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Reviewed By: Scyggy On: September 27, 2005 22:24 CDT
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...Wow. *rubs at his eyes* that was beautiful. As far as the romantic category goes, you are the single best writer I've ever encountered (in my opinion, at least.) *rubs at his eyes again* Just got somethin stuck in 'em...
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Title: mew?
Reviewed By: firemoonhalk [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2005 19:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry, just have to be nit-pickey... love the story so far but I noticed... an error in gramar... `I will not let this new feelings interfere with our friendship,' should either be 'I will not let these new feelings interfere with our friendship,' or 'I will not let this new feeling interfere with our friendship,' sorry, had to say it... hope you don't mind... tense mix up... I used to do that all the time... ^_^;;
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2005 17:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's a wonderful ending to such a wonderful fic. And fav reviewer? Does that involve getting a trophy? ^_~ J/K. But you can could on me to read your next story. I just hope you don't kill anyone else.... Did I just make you sound like a murderer? Oops. LOL.
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Title: AWww...
Reviewed By: quirkyslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 23:02 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww...this is really awesome. I'm glad you're ending it this way, giving Bella hope and love once again. You're story is beautiful and I'm glad I got a chance to read it. Keep writing, chica!
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 21:12 CDT
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Dissapoint me? Neva! I understand that this is a fic with a theme to it, and yeah... I'm sensitive to killing and suicide. but oddly I can manage to write it. ^^U I would have expected something bad to happen to either Bella, the baby, or both, as there are som estories out there that are just plain sad without a meaning to them. But I have loved this story in the themes it has in it. It is all very true. I would know first hand, I've lost many close family members. Anyway, looking forward to your final addition to this story.
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Title: WAH!
Reviewed By: quirkyslayer (not signed in) On: May 22, 2005 16:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG girl, those last couple of chapters were so sad. I never saw it coming that you would kill off Cole. I hope you have a good reason. *sniffle*
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2005 19:33 CDT
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^^ Yeah. It will either help because she's pregnant and the baby will die too and Bella will suicide, or she'll suicide because she's pregnant. O.o Or you'll give us a happy ending. ^^ Which I doubt. x.x Anyway, I'll shut up about predictions.
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Reviewed By: Amaria(nli) On: May 21, 2005 17:51 CDT
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*whipes awaay tears*as much as I love your story,it's just so sad!It's not funny how fate truely seem's to pull tricks on you when you least expect it.....still a good story,and I can't wait for the next chapter,but it's still so...sad.....
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2005 19:03 CDT
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Awe, this is so sad! ;_; Poor Bella. Poor Cole.
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2005 21:46 CDT
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Oh, you wicked, wicked person! ;_; This just gets better, worse, better, worser. Poor Bella. I hope Cole will be alright.... And wouldn't it be just fitting if she was pregnant now? O.oU ^^ Continue, please!
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Reviewed By: MYSTYQE On: May 18, 2005 19:35 CDT
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OMG!!...i love this story its awesome...but u cant do this!!!...they finally get together for good and u go and kill him!!!its not rite!!! my world will not be rite until they r together forever!!!!...lol...good job with the story very well written
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Reviewed By: Amor [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2005 19:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Reminds me a lot of teenage soap opera, which isn't neccesarily a bad thing. On the negative side, your plot and secondary characters are one-note and/or cliche. On the other hand, the two central characters are very interesting and unique, and their banter is probably the best thing about this story. The story is kind of slow paced, which lets you expand on the character's feelings, but since you only have one central plotline, don't drag it out too long or you'll end up boring people. One final thing:I notice that you write a chapter about every day. Maybe you should try to slow down this schedule, and spend a bit more time on the chapters, to make them even better? Just a few suggestions, your story is pretty good allready, and good for what it is.
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Reviewed By: Amaria(not logged in) On: May 17, 2005 20:59 CDT
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Nice chapter!Finally ot avoiding each other anymore!cool choice of tatoo.....I myself could never be brave enough to get one.Anyways,god chapter,looking forward to the next one!
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Reviewed By: Darkfire Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2005 18:50 CDT
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Awe, I can imagine the pretty flower. ^^ I wonder how Lacey and Dad are going to take it, though. O.oU Anyway, it's alright that you miss a day here and there, we lova ya too much to stay angry with you. *hugs back* And in my opinion, pulling weeds, even the spiky ones, are better than cleaning dog or cat turd. X.x At least for me it's so. I have a sensitive stomach. ^^ Continue at will!
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Title: Whoa
Reviewed By: quirkyslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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What a HAWT chapter! You tease! :hugs:
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