| "Dark Soul of the Future, White Heart of the Past (On hold)" Reviews/Comments [ 48 ] |
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Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 15:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOoo this story looks good, lots of lemons, actually haven't read one chap yet, but thats cause I'm at school. I'm planning to soon tho, kk. Can't wait to read those lemons since you're the supposed "God of Lemons" Well laterz (can't wait till you update your stories!)
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Reviewed By: frenchdiamond_1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 13:57 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooooh... I hope you update soon. I really want to know who this Kasaraki fellow is. He seems to come from the future but also from the past unless I don't know how to read well. Anyways, I hope you don't forget Inu and Kags. Nice to know what Sango and Miroku are thinking (although that was a very long thinking session, as you said :P ). I really liked Sango's line about Inu and Kags consuming their love like there's no tomorrow. LOL!! :D
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Title: Review received by Email from: Larka the White Wolf
Reviewed By: Zelix [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2005 11:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well...That chapter of 'White Heart' was nice...though this Kasaraki person has a few issues...Lol. And I also like how you have Sango and Miroku thinking things out about each other...very good. Now...since I am finished here I will now go and collaspe onto my bed (and my kitty Shippou) and sleep...I need to sleep when camping, it'd be nice. Update soon...I'll be waiting...
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Title: hmmm?
Reviewed By: Kitsu Kurasei On: December 12, 2004 19:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm? And what may this "key" be? (Referring to the sentence mentioning how he knew of the current time) Does he only know up to present? Does he know of what human "advances" shall do to this world? Oh, and how can 'they' be so uncaring of life, our creators see us as nothing? I take the words of people seriously, consider practiacally every message given, except for ones already considered, I know the gods don't care very much for us, if they did, why would all the things in the world happen? I think the only gods that truly care are the evil ones, because while the good gods could care less about life, the bad ones devote all their free time to making us suffer, and they do it very well. Btw, nice story, truly deserves tens.-Kitsu
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Title: O.o
Reviewed By: Larka The White Wolf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2004 12:40 CST
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OOOO Me liked this update! It was kool! You've made your character VERY interesting...I like him! Hope we get to find out more about him soon! Well update soon! I'll be here waitin!
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Title: goodness...
Reviewed By: Numisma-SNI On: November 27, 2004 20:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
this fic needs a horrendous rewrite. there are numerous run-on sentences, spelling/grammar/punctation errors, and a "voice" that seems way too casual and parodic to be taken seriously. the style is something that makes it sound like a hyperactive 10yo sports game announcer is calling out the details, play by play. and, there are those damned author's notes in the middle of the text. please, if you're going to write Inuyasha fanfiction, clean up your writing style first.
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2004 01:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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wow....just plain wow. this story knocked my socks off. i could see everything happening. your words created such a wonderful picture of the events. amazing. keep it up!
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Reviewed By: essie2 On: October 26, 2004 20:08 CDT
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great great can't wait
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Reviewed By: essie2 On: October 26, 2004 20:08 CDT
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great great can't wait
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Reviewed By: essie2 On: October 26, 2004 20:08 CDT
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great great can't wait
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Title: purfect
Reviewed By: vizmanga On: October 25, 2004 19:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My god i still have goose bumps from reading this story! i understand everything you said/wrote! very creative attack for him( can't remember his("badguy") name off the top of my head) please tell me there is going to be another story. Your fan vizmanga
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Title: Yes!
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2004 09:13 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Woo! Bravo! This chapter was GREAT! First off, the lemon...*purrs*...was excellent. lol. You're so good at those! Really, you do them so well it amazes me. And it was a nice balance of emotions and thoughts, and pure sex. Oh! and I read your explainations on those 'Claims' you came up with and I thought they were a great idea. Nice job, really. It makes it all the more meaningful and intimate. Next to this wonderful lemon, I thought your timing for the conversation between Miroku, Sango, and Kaede was just right. And it brought some things about Kasaraki back to attention - things I had almost forgotten. I like that you have the characters now asking questions. It shows that this isn't just an Inuyasha and Kagome sexcapade; there's still focus on the issue at hand. Oh! and what you said about the creation of the bone eaters well...I thought that was a great idea. I don't think the series even mentioned its origin...or did they? Oh well, if they did, I don't remember. Anyways, this story is flowing VERY well and I think that's why it's my favorite. Everything fits together well which makes it even more enjoyable to read. Overall, I'm very happy with how you did this chapter! And of course, thanks for the lemon! lol Take Care and See ya soon!
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: jennifer_luvs_fluffy [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2004 12:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just read your first chapter and it was soo good....i completly didnt do my work in my computer class (high school) and i read lol...hopefully i didnt miss to much :S well it was most defintly worth it lol...ne ways i will review when i read the second chapter kks buh bye -------Jen xo
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Reviewed By: jin_the_wind_master_420 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2004 03:28 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is a very good fic. The battle sequence is one of the best I've ever read. I cant wait to see how it ends. As a final note, PLEASE Include the Lemon!
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Reviewed By: unimportant On: September 22, 2004 03:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please do not claim to have one of the best stories on this site, because the claim is unfounded. All I have read from the other reviews is that the readers want a lemon. That's all. I have read one of the best stories, not only on this site, but anywhere else for that matter! It's a novel-length epic entitled The Legend of Link: Lucky Number 13. A word of advice: never, ever, use obscene language during your narrative; it shows a lack of intelligence and vocabulary. The only time foul language is acceptable is during dialogue or thought. Remeber, don't make false claims. You have ten chapters and only eighteen reviews to show for it; excuse me, this makes nineteen. The story mentioned above has well over a hundred and would've had more if the fic was originally uploaded here.
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