to TT episodes were accurate to the letter. The only fault I found was the odd typo. I had to give you the 10 anyway since my typos are far more numerous. That, and you don't even notice most of them unless you are trying to. I eargerly await the epilogue, and if I recall correctly, I believe there was something about a follow up? Bah, I'll check after I submit this. I hope so, but trying to force greatness only stunts its growth. On another note, I would like to say that I too am writting a RavenXStarfire fic and hope to at least come close to having it mentioned in the same conversation with "Evermore." I have had a block on it for a while, and reading this has helped me get over it. Don't worry though, I despise plagurism. (However it's spelled...)
| Title: Demand for Lemonade
Reviewed By: YuriYaoiHet_ILoveEmAll [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2004 13:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! It's almost perfect! When I say almost I just mean that only one thing could make it better. A STAREFIRE/RAVEN LEMON!!!! Please post the epilogue soon. You said that the lemon would happen in the epilogue and I can't wait!!!! I'm sorry I'm so hentai!!!! LOVE, FROM YURIYAOIHET!!!!!!!
| Title: Ai, ai
Reviewed By: OzZ Cometh [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2004 16:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've only just now run across this fic, but from what was unveiled by the first chapter, it's written by a superlative author. One little problem, though, that I am also guily of quite frequently--over-detailing. In the field of writing, there 'is' such a thing as 'too good'. Case in point, pulled from the first chapter, "Before he could bring them back down in a blow to the ground that would probably have caused Beast Boy great pain," ...Now, I'm not by any means trying to say that everything has to be reduced to it's most basic qualities, but some things, such as the second half of that sentence, tend to turn a reader off. Just keep in mind, that in some situations, it helps to keep things simple. Outside of this, which you may or may not agree with, Evermore is looking to be fic reaching an unparralell degree.
| Title: great story
Reviewed By: mouserr [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2004 04:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i enjoyed the story immensely, will you be continuing the saga in a new story? i certainly hope so as this leaves off *without the forthcoming epilogue* in a great place to start a whole new series exploring the new relationships between the titans. i'd truly love to see this world expanded upon in the future. >^-^
| Reviewed By: rebekah On: December 01, 2004 18:41 CST
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needs a lemon
| Reviewed By: BleakRaven [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2004 17:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The style of writing was superb! There were a few typo's (Though i'm one to talk) but except that, i was amazed at the story and can not wait for the next part. Some people when writing things, don't take in the bigger issues around them, but you did, the idea of homosexuality. Only recently have i become interested in the Raven and Starfire pairing, whether its friendship or love, and this story reminded me why. They are my 2 fav characters which also helps when i read. Your work was breath taking, imaginative though realistic in a teen titans universe, and you exploration of the themes was amazing,Wasn't so keen on the battle scenes, to many, but loved the descriptions you gave the characters. Keep Up The Fantastic Work!!
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