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Title: CONGRATS
Reviewed By: Kendraless [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2005 11:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of al CONCRATULATIONS on winning IYF Second Quarter 2005 Best Lemon you deserved it. I really liked this story not only for the lemon but I screamed when InuYasha got caught in the act. And the level of humiliation that I felt was so profound that I actually had trouble reading any further for 5 min. I hope you do write a sequel (longer longer sequel with heeps of chapters) Ps: yes I'm being a selfish fan who only wants to read more.
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Reviewed By: Drake Clawfang On: July 31, 2005 16:43 PDT
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a well-written one-shot lemon is hard to find. I'm not against PWP, but I like PwP (Porn WITH plot) more. And that's what this was. a nice balance of plot and lemon. characterization was a little off, but then, we never get any indication from the show about how much Inu of Kags would know about sex. that being said, you used what you had (Jap culture), and used it well. There's another good one-shot called 'fear of fear itself', where he's afraid to take Kags cause he's hanyou. a great story. even though they didn;t consumate the ordeal, it was a breaht of fresh air. Too many people forget that Kagome is still just a teenager having sex without protection in their stories. Teenager motherhood, here she comes! Lol, again, great.
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~NSI On: July 09, 2005 17:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
is there a higher rating for this story? there should be. you know, i wondered for a moment while reading the opening if inuyasha would truely be that...innocent...to the knowledge of mating. but reading your description and the plot behind your words i realized how true it was. very well done. i don't think your characters are overly ooc, hardly at all really. also, it's humerous that you did an editorial on the story. very interesting. anyway, this is really a great story!!
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Reviewed By: kareemachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2005 12:47 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for writing an intelligent story with well thought-out characters and believable situation. I was impressed with the storyline, your descriptive abilities, the story's resolution, but especially the fact that you had Inuyasha and Kagome acting within character and in an interesting way. Very, very readable. And I have to agree with other reviewers in that I'm hoping for a sequel, or even better if you make this a chapter of a bigger story. It reads like you have it in you!
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Reviewed By: Rhayne On: June 12, 2005 00:00 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nicely done. I found your characterizations really interesting and well done. A well written lemon with an actual short story is a rare find. Thank you. I would definately read any sequels. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Something Real
Reviewed By: Ranuel On: May 10, 2005 18:00 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This just cries out for a sequel. After all they each need to reasure themselves that it WAS something real. This is great erotica that respects both characters.
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Reviewed By: dari'sgrl On: May 05, 2005 15:05 PDT
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it was really good i think you should write a continuation..... lovelovelovelovelovelovelove xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
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Reviewed By: futekioosha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 22:11 PDT
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the characterization of your one-shot and your explanation are wonderful. the citurs was tastefully done, and I enjoyed reading your fic. Thank you for sharing your awesome gift.
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: kamackie21 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 19:52 PDT
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This is an incredible story and I would not mind reading a sequel. Too many times Inuyasha is portrayed as the aggressor and I think that what you wrote may be more realistic. You wrote Kagome and Inuyasha very well and you kept them in character. Again, this was a great story.
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Title: Sweet
Reviewed By: FFD On: May 01, 2005 16:30 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed this very much. Very well written, look forward to reading more. Feudal Dream Demon
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Reviewed By: Kicnlus_lennyasha On: May 01, 2005 15:05 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
UUUUmmmmm....Ok, this is NOT A FLAME!!!!!!!! Just someone blinking rapidly and blushing rather red! I liked it - but uuuh...dare I say "surprised" was I when they went ...er ...that far? Don't mind me, I don't read these things normally, but I'm a sucker for Inuyasha's childhood stories of angsty sadness! I must say, I DID skip over most of the ... er...more..."descriptive" paragraphs shall we say but I really liked it! POOR INU GETTING KICKED AND HIT WHILE SEALED! That part made me sad haha. Keep it up, sequel would be good!
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Reviewed By: RaptorChicky On: May 01, 2005 01:11 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O_O Wow... -tries to come up w/ the proper words- Wow...that has to be THE BEST lemon/lime I've read in a very, very, VERY long time. (I'm thinkin' somebody needs to be nominated for IYFanguild 2nd Quarter...) Oh, and on the possibility of a sequel? Please say you will. -puppy-dog eyes-
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Reviewed By: Dark Angel Of Love(not logged in) On: April 30, 2005 22:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! that was sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good! I don't even have the words to say how good is was, you left me spechless. and I LOVE IT! please please PLEASE write a sequal to this! I'd love to read it! and if you don't, then write another story like this quick! ^______^
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Reviewed By: rin136 On: April 30, 2005 21:33 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story was good. If you write a sequel go for it. I especially liked you bringing up Inuyasha's childhood.
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Reviewed By: Ookami88 On: April 30, 2005 21:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
...Wow. I am in absolute awe of your writing style and skills. True, there are a few spelling/grammar errors, but nobody is perfect, and it doesn't detract much from the overall effect. I think this is a wonderful exploration of Kagome's character and her feelings for Inuyasha, and I'd say you are justified in your assertion that they could act and react in this way. A very enjoyable 'fic to read. ...and a sequel would be wonderful. :D
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