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Title: really interesting take on a good anime
Reviewed By: merzbow [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2008 14:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i enjoy tenchi fics and this is among the better ones its interesting because of the choice tenchi makes(im not spoiling it) the acctual writing is awsome. (hoping to see more of this fic soon) i love the descriptions of the surroundings and how the charecters are used. The sex is good but not over used as in some fics. on another tenchi related note i hope tmffa come back soon(its still down now 28/june/08) its one of the best places to get tenchi fics on the net and tbh the reason i started reading fics in the first place.
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Reviewed By: RanjuM1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2008 01:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a solid fic, with good plot and character develepment as it moves on and it does so fluidly. You did get caught in the character stereotypes a bit (I know it is harder than hell not to in a tenchi fic) but it didn't hurt the story. Actually I think it helped because this was a Tenchi story. Also I would like to clarify that when I say character stereotype I mean the stereotype placed on characters in fanfiction (Or how many fanboys/girls think a character should behave) not just the genra in general. Still, great job!
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Title: Thou art mighty.
Reviewed By: Kanto The Slayer [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2006 00:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ONLY seven chapters? Blasphemy. Congratulations! This story has recieved the K.T.S. Seal of Ownage.
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Reviewed By: Okami_Kitakazeno [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2006 14:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautiful. Simply amazing. I applaud you sir, for being the first quality author to choose, as I had, that Tenchi should pick all of the girls. The story is wonderful, and the lemons ain't to shabby, neither. Keep up the good work, and we all promise to bear in mind the virtue of patience... For a while anyway.
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Reviewed By: lk3585 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 20:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've never been so eager for the next chapter of a fanfic to come out. Well written, original, and highly accurate on character personalities. If there is more to this I'll gladly read.
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Title: Concubine Cronicles
Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2005 14:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the second time I've read this. Very hot lemon scenes. hoped to see further exploits in this story but they haven't appeared yet so write more.
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Title: Woot
Reviewed By: Hagabagaboo On: June 07, 2005 16:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude, read part seven. You kick ass. I started reading thinking it was mindless porn stuff, but you've actually got a damn good story and characterization and all of that. KEEP GOING! I see a part eight... maybe that's just me. But that would kick ass.
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Reviewed By: comments On: June 05, 2005 20:21 CDT
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I enjoyed reading this story. I think Thechi SHOULD marry all of them. You did make a mistake about how Sasami will age though. She will age like a normal earthling until she's an adult. I think the reason many people think that Sasami will take a really long time to grow up is that Hitoshi Okuda got it wrong in the manga. I hope you will continue with this story. I'm not going to tell you how you should continue it though.
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: June 03, 2005 19:44 CDT
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The Princess position eh, nicely done research B... I'll remember that when I come up with no other idea or lack of positions to write in for my story. Other than that good chapter
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Title: O_O
Reviewed By: Sakura501367 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 14:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nicely done, now all I have to do is wait for more^_^ joy
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Reviewed By: johnk On: June 01, 2005 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great chapter, sweet and lemony, but I would have really liked to see just one sentence added at the end... 'And alone in her room, a girl named Sasami cried herself to sleep'.
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Reviewed By: Ramiel On: May 31, 2005 23:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy fuck, an update. I'm in awe. Concerning that, I have to agree with you on the sugar/waff content of the thing. A little on the heavy side for my tastes. Also, for some reason, I can't shake the feeling that you're neglecting Washu. Then again, that might be the 64 ounces of highly caffeinated coffee I drank just now. Excellent work overall. I'm looking forward to another update sometime within the next 4-6 months :|
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Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 18:13 CDT
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I swear, if you don't stop kicking yourself about your story being bad, I'm gonna throw an evil shoe of doom at you. update soon please.
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: A-Z Mk II On: May 30, 2005 06:36 CDT
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Good work, B. Is it just me, or does Washu have definate, detailed plans for Ayaka, even above and beyond her normal plotting self? ;) Looking forward to the next chapt.
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Title: Ch.7 Royal Treatment
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 04:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great chapter if I do say so myself. I really like this story becuz it is fun to read and it sounds exactly like the way the real way would happen. I noticed only a few minor spelling errors but they are nothing to worry about. I can't help but wonder where the story will go because Tenchi has slept with all of the older girls. I do hope that this story will at least have a couple more chapters because the future of the Tenchi-love hexagon hasn't been talked about. I can't wait for the next chapter to come out and thanks again for another wonderful chapter. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: HalcyonWolf On: May 24, 2005 03:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
While the 'Tenchi gets all the girls' isn't a new idea, your story holds this reader's attention with an iron grip. Enjoying that everyone feels in character and am curious about what plot direction you're going to take your fanfiction now that the sex has started.
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Reviewed By: Nobody's Special On: May 23, 2005 19:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Congradualtions, you have my admiration. While I realize quality takes time, I would like to ask that you step up the pace a bit. Originality appears to be the only weak point in this fic, but as is the idea is much better exicuted then ussual. The only major fualt in your work is your insistence that it sucks, stall putting that until a few reviews.
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: May 10, 2005 17:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the way you wrote this fic, and in my opinion its the only way to have a happy ending for everyone. Personally I agree, the only way to describe Mihoshi's skin is chocalate.
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Reviewed By: J.Crown On: May 01, 2005 20:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Great story, can't wait until you update, please, do soon.
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Reviewed By: Fallen Warrior [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 12:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazing fan fiction. You should be very proud of it. The storyline is breathtaking. The first like three chapters were just... so good I can't find the words to describe them. Excellent, just purely excellent. Hope there's another chapter.
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Reviewed By: YamiYaiba [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 03:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Despite the fact that the 'Tenchi and company orgy' routine have been done before, you very skillfully execute it. Though the plot seemed just a bit rushed, this is a exellent story. Can't wait for an update! And no, you do not suck!!!
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Reviewed By: Kuramas Gurl (not logged in) On: March 01, 2005 21:40 CST
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why do great fic writers insist that their fics suck? You seriously don't suck at any of this stuffs, so quit kicking yourself! Update it agaian soon. ~~Kuramas Gurl~~
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Title: Thank You
Reviewed By: MaginMan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2005 21:36 CST
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Ok, so Ch. 6 was a really long time in coming, but it was still worth the wait. Refer back to my last review, I still love this fic. If you make us wait this long for the other two (Mmm, Washu), I think I'll lose it. Seriously, it could very well be your fault if a small animal gets tortured. Can you live with that?
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Reviewed By: j0 On: February 15, 2005 21:13 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
givvv.. mor!
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Reviewed By: wantsmore On: February 14, 2005 18:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that you should go on this story until they actually get all married and that chapter will be really funny may be they can forget it and come in at the last second even though thats really old and alot of people use it.
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Reviewed By: Roger J. Phillips On: February 13, 2005 00:52 CST
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You do NOT suck! This is a very interesting story and I want you to write and post more. It would be interesting to see how the royals react when they find out that their eldest daughter has been with Tenchi. It should be fun to watch the wives hold down their husband as he tries to run Tenchi thur. Please keep up the good work!
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Title: UPDATE!!!!!
Reviewed By: J.Crown On: February 01, 2005 16:02 CST
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:J.Crown: NOOOOOOO! YOU MUST UPDATE I NEED LEMON NEEEEEEED IT I TELL YOU! PLEASE UPDATE OR I WILL BE FORCED TO RELEASE MY ARMY OF CHAOS UPON YOU!
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Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2004 18:36 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like it alot, keep updating pleeease!!! you've got something going very well. update soon please.
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Reviewed By: Jetflash6999 On: November 11, 2004 22:08 CST
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Oh please update soon. this is a truly wondeful (and sexy) way to work out all the tension in that house.
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Reviewed By: Roger J. Phillips On: November 10, 2004 02:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please write more as I am very curious as to how this will play out. I also want to see how Akea's father will react when he finds out that she has bonded with Tenchi. Please write and post more!
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