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| "Dark Soul of the Future, White Heart of the Past (On hold)" Reviews/Comments [ 48 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] | Title: (ran out of characters down below so...) KEEP WRITING!!! I look forward to hearing more about this fic. I have to say, it's my favorite out of them all so far. Good luck!!!!
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2004 09:21 CDT
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oOoOo!!! Finally! News on Kasaraki and what exactly went on during that battle! I'm so happy now! lol I really like how you're piecing this together. His 'terror presence' is awesome! It's something every great villain should have! I like that Kasaraki's techniques aren't solely based on physical strengths or abilities...it's a blend with spiritual ones as well. It makes them more of a complex fighter don't you think? And hell of a hard one to destroy! And that makes me notice too, I don't hate this villain. Are we meant to be having sympathy for him? I would think so with how you've shown us more of his past and personal behavior, (and who would've thought Kasaraki to be a womanizer. LOL). I think I already know who his 'old friends' are. hehe. But there must've been a good reason he had to be betrayed, right? And what exactly did he do in his past that got him locked up in time? lol, bumbardment of questions, I know. Oh! But I like the idea that the reason for being un-fazed by the 'terror presence' - that was pretty clever. And also sweet because we all know how much Inuyasha loves Kagome. ^_^ And who would've thought it'd be KOUGA to shed light on that subject. hehe And I was thinking, maybe Kagome should help Inuyasha be in more control of how he manages energy during fights. That way, he may not feel so drained after the battle with Kasaraki. It's worth a shot, right? lol Oh and one more thing...would there happen to be a certain female presence trapped in Mormegail?
| Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2004 00:43 CDT
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geat great great
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2004 15:27 CDT
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Aaaaaaw I wish we could've seen more between Inuyasha and Kagome. Feelings, dialogue, anything. I'm assuming that will be in the next chapter. Like, what are they left feeling after that disturbing battle? I'm sure we all have our assumptions but I can't wait to see what they're up to in Kagome's time. I thought that was a good idea by the way, sending them away from the turmoil for a bit. And what will Sango and Miroku be up to? I hate to say but, now doesn't seem the time for sexcapades quite yet. Everything is so serious. BUT, I won't complain if there are any. *wink* And I'm still dreading the character death. But anyways, this chapter seemed to revolve around Shippo quiet a bit, and Kouga's dilemna. For a time I was wonderng "why" but I see the point in showing the more mature sides of Shippo and the wisdom he no doubt adopted from hanging around grown-ups all the time. The other thing is that now that things are sorted out with Kouga, maybe he'll not only leave Kagome and Inuyasha alone but maybe LEAVE all together. lol. I swear that guy is dense, and you show it most truthfully. Anyways, you're still as talented as ever. lol. I hope you continue to have ideas and write this story. Overall, it seems to be going smoothly. The plot feels consistant and not at all filled with gaps of stuff that has to do with nothing. Nope, everything ties together well. And I think that's all I have to say for now. Except, I can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck!
| Title: I'm still here!
Reviewed By: Lemon Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 17:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm still here and reading your fic! So far I think it's awsome. I've been having trouble getting on the internet and I get kicked off at random intervals, so I've only read up to chapter 4 so far. I think it's a great fic and you're doing a wonderful job with it. I must point out, though, that you tend to over use the '...' too much, and the comments while a character is talking are rather distracting. Please don't take offense to this, I'm just saying what I think. You've definately got me interested in what's going to happen next, and I'll sure as hell read what you've got, but I've got to get off now before my computer crashes again. *kicks the computer, muttering about 'stupid pieces of shit'* Interesting view on the youkai mating, I have to admit. Just one more thing, I think it's taiji-ya, not taiy-iya or however it was you put it. I also don't think "houshi" is capitalized, but I'm no expert, so don't quote me. I'll read more next time my fickle computer feels like letting me back on! ~~L. Goddess
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2004 11:48 CDT
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This wasn't crap! I swear!! I rather enjoyed it in fact. Especially the part where Kagome got her 'surge of power' and intervened on Kasaraki's assault, (and how Kikyo's soul fled to Kagome, making her complete and giving her power was a GREAT idea...something I would've never thought of). The very fact he haulted in his steps was a relief. And by the way, when you said something along the lines "if it were anyone else their bones would be broken from stopping so fast"...it DID make sense, I thought you should know, because anything that is going that fast and stops so suddenly would have some internal damage because the guts wanna keep flying. But not Kasaraki and all his strength! lol. ANYways...good job. That little 'promise' to Inuyasha seemed to be what really saved the day. I was surprised with the 'wishes' Kasaraki granted them. He's definitely a strange one...so mysterious. I look foward to seeing how he progresses through this story...more so, what we continue to learn about him. And why IS everyone so familiar with each other anyways? lol. Something to do with past lives or alternate universes or dimensions or..whatever. lol. Take your time...I love what you're doing with this story. I look forward to the updates and I hope the ideas keep coming to you. Take care.
| Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2004 15:47 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
| Reviewed By: Jasmine Fields [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2004 22:46 CDT
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Okay, now that I know how you thrive off longer reviews, I'll try to be a bit more deliberate in making my "reviews" more potent....:-) Maybe Inuyasha and Kags should jump down the well to give Inu a break? As for Kouga, just what are you plannning on doing with him? Everyone is all in one spot, so now SOMETHING has to happen to move the story along, right? Maybe use Shippo? I don't really know....Or better yet, have Sesshoumaru show???? That could be interesting, to say the least.....dun, dun, dun dun (::Beethoven 5th symphony plays in the background::)
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2004 16:22 CDT
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I think your talent truly shined with those last few chapters. That battle was just so impressive! The techniques you came up with, and cool names, and the logic and reasoning behind them, plus your own personal added theories (which by the way made complete sense and blew me away with how cool they were), anyways all that actually made me enjoy the battle. This is a big deal because those action scenes usually bore me to death. So thanks for doing a WONDERFUL job at keeping me awake! LOL I was very surprised and confused at first that Kasaraki had died since he was made out to be something so powerful and mystical yet gone in less than 10 minutes. But he's back. GOOD! Because we need some answers from him. lol. I like his character a lot. *sendsEmailOnThat* And plus, if he survived, why is Kagome moving? And when will Kagome and Inuyasha mate?? I must read more! lol. And in responce to your latest update, this HAS to have a happy ending. I can't do sad...I mean, you said it yourself, Inu&Kag have gone through so much! Character death you say? *cries* I hope it's no one too major. *sigh* Well, since you're going to mercilessly hold us in suspence, lol, I wish you happy writing. I can't wait for this next chapter! You do this all the time, you get me more and more hooked into your fics! You're just too damn good. hehe. Oh, and I can't forget to mention how giddy I get when Inu&Kag have those touching moments. You're so good at those! -from your Devoted Reader, with app | Title: wow have you ever wonder why these titles dont have any letter limmit?? ant that just so funny like you could have like too reviews one here and the other right below it on the right place to put it i think they will read one of these one day .......
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2004 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok since you seem to like my .....................LONG...................... review's i'll try my hardist just for you!! ^_^ ok? and if i run out of thing's to say i can just ramble on and on and on and on bout shit you and no one else might even care bout like my day and my felling's and how shitty my life has been since my dad passed away wile i was calling 911 and my sister and my mom were givin him CPR march/29/2004 in my house but see this is the type of shit i'll be going on bout and if you dont like it then just E-mail me an i'll try and write bout you fic since i seem to be trying to read most of you fic's!! ^_^ or i'll wast my time like my friend Tara .................AAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW.................. ...........LMAO naw i couldn't do that to you so just keep up the good work and i'll try and keep these too the point and long just for you!!!!!! ^_^ wow only 293 letter's left lmao well i'mma gonna try and go all the way to 0 just to make this extra extra long!!!! lmao but no if you wanna talk to me anytime you can also IM me on eather AIM or AOL ok so here it is: Berlfam @aol and SexySammers06 @AIM so just add me to your buddy list or somethin or..
| Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2004 01:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
why would they be fighting if the only reason why is because Kagome could not move or speak but now that she can whats the point in fighting????? well anyway it's your fic and it's a very very good one so no matter what happen's i'll be reading ever chappy your update!!! so update again soon please? ...........oh and yes =Kuroi Kaze no Jigoku= is a very very kool name!!! good one for thinking it up!!!!!! ^_^
| Title: Interesting...
Reviewed By: Lemon Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2004 20:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've only read the first chapter so far because I have to get off soon, but I thought the fight scene was awesome and I'm wondering what Kikyou's doing here.... Maybe I'll get in a rut where I'm behind and can always look forward to more. =) I just have to point out that you tend to do a lot of run-on sentences and confuse what tense you're using. (e.g. "Sango now saw..." present tense, past tense.) Easy to fix, though. You might want to get someone to beta-read this for you. (I'm sure the "Bakryuha" was spelled wrong, but I'm not sure... >.
| Title: 'WOW' that was just 'WOW'
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 16:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
'WOW' *sitting at computer mouth open attracting flys* a random voice:" close your mouth your attracting the flys!" me: "like i care did u read this fic???" voice: "um.... no?!?!?!" me: "then get your ass to a computer and read this amazing fic it willm blow u away litterly!" ~*~*~~*~*~*~~*~*~*~*~~*~*~ keep up the good work update again soon pleasE? i'll give u a cookie!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Jasmine Fields On: August 03, 2004 01:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
YES!! Kikyo, you rock in this fic!
| Title: wow that was just amazing!!!!!
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn (not loged in yet) On: July 28, 2004 02:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that was great Keep up the good work!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2004 01:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god...are there not other reviews? It is just...absolutely...unbelievable how original this story is. It's like I'm at a lose here. As cheesey as that is, it's true. I mean, I can seriously picture this storyline being slapped on the desk of whoever writes the Inuyasha shows over in Japan. I just want to say that I am blown away with your creativity. Not to mention you're a talented writer in general. Personally, I don't think any of the characters were OOC. I mean you make them believable because we all know Inuyasha has a soft side somewhere...and you gave him 4 years to mature so it really all makes sense. And DAMN! I was just SO impressed with your version of Naraku's defeat. *two thumbs up* And this new enemy is just brilliant. I happen to be highly addicted to the pure good force vs. the ultimate evil force type stuff. Oh, and your hinted lemons are very very hot. I loved that little chase through the woods. ^_^ I think what makes these sorts of lemons more hot than those of other stories is that whole scent thing. lol, but that's just freaky little me. I have one tiny complaint though and that's your use of the run on sentence thing. I just find myself getting distracted when the sentences go on to a great length. But hey, if that's simply your style I can understand. Just a suggestion. Damn...I run out of characters but it still lets me type. I dunno how this works but I wanna be safe and make sure you get this review. UPDATE SOON!!! -the Lone Vixen
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