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| "Dead to the World" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: a-c On: August 20, 2006 10:24 CDT
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Well, I am a little confused to what exactly happens before or after what, but I can follow what's going on, overall; I love the last line. Especially as the place seems so nice and peaceful and wonderful at first. -- My favourite part was the one with Ryou and Bakura's meeting. Love the "He stares at me coldly, and turns then around. 'Follow me.' And I follow. I don't know why I trust him, but I'm sure he's not planning to harm me anyway. Maybe it's because he didn't smile." -- Aw. If Bakura is as evil as the rest of the world, at least he's honest about it.
| Reviewed By: aramis-chan On: August 10, 2006 14:10 CDT
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Waaa! Not fair! This is *horrible*! Uhm, I mean, not the story (I love the way they think about each other and their time together), but the ending of this chapter. Thank you for telling me this is up! I thought that the whole part on the roof in chapter three was lovely: Ryou is so very cute. And Bakura... He really does seem to need a whole life to manage to change, and it's not *fair* that he doesn't get the chance! I was wondering if it would be such a good thing for Ryou to give in and realise that they are *meant* to be together as soon as possible (because *I* sure know they are) since Bakura has such a weird way of seeing things... and, well, I still don't know. I just think that this is a horrible way for them to die. *Again*. (I *really* need to find some of those songs now...)
| Reviewed By: Nyami Rose On: August 09, 2006 20:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story alot. Then again, I absolutly LOVE Nightwish. I'm listening to Century Child right now. I hope you continue. It's hard to find (almost impossible) to find yu-gi-oh + nightwish fic anywhere. So keep this up! I'm proud of you for going through so many drafts to write these chapters! That's the makings of a true writer there! Please continue, even if no one else reviews. I'll still be cheering for you! -Nyami -Nyami
| Reviewed By: DeathsDarkFlame [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2006 07:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this story when you posted the first chapter. I'm glad to see how the second one turned out. I'd recommend figment of imagination instead of fragment of imagination unless you did that on purpose. The song for chapter two didn't work quite as well as the song for chapter one did. You stilled pulled it off quite nicely, but you might able to make them mesh more in chapter three. I also want to thank you for giving credit to Nightwish for the lyrics. Too many times people seem to forget to give credit, or at least include the name of the song. If nothing else I got to read a good story and find out about a great band. Keep up the good work, just try to keep things meshed. Overall no complaints, just update.
| Reviewed By: Drof Tceferp [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 20:15 CDT
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^^ Whoa..You haven't got any reviews? This is good...^^ Update soon, okay?
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