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Title: lonely souls
Reviewed By: blackice [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 15:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what will ranma do when they say what she has to do to become her sister.
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Title: lonely souls
Reviewed By: blackice [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 12:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is a good story to read and wonder what happens to ranma with the lady that joined ranma + ataru. the lady said that ranma had to something to be the her sister. wonder what happens in the new chapter.
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Reviewed By: Rionach On: August 07, 2005 05:47 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
nice to see that you are nearly finished with the revision. Hope to see soon some new stuff as I liked the story very much even if it has a female Ranma. Which I really don't mind much but most stories with it are not worth reading. There are some good ones and yours is one of them. They only manko for me is really that Akane has getting a new chance and an improved body to boat too... but hey as long as she is not going to be the focus who cares. please rewrite the last to chapters here soon... so that we will get to read the new stuff.
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Title: lonely souls
Reviewed By: icers On: August 05, 2005 13:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
will luft tell ranma what she has to do to be her sister and will ranma have some fun will luft later on. it will interesting what happens in the next chapter.
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Title: lonely souls
Reviewed By: blackice [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2005 18:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
does ranma talk to luft about becoming her younger sister and what does ranma have to do for her to become her younger sister? it is a good story to read and wondering what happens in the new chapter of lonely souls.
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Reviewed By: LouieLouie On: June 11, 2005 00:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
Will we be seeing more chapters or has the story been retired?
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Reviewed By: ebp On: March 17, 2005 03:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Love this fanfic, its one of the best ive ever read. fred you have great imagination. The only thing that takes away from it is that in the last chapters are bit overloaded, so many new characters and twists in the story its hard to keep up. And im confused about this harem thing is Ataru really going to sleep with those girls, or use DNA material. The dialogue between him and Ranma was a bit confusing, Its strange she would accept it without any jealousy. Any way good luck in writing the story cant wait for the next update. P.S - Found this site with a fic http://uytsy.anifics.com/LonelySouls.html -was this your first draft of lonely souls? it has many differences
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Title: Spectacular
Reviewed By: Robert Wade On: February 27, 2005 11:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for the incredible story. Please, please, please keep this one going until the end that you have forseen. The Characters are incredibly well done and the situations are thought provoking. Please keep up the excellent work. Robert Wade radiant_light_hawk@hotmail.com
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Reviewed By: J. Carter On: February 05, 2005 13:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, your style for this story has changed in the time since I last read it, but you're doing good. You still have the tendency towards character overload that happens early in the series to muddy the waters a bit, but once I read through the first few chapters, I started to make sense of it. Great attention to detail BTW, and you have the characteristics almost, if not completely, dead on.
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Reviewed By: Priest [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2004 10:26 CDT
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this has been one of the best, if perverted, henti stories i have read. keep up the good work, i look forward to more from you in the future. Ja-ne =(^_^)=
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Reviewed By: Gate On: September 16, 2004 08:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'd rate it lower but it's an epic story that tends to break a bit above average. Weaknesses: 1. Your fic suffers from character overload. 2. Every character has there own little way of butchering the Semi-English language you have going. 3. Instead of tieing up loose threads you compound them by burying them with more plot twists at every turn. 4. The story makes more sense hours after reading it than actualy during. Strenghts: 1. Solid story that stays with you even when not actively reading it.
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Reviewed By: Adyen_Not_Logged On: September 02, 2004 01:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm reading the updated chapters, and I've realized one thing that really bugs me. While in most situation Honor is seemed pointless, I have to say that we wouldn't have any civilization without the concept of honor. The main point I'm trying to make is that honor is all about trust. You trust someone to do something, in return for something else. In times of war, this trust may be broken eventually, but many times it isn't. Even the current concept of money is based on honor. Money by itself isn't worth anything. It's the fact that money represents that you, or whoever you got the money from, contributed to society for you to get something back from it. However, that's not exactly anything to do with the fic, so here's what I want to say: I want to see a character who is completely powerless be able to stand up to Ataru/Ranma/someone powerful, and show them that, just because they're powerful or just because they've been abused doesn't mean that they're always right. Force doesn't not mean just, and sometimes, even with infinate power you can't do anything to change that. I want to see the heroes FAIL, to learn a lession that they will carry like in your previous and oldest stories. I don't want to see a character so full of himself because of self-justified pains: I want to see someone who grew to become a person who learned from ALL their mistakes, not just their most painful ones.
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Reviewed By: Gate Dragon On: October 01, 2003 12:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read this fic since it's appearance on ladycomos's site and have been draw from complete rapture to total indifference. I by habit am a total Ranma Fanfic Fan and tend to skim over almost every other fic. The eventual lack of main character focus ie Ranma & Ataru to focus on various minor characters, caused a total overload in material and a lost of story flow. The various nick names, pet names and language shifts; loses me half the time I'm reading it. A story is not enjoyable if you have to keep re-reading part of it just to understand it. Continual shifts and revisions to chapters causes no end to headachs for me. Quite Flanky there are no real ploblems with the story itself, in fact from the time I started reading it I loved it. But if you teak the Style of Writing, focus a little more on the main characters & quit the constant shifting in chapters you will find yourself with a much higher fan base. I for one will just ignore it till completion and read it then. *shrugs* If I can wait paitently for more chapters of Comes the Cold Dragon I can wait for Lonely Souls
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Title: Re: Fundude Frost Phoniex
Reviewed By: Adyen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2003 05:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
*cough* I distinctly remember it happening in one of the previous version of chapter 10, at the part where Ranma warns Akane off. But, it seems like I was just imagining things. Oops... I think I had that misconception cause it wasn't mentioned any longer in future chapters (now that I checked, it think it was mentioned briefly in chapter 11) and also it didn't have the type of 'power' as in the Ranma canon (not that I really mind, but how could it teach Akane to be a better martial artist if it's not up to standars? ^_^).
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Reviewed By: Fundude Frost Phoniex On: September 27, 2003 21:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
um Adyen if you reread those parts you would see that yes Neko-Ranma did destroy the dogi she also "killed" everyone but genma, she created one of those time bubbles things that she used to make 501 "Mr.Rabbit"'s in sactury for the Lost Stars girls so the only things at the end of the night that were damged was the Tendo sign and Genma and those happened before and after the bubble,and as for your bit about waiting about thier problems well Negako did give reasons for that.(basicly let Ranma,Ataru and others rest and recoopeate from eariler ordeals and grow even closer as a family) so please next time you review read over what you are going to talk about huh?
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