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Reviewed By: rose of vegeta On: October 18, 2004 18:02 EDT
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It's a great fic. Your descriptions are great and well done. The only thing that I didn't like was in the opening you used the word "The" a lot at the beginning of your sentences (it's only in the beginning that I noticed like the first three sentences). It just go to me cause I don't like using the same word to open the sentence repeatedly if I can avoid it. That's my only complaint. This was a very original fic (that's hard to come by). Hope to see more fics in the future.
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Reviewed By: butterflyV On: October 17, 2004 02:10 EDT
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Keep it going!!!
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Reviewed By: Veglma On: October 16, 2004 23:51 EDT
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Err...Ember, I don't think you should gnaw on those inspiration bugs...They might taste really bad. I love to read the Vegeta/Bra moments.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2004 17:28 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your inspiration critters! I never expected a follow-up to this first part of this story (one of my very favorites, btw!) and the notification this a.m. was like an early Chanukah present! This is such an interesting story--I love all the Tuffle society stuff. And the great bit "Daddy doesn't do silly" and the relationship you're exploring here that has never been fully explored before. MARVELOUS work. Thanks for giving us this Vegeta--I've always wondered about his relationship with Bra and how it figured with reconciling him to his past. This is another love story, in a way. And I'm so looking fwd to more of it!
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Reviewed By: Ladymadchan On: August 01, 2004 13:57 EDT
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I really like how you kept Vegeta in character, so many Vegeta/Bra fics make him too sappy.
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Reviewed By: LisaB (not logged in) On: August 01, 2004 10:32 EDT
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What a sweet piece this was. It was so natural, the progression. I think that all three were totally in character and I especially like Vegeta coming around to why he wasn't training Bra and how he finally admitted that he should because *she* wanted it. What a great daddy!
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Title: Dancing
Reviewed By: LS On: July 31, 2004 16:54 EDT
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I really like the way you bring out the satisfaction found in teaching...and the way that helps Vegeta understand some of what Goku is experiencing. I like that he now understands him {on that point anyway} w/out excusing him from being neglectful. I like the way you fool us for a sec, when Bra starts to well up (I was thinking from joy at the gift)and it turns out it is because she is frustrated at dancing...very realistic, especially for children--(full of surprises) But I like the way Bulma was anticipating this, she seems very 'on top of things' as a mom...and it is cute to see her and Vegeta working as a team. As always, your descriptions make it very easy to feel right in the room with the characters. I like Vegeta's little 'inner-debate' about why he chose not to train Bra initially, what he realizes about himself, and what he realizes about her. I like the way they relate...it's very sweet ^_^. I like the interaction w/ Bulma too, the way she doesn't push an argument because she is just happy he is back. This fic really impresses that they have been growing as individuals and as a family. I like that both parents are concerned that Bra not give up on something she enjoys...not give in to frustration or peer-concerns etc. And they handle it so delicately but directly as well. Very sweet...a fun treat ^_^.
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Title: Brilliant!
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2004 16:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I truly do love this wonderful piece of fiction. It was simply brilliant and beautifully written. If only I could read more stories after the Buu Saga like this. You've definitely made my day. It's so sweet how he decides to help his little girl with her dancing. And it's also so interesting to see Vegeta's apprehension in why he didn't want to teach Bra how to fight. I would love to read a sequel, not only to see Bra improving and learning to fight but also to see more of this sweet relationship between Vegeta and his daughter.
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Reviewed By: butterflyV On: July 27, 2004 21:47 EDT
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You should do a seuqel to this of the actual performance and then Vegeta teaching his daughter how to fight like he promised.
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 21:40 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, you managed to keep them perfectly in character. The thing I have always loved most about your writing is how well you can make Vegeta, well Vegeta and still show his emotions. This is a wonderful portrayl of his relationship with Bra.
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Reviewed By: MommyRogers [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 19:18 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sweet, sensitive, and well written ^_^
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Reviewed By: Snazzy On: July 27, 2004 14:03 EDT
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This really is a fun fic. And about the whole IC thing, debbiechan is right: you're the one that knows Vegeta best, so don't worry about those sort of things =). So...great job ^_^
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Title: one more thing
Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 09:29 EDT
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dangety, I forgot to add one more gushing thing (as if mm.org would let me as long as my review was already going!) But it's truly marvelous how you managed to work in information and drama about characters not even in the scene (Kakkarot, Chi Chi, even Trunks). This is a masterful piece, and it's already an absolute favorite. debbiechan
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Title: an answer to a wish!
Reviewed By: debbiechan maybe logged in? [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 09:23 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh Ember, you really cheered me up this morning! What a marvel of a story. You know I'm a sucker for post-Buu and I've been wishing on many a star that writers of your caliber would do a Vegeta with Bra fic, and looky here, right out of the blue--this lovely piece! And only you could write it, given your knowledge of martial arts. The narrative is clear as water, and the insights are new. IC doesn't mean so much when you explore this new territory--there's not much IC to reference from other fics! But you know Vegeta better than anyone and look at this--! This must be what it feels like to have summoned the dragon and gotten your heart's desire! A lovely one-shot! I'm so glad!!!!!
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Title: Dancing
Reviewed By: Anita Dick On: July 27, 2004 09:21 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I swear, I've read so many fics thru the years but I've never read one that made me want to check my breathing till now ^_^. I like where you're going with this and I'm looking forward to reading more about Bra's progress. Good job! ^_~
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