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Reviewed By: KitsuneFox [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2007 18:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...this is the second fic of yours that I've read (the first being Second Chance...another BRILLIANT work...) Anyway, I really enjoyed it. I really liked this and I hope you continue on this path. You have some serious potential, and I make it a habit never to lie to fellow writers.
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Reviewed By: brainshake [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2007 16:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Honestly? This one was awesome! I'm amazed that you managed to tell such a long and complex story and only make it two chapters long. And the lemon was really good! I don't think you should let your cousin write them for you, you don't need that. You do very good on your own! The part with the kiss was so sweet... I think you could have made this story much longer than you made it. It would be nice to see what happens to Sesshoumaru and both their kingdoms... But I get the feeling you won't write that. Still, it would have been a nice story to read.
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Reviewed By: Yushi_Yami [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2007 02:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a great job on it! It's very pretty and heartrending... But, it lacks some passion... You have the tecnique and most of the grammar to make it fly, but I get the feeling that you're a bit timid about comitting to a really fiery lemon. I suppose that, if you think about it, your style really fits Sesshoumaru's personality... He's reserved and controlled, but still so deep and intense. My advice: don't label this a lemon. Those tend to be a lot more jarring. This is much more dimensional and involved. It'd be more accurate to call this something like 'mature romance'. It isn't the silly, disposable sort of lemons for people looking for instant gratification. Your work leaves a feeling that nothing is settled, unlike one-night-stands. Anybody who reads this is going to think "What happens next? Will they see each other again?" With lemons, it feels more like "Aaand.. Next morning, he's gone, and she doesn't care a fig if he ever comes back. I don't care either..." See the difference? So, if you want steamy passion, send out for it, or revise your style. If you want readers to care then this is more than good enough.
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Reviewed By: musheesuh On: March 21, 2007 14:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
great story. :] keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Sam_Sama_Death [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2007 10:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eh, it was okay, you made some gramatical mistakes and all that. I was interested in the story-line though I could never see it happening. You made Sesshoumaru a bit OOC, but from the other fanfiction I've read of yours this is to be expected. In any case you did alright, not the best I've ever read and not the best I've written myself but decent all the same, remember, practice makes perfect. -hint hint- so DO remember to practice won't you?
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Title: Chapter #Second ^_^
Reviewed By: leanne0716 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 14:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed that fic. I loved the lemon which wasn't as lemony as I expected it to be but it was great all the same. Again skillfully written and masterfully detailed. I loved the ending! And note to Inu: Hahaha *jumps up and down and points at a sad-looking Inu* you didn't get any!!! ~Leanne~
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Title: Huh?
Reviewed By: leanne0716 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 13:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kind of weak??? *shocked expression* That was brilliant! Skillfully written yet with an air of modesty and the characters are portrayed so well...ugh *faints* That was an excellent first chapter and I can't wait to read the next chapter...*goes and reads next chapter...* Your BIGGEST fan, ~Leanne~
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Reviewed By: DawnGoddess87 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2006 02:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is extremely HEARTABLE! I guess I'm a little late reviewing, but unfortunately I just now discovered your work. Wonderful lemon and a very good story. Hopefully you might just go back and turn this into a multi-chapter eh?
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Reviewed By: Blood_lust_Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 04:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Actually I liked this story a lot and if you ever decide to expand on it I fully support the idea.... please do. As far as the lemon went I found it quite good. Its most certainly better than most I have read. In any case I wouldn't worry about it, just write them when you want to and don't care what others think because its your writing and if you like the way it turned out then thats all that matters. (god i need to take my own advice sometimes heh) But I guess that should be all for now. Happy writing. Catherine
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Reviewed By: Icy girl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 08:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please.Do continue the story after finishing your Second Chance. Please????
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Title: One shot
Reviewed By: dianas_lotus [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2006 22:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHY HAVEN'T YOU FINISHED THIS STORY!!!! IT'S AWESOME...PUT SECOND CHANCE ON A BREAK FOR NOW AND FINISH THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I MEAN IT!!!! WWWOOOOOWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: OMG!!
Reviewed By: isina17 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2006 16:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is fantastic!! I Loved it! and the Lemon was fine!! Wow...i'd love it if you wrote more of this story! Besitos Z.Z.
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Reviewed By: inuyasha_girl92 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2006 21:19 CST
Comment/Review:
THAT COULD MAKE A REALLY GOOD STORY!! YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE!
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Title: One Shot
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2006 16:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: docbevculver [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2005 00:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Um... to quote Kagome *WOW!*. That was GREAT!!! I truly enjoyed it and I hope that you will maybe add more to it, but if not, this was great all the same. Wonderful! Bravo!
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Reviewed By: Foxyroxy15c [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 11:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
I love it! It was ao awesome u r definitely a great author!
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Reviewed By: Arella [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 17:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! You had me hooked to the very end! Sequel? Please?
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Reviewed By: kodak On: September 11, 2005 01:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wow! I love this story does it really have to be a one shot I would like to know what happens to Kagome and Sesshomaru. Your lemon was awsome by the way very tasteful. I loved the fact that sess had never been kissed before.
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Reviewed By: Kimiko-chan On: July 19, 2005 23:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I've never given a ten on the overall rating before, but I believe you deserve it. Anyway, the plot's good, and the lemon was good, but it could use a little more . . . spice to it. I think that would attract more attention if you write another lemon. But, other than that, the story's fine. Oh, and if you're going to continue, please update as soon as possible! Ja! ^_~
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Reviewed By: Reke [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2005 07:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
please tell me this story is cuntinued becaus you left me at a cliff so if there is more to this story please update as soon as paosable or let my inner demon come and kill you to update okay bye bye!
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Title: Oh My
Reviewed By: lunabelle On: June 27, 2005 23:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh My! I'm speachless. First of all the idea for the story was great, Second you don't have to worry about your skill for writing lemons. Damn girl! The whole plot, story, writing, character personally was truely awsome. You have such a skill for writing. Sesshoumaru remained himself which key to any story. I really don't know what to tell you other than I am speachless and that you kick ass as a writer. Oh wait, there is one bad thing.......... its a one-shot. I really think that this would make a kick ass part story. I don't know what your beta was thinking, but this concept you make an excellent multi-part story. Would you consider continuing it? You have a way with words and a skill for writing. I look forward to anything you create. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: puritygoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2005 22:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Are you awesomw at everything you write????? God I wish i could write like you!!!!!!! You must update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: squirrellou On: June 12, 2005 14:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue this one shot!!! I love it and it would be awesome if you added some more!!!! PLeeeeaaaaaasssseeeee!
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Reviewed By: P. Blue On: June 10, 2005 15:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this story! And I have to agree with what alatero said... After this story I needed to just do something!! Please write more? The story was wonderful!! What happens next?!?
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Reviewed By: alatero [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 18:00 CDT
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If you think this lemon sucks, or even this storyline, there is definitly no hope for the rest of us! I have to say, I really want you to continue....it's a very interesting storyline....and a fabulous lemon. I need a cold shower or a willing guy or a dildo or something.....seriously! I really think I'm gonna run up my water bill to unbelievable heights just trying to calm down after that lemon. Definitly amped me up! My man thanks you for that btw. *shoves idiotic, uncaring, pathetic, useless bf away* Maybe you should write a how-to book or something for the rest of the hopeless male population (i.e. my useless man) so they have a better idea of what they should be doing! Hmm...or you could just send Sess over and I'd be more than willing to let him just knock said useless idiot around. Anyway, it was great! Please update and please please keep writing!
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Title: One Shot
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 23:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: Hoo-Ha!!
Reviewed By: Brenna On: April 22, 2005 19:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have very good taste in grammar. The story is well planned and you are very good at writing a lemon. I don't read many with such good taste such as yours. I applaude you. ^_^
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Title: good job
Reviewed By: MarsMarmalade [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 18:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
I think it was a well written lemon. if you were looking to write something more like straight porn then yeah, it kinda sucked, but i can't think of writting Kago-chan into something like that. it's just not her in her character. Anyway i think you should keep writing your own lemons unless you just can't seem to be getting it right. you really can write a good lemon just not smut.
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Reviewed By: Annaku On: April 17, 2005 15:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey that was pretty good. you should continue this and make it more than just a one shot.
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Title: Lemony Goodness
Reviewed By: black tigeress On: April 03, 2005 20:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
While I believe you did an amazing job, and kept up fluidity very nicly, it just seems to be missing something. Almost like you missed a step. I believe that a little more detail would improve it over all, and add just a pinch more of emotion. I don't know if you've ever baked, but if you had this might just make since. This lemon has all the basic ingridents. It turned out well, and is what you desired. But it is missing the added flavor. Like vanilla or cinnamon. Just a little something else to make it more enjoyable. But it is still very well done, and I do not suggent that you stop. Keep on working on it and I am possitive that you will excell at it.
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