| "Corporate Deception: Fate of Her Land" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] |
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Reviewed By: renatanocis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2005 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This chapter isn't boring! Character development is fun to read. I really like how you write Sango.
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 17:34 CST
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I am an abysmal, abysmal person! I throw myself at your feet for not being able to give you feedback sooner. First of all, you've made me sooooo happy! The lemon...the much anticipated lemon...finally here! Scherezade does the "happy hentai" dance :) The lemon scene had a good balance between tenderness and dominant inu - and you know, I love me some dominant inu! :) On another note, you had a great line that just made me laugh! "Kagome noted that having a boyfriend with hair longer than her own could be an advantage." Not because it's funny...but b/c it's so true! Inuyasha and Sessh must have some damn fine haircare products...would make any girl who doesn't have a pixie hairdo feel like she's died and gone to hair product heaven! Also, I thought you did a nice job with Kikyou's reflection on the Onigumo/Naraku situation. She's been showing her softer side lately...makes it a little harder to just hate her. Oh well, we can still try, ne? You already know that I think your fic is great! Good balance between action and emotion...I could definitley get some pointers from you on how to write an action scene! Well...things are coming to a head...especially because nobody seems to realize where the Shikon is yet! Cue evil music! Another fine chapter from you!
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: January 18, 2005 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You updated!!!! Thank you. Love yr story & wow this chapter is a feast to me as its long. I love the way you make Inuyasha like the anime still a jerk but more sensitive. Oh I hope they can rescue Kanna soon. Hope Naraku gets his dessert soon that evil noodle head!!! Like the way you make Inuyasha more decisive & hey at least your story let him tells Kagome of his love. Please update soon. Its so way exciting.
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: December 08, 2004 17:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ITS THE GREATEST STORY I'VE EVER READ (besides "The Lucky Ones"). I love the soft touch of Inuyasha. Curse Naraku & Kikyo always in the way! Arghhhhhh... please update soonest. Can't wait for Naraku to get his evil ass kicked. Gosh! hope U will update plenty soon cos' even now the suspense its killing me. Great JOB!!!
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Reviewed By: FanelianPrincess On: November 30, 2004 18:14 CST
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Thanks for the update. I read 2 new chapters today. I'm so happy! I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Y
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Reviewed By: FanelianPrincess On: November 30, 2004 18:14 CST
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Thanks for the update. I read 2 new chapters today. I'm so happy! I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Y
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Reviewed By: baka onna On: November 24, 2004 15:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Arrgh! I want to cry for her! Inu is such a butt! Great for building a good story though, ne? Keeps us waiting for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: November 24, 2004 03:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, this the first time I'm reading yr story & great to say its truly amazing. I always like the pairing Inu/Kag. I hope Inu won't be an ass & he & Kagome can resolve their feelings quickly. Any fool can tell they love each other. Just take the chase , Inu & tell Kagome you wanna mate with her you baka you! Sigh ! I always get so immersed into the stories. So don't let Inu & Kag be unhappy hoping U will fix it by next chapter. But just to say I am rooting for U. Pls continue updating.
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Reviewed By: frostshake On: November 23, 2004 23:25 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god this is so good!! I can't believe Inuyasha said that, what an idiot. Oh well, I love your fic. Don't let the minimum number of reviews keep them from letting you update your story is awesome!!
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2004 20:51 CST
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You posted! You posted! I like some of the content changes you made compared to the version I read before... But I'm dying for the actual lemon!!! Me want more...me want more!! :)
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Reviewed By: Danziggy On: November 13, 2004 07:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your writing style is without question singular. Keep up the exceptional work.
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Reviewed By: RavenShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2004 00:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really great story. I really love is so far! This chapter was hot, that i can really say right now, except I hope you can update soon!!!!
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2004 14:28 CST
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Hey there...it's me, szmadad! I finally have a pen name now that I've posted my own story at this site. I was so excited to get an alert about your update. I just love your writing...and this is a fun story to read. It was terribly nice of you to give Kouga some sense - he's realized that he's where in the running for Kag's affections. Now Naraku's deviousness has me wondering - is he going to try to use Kikyo to break Inu and Kag up? is he going to try and make Kags think that Inu cheated on her (the way he did with Kikyo)? Now if it's the latter...we all know that Kag would doubt Inu completely...after all, that's the big difference b/w her and Kikyo; Kags trusts Inu with all her heart. Hmm...this will be interesting. Of course, you're at my favorite part - the Inu-Kag LEMON (well, you know I'd be interested in that since my own story is pretty much an all out lemon with no plot). Of course, I'm assuming that it's an Inu-Kag lemon coming up. After all, it would be terribly mean for you to give us some lemonade for them and then bust out the lemon for some other couple! Congrats on showing your dog. As for Inuyasha and his Inu heritage. An akita would make the most sense...I just looked up a picture of one to be sure, and I have to agree with you on your assessment of the ears. :) Update soon! I want the LEMON!!
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Reviewed By: Zonza [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2004 16:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!! This is a really good and well written piece of fiction, I love the plot you have going on and really love how you show the relations between all of the characters. Most people only focaus on the couples and nothing between any one else other than to say that they are friends or that they are enemies... I really like what you've got going on here ~Zonza
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Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 07:18 CDT
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I've fixed the error, sorry about that.
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