| "Shes only a student" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Reviewed By: JuJu aka whoobonhooaglo On: April 16, 2005 13:41 CDT
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Woo! My bet is on Inuyasha!*crosses her fingers* Let it be that sexy, sexy man! I mean, who else could it be? Anyone else and, in my opinion, Kagome could be considered a whore who does not know how to hold her liquor. But, maybe I am just looking way too into this. Afterall, it is only a story that you seem to be pulling "out of your ass," and quite nicely if I might add. The best ones always come that way. Please carry on with the story! I know writers block can be a bitch, but if you think about it, there are still a lot of things you can do with this story, if you so choose to do so.Wow, I only have about 850 characters left.Amazing. Now, as for ideas on what you could do next, try putting in some more class time and some attraction going on between Inuyasha and Kagome. For example, Inuyasha could be explaining something and little movements that Kagome does could turn him on, or vise-versa. Also, it would work just THAT much better if Kagome woke up to find Inuyasha there. Or, if you do not want Kagome to have had a night of passion with the man she likes so much so soon, you can have the person be Sango! And no, I do not mean some lesbian action went on. I am simply saying that maybe she went home with her friend; the friend who didn't want her best friend going home with some stranger. So there, you have a couple of options there already. Need more? Ask me! I can help. haha That's my way of helping people & grammar. Now, I have to end this because my limit is done
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Title: omfg
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2005 16:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omfg omfg omfg please tell me she ended up in bed with InuYasha!!! please? he said he was going out clubbing!!! well i can't wate to find out what's gonna happen you very evil for leaving cliffys!!!! GRERRRR..... well keep up the good work and update again soon please?
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Title: Shes Only A Student
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2005 18:28 CST
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: DarkAngel1992 On: March 10, 2005 19:13 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Grate story plz up-date soon! And yes i love the twist! I hope it's Inu!
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Reviewed By: tiger girl On: February 11, 2005 21:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
It ain't all that bad but it's not good. I seen this storyline a bunch of times and trust me it's getting old. The pace is a bit too fast and you have a lot of spelling/grammar mistakes. I dunno overall I think it was rather dull and lacked substance.
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Reviewed By: marijang69 *not logged in* On: February 11, 2005 04:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAAAAA!! YOUR SPELLING HAS DEFINITELY IMPROVED, AND I LUV THE STORY EVEN MORE! (if that's possible) PLLZZZZZ UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
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Title: you have just been mugged my some random insane masked reviewer
Reviewed By: Insane masked reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2005 09:19 CST
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Awesome story really liked it add on!
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Reviewed By: buyo On: February 08, 2005 15:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
its not bad..
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Reviewed By: Radical_Edward [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 22:57 CST
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Your story is really good I love the twist in the last chapter, and please update as soon as possible the suspense is killing me
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Reviewed By: fujinakaheero (not signed in) On: February 07, 2005 21:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great plot to the story but I suggest you go over the chapters you have written so far and fix the spelling mistakes that are in it and just a little helper, what I always do when someone is cut off from a kiss or anything I put the word than a - after it like this: "And another thing I don't like the way-" and suddenly she was cut off by lips that attacked her" ne? It just makes it look better and you see that they were cut off That was just an example of what I usually do when someone is cut off, I see a lot of authors do that so I just thought I would give you that tip. But it's a good stor(very kinky with the whole student-teacher thing) So if you want it to get even better just look through your chapters and fix the spelling mistakes that are in there, you'll find them when you read it over a few times, that what I usually have to do with my stories also. Anyways I hope I didn't offend you. Ja Ne! Fujinakaheero
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Reviewed By: marijang69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 05:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOME! hope you have a better time fixing up your grammatical mistakes with your beta! don't let anyone change your storyline; i love it! hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: Hopes_fall [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2005 15:37 CST
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I would be interested in being you beta you can check out my work also to see my achievments. lol. I loved this story so far and I would be glad to help! I have spell check! Please e-mail me if I get the little Job! or IM me. dreammiko@yahoo.com. PLEASE and Thank you. AIM:GothgirlVA Yahoo: Dreammiko
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight nli On: January 19, 2005 10:55 CST
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i personally like ur story & im pretty sure a beta is like a personal spell check. They make sure words r spelled rite & fix grammar mistakes. ive never had 1, but no one has complained about my spelling or grammar so i guess im ok. if u like u cud send it 2 fatalfeline@comcast.net & i cud look it over, if there's nething wrong ill change it & send it back 2 u. im normally online since i have my own stories, u can check them out so u cud c my grammar & spelling. just a suggestion.
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Title: Simon-envy
Reviewed By: BakaInuGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2005 00:33 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yikes! I think one of your reviewers got into American Idol a little too much and went Simon on your butt. No worries about the grammar or your writing. You'll get better with practice it's inevitable (even if evil high school English teachers tell you otherwise for now). A beta reader is someone you would send your work to before it gets posted to the web. They can basically read over the work, check it for spelling and grammar mistakes, and send it back to you for posting. Look at it this way, the all-time best selling book across the world has been revised and rewritten for over two millenia (look it up, it's true!). And your story is NOT unoriginal, it just hasn't been told from your point of view yet. Don't be discouraged by flames either, they tend to happen whether you want them to or not, and without negative feedback you wouldn't strive to be better. Just look forward to those reviews from devoted fans and supporters who can't wait to read the next installment to your story! Best of luck on this fic and I look forward to reading more! Let me know if you ever have any questions about fanfiction or postings. ~BakaInuGirl P.S. For what it's worth, EVERYONE has had that one high school teacher who fails them at something. For me it was a history teacher. I went on to graduate college with a degree in history. With Honors. Just rub it in everyone's faces when you win a Society of Authors Award!
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Reviewed By: jtcl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 20:26 CST
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I like you should write more chapter for this story I think is good of a story
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