| "Corporate Deception: Fate of Her Land" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] |
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Reviewed By: erftrgwq On: September 27, 2004 16:42 CDT
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chapter 3 is the same as chapter 2 you story is very good but i was so lookin forward to the next chapter please fix asap
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Reviewed By: szmadad [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2004 19:18 CDT
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Yesss...an update! Your writing is wonderful - you've got very clever descriptions and the diaogue is fun. Oh hell, I guess Kagome is who I'm getting a kick out of..she's a sassy chick, eh? .and to top it off, Inuyasha just has to swallow what she says for now. But I'm glad you're letting his natural surliness come through..after all, that's what Kagome will fall for...not some smarmy charmer. Speaking of which, please tell me that Kagome is NOT attracted to Kouga beyond "oh cute youkai"....I mean, in my twisted mind...Inu-Kag's chemisty and mutual attraction can't be beat. I'd really hate for her to trying to choose between Inu and the wolf. It's so obvious to me - hottie hanyou all the way!! I have no clue why I'm the only one reviewing your story...but people will catch on soon, I'm sure.
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Reviewed By: szmadad [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2004 16:29 CDT
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Ok,,,I had to go back to reread the chapter to figure out how Kagome and Kikyo are related. Cousins, eh? Would Kagome know about the relationship b/w Inuyasha and Kikyo...being that it took place only 6 years ago? Have Kagome and Kikyo been in contact at all...I almost would've thought Naraku would've had Kikyo try to talk Kagome into listening to Naraku. Y'know the whole "get a family member to show how good the deal is" Do the youkai generally walk around freely amongst humans? Or do they all have a concealing spell of some sort? Looking forward to Inu and Kag meeting and sparks flying (I LOVE that couple)
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