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| "Primal Urges" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: Primal Urges
Reviewed By: Maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 09:50 CDT
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Wow i just read this story in a day and i have to say is that i know i'm still not off this rollacoster yet. What a story you have here Jana and i'm glad i'm reading it. You have something here thats worth continuing to the fullest. I love how you have put these two together and how it's still growing. you make me feel like i was apart of this couple and how i want to grab gohan and slap the shit out of him, but i so understand how he feels about his dad. Please cont to write your stories and i'll try to get to the rest of them *HUGS* Maria...
| Title: *laughter*
Reviewed By: Dharmaserenity - the author On: May 11, 2005 19:47 CDT
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[quote]OOC. ridiculously, OOC. Scenes of physical/psychological manipulation, usually provacative and wrenching, are rendered passe by the author's blase style and disgusting lack of regard for the storyline and genre. would have been better as an original story.[quote] Dear Switchblade, I've just gotta ask, "rendered passe by the author's blase style," what do you even mean by that? How is my style blase? I'd love to hear how you come up with such a description of my work. And disgusting lack of disregard for STORYLINE and GENRE? Hmm, forgive me, but isn't this fanfiction and an Alternate Universe at that? I'm quite free to do as I please in writing this fanfic. I think I've warned you well along the way as to what this fic would be about. If it wasn't your thing, why keep on reading? Obviously, your harshest point against this fic is that the subject matter is OOC, well, then you obviously don't like the direction I've taken it, so I'm not going to worry too much about your opinion of the piece as a whole. Your obvious bias negates anything constructive you may have to say. Perhaps I could have written a fic where Gohan meets this tough girl named Videl, they bicker, then compete in a martial arts competition, all the while their budding romance blooms until they eventually marry and have a daughter. Oh, wait.. Akira Toriyama already wrote all that ;). Thanks. Jana
| Reviewed By: switchblade On: May 11, 2005 19:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOC. ridiculously, OOC. Scenes of physical/psychological manipulation, usually provacative and wrenching, are rendered passe by the author's blase style and disgusting lack of regard for the storyline and genre. would have been better as an original story.
| Reviewed By: NewKitty On: May 04, 2005 08:33 CDT
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Aww, poor Gohan. Just wanna give him a big hug. Well, he'd rather one from Trunks but that's alright by me. All I can say is more please!! :)
| Title: *cries*
Reviewed By: malimillions [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2005 22:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oi gott..... poor gohan-san! It makes me want to cry.... Shit is your writing good!
| Title: *gnaw!
Reviewed By: darkserapha On: April 20, 2005 09:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*gnaws on desk's edge Gohan is driving me up the walls! I can't help but wish that someone will bitch-slap some sense into him and soon! *growls But the fact that your story manages to draw me in enough to get so emotional about it plus the fact that I even keep reading despite usually despising stories with Gohan in them, should say enough about your quality as a writer. *smiles* I'll keep reading and gnashing my teeth and hoping that Gohan will see where righteous hurt went wrong and turned into egozentric selfishness! *Nods sagely and eyes gnaw-marks on desk* Awr, I hope my desk survives that long...
| Reviewed By: NewKitty aka New On: April 19, 2005 09:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Girl, you know I love Gohan. I've been patiently waiting on an update over at WW and when you sent me this link, I was so hurt that The Enchanter had another chappie here that I've been dying for. Then, OMG!, then I discovered this! Gohan... the bad boy...fantastically out of the closet and soooo proud of it. This is so brillant luv and I can't wait for chappie 12. And "It's Camero", if you ever read this, I so agree on thinking that Gohan was being very naughty and letting slime-o-Greg pay to watch secretly. It would have broken my heart though Dharma. I'm so glad that it didn't turn out that way. He's supposed to love Trunks, beyond time and space, you know, the only one he wouldn't pull something like that on. Good goddess, I love how you put the blame on Goku for pushing the lovely Gohan over the edge and to admit his true self. Something Goku and Vegeta should've done ages ago but then we wouldn't have Trunks and Gohan so it all works out in the end. :) I love these characters. I'm waiting on the edge of my seat for the next update. Forgive me, I know that there is some wonderful goodness that I'm forgetting to praise you for but I get so lost in all of the mental images swimming in my head, not to mention all the plot bunnies that Lil'Bunny and Fufu have conceived thanks to this lovely piece of work. Thankies, thankies, thankies.
| Reviewed By: Foxxy Jones On: April 15, 2005 16:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please write more i love it it is great
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: It's Camaro On: April 15, 2005 02:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. I will have you know that when he walked in on Chi Chi looking at his pictures, I quite literally said "Oh my GOD!" out loud! I covered my mouth and just read on. You've got this amazing shock appeal that just blows my mind Dharma. And to think, I was afraid this story would end up mushy gushy.. yet look how amazingly far you've taken it. Absolutely ASTOUNDING! I'm still reeling from all the shocks and how incredibly you've developed the storyline. Truly interesting and I found most of the details completely balanced, yet crucial to the plot where they were. Hard to describe, I know. Videl's and Gohan's interaction was so real and human, I could almost feel the shame he must have indured yet I also completely went along with his reasonings, even using his father's own faults as an excuse never to make the same mistakes. I also loved that Videl didn't go ape shit on him and start calling him names like "Faggot" and "queer" and what not like other stories do. And that she questioned her own adequacy in bed with him. Very sad, yet she admitted to understanding, despite the very real love she must have had for him. Truly heart wrenching and in depth. I positively LOVE this story now. You've won me over. Like I've said, I'm a groupie now and I cannot wait until you update this. You do realize I'm always checking right? Yours is the only story that can ever do that to me. And I have limited words now, so I gotta end this with AWESOME!
| Title: Awesome Fic!
Reviewed By: Quadrono Leader [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 15:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know, with the decrease in quality fanfiction, I have to say this is one that I wait on faithfully to see me through the rough spots when I'm fanfictionless. Gohan is a favorite of mine, as well as Trunks so it's wonderful for me to actually read something with them in it as a couple. The story line is original, man to think, Gohan as anything but the obedient son blows my mind and I could understand how it could have happened. If anything would make Gohan go totally left, it would be that. Wonderful story! I can't wait to see the next chapter! Kenya~
| Title: Depressing!!
Reviewed By: Mimiru16@aol.com On: March 12, 2005 22:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww! How depressing!!! That flash back really speaks to your heart if you listen to Fukai Mori while reading it! *is listening to it now* I was on the verge of tears! TEARS MAN! THE TEARS SPEAK TO MEH! Sorry. I thought it was well written and very good. Now we get to finally find out what happened to our little Gohan, ne? You have a very creative mind to have 9 very well written chapters up! I can hardly keep up 3 chapters let alone 9. ^_^;;; Once again, Very well written. I love Saiyaman Gohan, and I can't wait to read the rest of the lovely memory. :P So you mean to say that in the memory, Goku just got his life back and he doesn't like it there, so he is just gonna kill himself/have someone kill him so he can go to the Other World? That was very sad! I loved it though. Still... can't help but wonder about that kind of stuff. Poor Trunks! Having to endure all of that abuse! And now he has to listen to all of this lovely (yet depressing) stuff about Gohan's past!!! >>;;; Well, like I said before, this is a very well written chapter. The story line is also very good. It has to be the best Yaoi story I have read that is about Gohan and Trunks. I love to check my mail and see that there is a message that says: "The story Primal Urges Has been updated!" And stuff like that. :P I can't wait until you update! You seem to update faster than everyother fan fic author that has stories that I read, so I'm sure that you will update fast, right? You update like, every other day! J | Reviewed By: It's Camaro On: March 10, 2005 17:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an awesome story, absolutely entertaining to read. In fact, I'm dying for an update since I have this creeping suspicion that the reason Gohan is demanding sex so bad is that he's having that dirt bag Greg watch and pay.. am I totally crazy? Can't wait to find out. Camaro
| Reviewed By: Webtester001 On: March 05, 2005 21:04 CST
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Wow! This just gets better and better. Keep up the great work. Eeverything is described so well, I enjoy it alot.
| Reviewed By: KazeTsunami [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2005 19:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG your amazing! The chapters are gettign better. OH i cant wait till Chapter 7 is up! GREAT JOB! =)
| Title: I love-ith this story-ith
Reviewed By: MysterySaiyan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 08:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your story!!! I just love teh GohanxMirai Trunks-ness!!! XD Also, GokuxVegeta ain't bad once in a while... but any-ways... I thought your story was awesome. I love it when you make Trunks embarrassed, then Gohan smile at him, which makes him more embarrassed!!! :P Thanks!!!
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